Beradaram, Ghazal pasand aayi... meri khush-naseebi hai. Kuchh ek sher pe aap ne 'explanations' dene ka ishaara kiya hai... main koshish karta hoon... 1. Pehlay wala dard puranaa ...... Khawar Bhai Saheb, farz kiziye ke aap ne guzishta kal mere ko ek 'Thappad' lagaya tha... aur aaj bhi ek 'Thappad'...

Mohtaram Janab Munir Armaan Nasimi SaHeb aap ki ghazlait parh kar hamesha hi achchaa lagtaa hai. mukhtiSirun 'arz karne ki ijaazat chaahooN ga, 1. pehlay wala dard puranaa ? pehlay walaa bhi to puranaa hi ke ma'noN meN naheeN aa-aye ga, ? 2. bohat khoob! 3. ye sher bhi achhchaa laga. 4. bohat zabar...

Salam jaanaaN ji, aap ki shaairy meN bohat jaan hai. :-). aisi khoobSoorat ghazal paish karne par daad qubool kijiaye. 1. matlaa bohat mutacir kun hai. paRha kar be ikhtiaar waah nikalti hai. 2. pehlay miSra meN lafz "gumaN" se ye naheeN pataa chalaa ke ye khushgamaani ki baat ho rahi hai ...

Dosto,

mujhe ye bataatay huway bohat khushi meHsoos ho rahi hai ke list ke pehlay do sections

1. kuch dilchasp silsalay.
2. lafz par ashaar

mukammal ho chukay haiN.

mukhliS,
Muhammad K. Siddiqui.

nishandahi k leeaye shukriaya. ji meN waqt milte hi kar daitaa hooN.

ji meN waqt milte hi kar daitaa hooN.

Janab Mohtaram SARWAR RAAZ SaHeb, aap ki khoobSoorat ghazal nazar se guzri. ghazal bila shubaa bohat shaandaar hai. aor is ki jitni ta'reef ki ja-aye utni kam hai. Hasb e 'aadat meN ne koshish ki ke aik ashaar ka intekhaab kar ke likh sakooN ke mujh ye ashaar zydaa pasand aa-aye laikin kuch faislaa...

aadaab arz hai aik muddat baa'd is bazm meiN apni aik ghazal ke saath Haazir hua hooN, umeed hai apni aaraa se navaazeN ge. aik daireena tamannaa ko huvaidaa karne ham ke aaye hain dil-o-jaaN ka taqaaza karne din gayaa meri masarrat ka janaaza le ker "raat aayee hai mire gham meiN izaafah karn...

Janab Muzaffar SaHeb aik aor shaandaar ghazal par daad o mubarak baad qubool kijiaye. in ashaar ka khaSosun zikr karnaa chaahooN ga, ada-e-khaaS se cheRee hai daastaaN maiN ne! kiyaa hai ehl-e-GulistaaN ko ham ZubaaN maiN ne! huwaa jo GharQ safeenah to yeh kheyaal aayaa hawa-e-tund meN kholaa kiyoo...

shurakaa-e-moshairaa URDUBANDHAN.COM ki jaanib se ab tak ke shurkaa e mushairaa June 01, 2007 --- Janab Jawaid Badaui SaHeb - http://forum.urdubandhan.com/phpBB2/viewtopic.php?t=4613 June 04, 2007 --- Janab Haamid Baaqri SaHeb - http://forum.urdubandhan.com/phpBB2/viewtopic.php?t=4630 June 04, 2007...

Janab Hamid SaHeb TarHi miSra, "meN daastan e gham na sunaaooN to kya karooN" shayed bohat hi zarkhaiz hai. aap ki ghazal se pehlay is par janab muzaffar SaHeb aor phir Janab Jawaid SaHeb ki ghazal paRh rahaa thaa. donoN hi ghazloaN me kuch sher bohat shaandaar thay. bila mubaalghaa dil k...

Dosto, aik purani ghazal ki nayee shakl paish e khidmat hai. nayee shakl se muraad compostion naheeN hai :-) balke mairi muraad ashaar meN tabdeeli hai :-) aap se raa-aye ki darkhaast hai, 1. konsay ashaar aap ko pasand ayaa= 2. konsa ashaar meN behtari ki gunjaish hai = 3. konsay ashaar ghazal se n...