abhi kuch log haiN uspaar meray
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abhi kuch log haiN uspaar meray
Jeddah mai di gai aik tarah,:abhi kuch log haiN uspaar meray" par kahi gai aik ghazal..
unhaiN katwa rahay the yaar meray
shhajar the jitnay sayadaar meray
kahaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh e pa sab
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray
badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray
koi to lay sabaq in zalzaloN say
bharay haiN shahr ke akhbar meray
banaya hai makaN donoN ne milkar
zameeN unki dar o deewar meray
bhikari ki tarah na daad mangoN
koi kaasa nahi ashaar meray
unhaiN katwa rahay the yaar meray
shhajar the jitnay sayadaar meray
kahaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh e pa sab
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray
badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray
koi to lay sabaq in zalzaloN say
bharay haiN shahr ke akhbar meray
banaya hai makaN donoN ne milkar
zameeN unki dar o deewar meray
bhikari ki tarah na daad mangoN
koi kaasa nahi ashaar meray
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kahaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh e pa sab
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray
badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray
mahtab qadr sahib . umda, bay had umdaa ghazal tarteeb de hay .. buhut hi khubsoorat ashaar hain sab kay sab aur takhayyal bhi khoob hay ..umda aslob e beyaan hay ..share kernay ka bay had shukria
waqar masood
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray
badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray
mahtab qadr sahib . umda, bay had umdaa ghazal tarteeb de hay .. buhut hi khubsoorat ashaar hain sab kay sab aur takhayyal bhi khoob hay ..umda aslob e beyaan hay ..share kernay ka bay had shukria
waqar masood
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Re: abhi kuch log haiN uspaar meray
salaam Sarfaraz saaHib,
aapkii taraHii Ghazal paRh kar bahot lutf aayaa. subHaan Allah, waah waah, kia kahne. Allah kare zor-e-qalam aur ziyaadah. pahle she'r ko to aap ENVIRONMENTALISTS ke nazar kar deN. vo bahot Khush hoNge:
unheN kaTvaa rahe the yaar mere
shajar the jitne saaya_daar mere
urdustan mushaai're meN ek daf'a ek tasveer dii gaii thii jis par Ghazal kahnii thii. vo tasveer ek saaHil kii thii jis meN chand naqsh-e-paa nazar aa rahe the. us tasveer par yeh she'r zabardast fiT baiThta hai:
kahaaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh-e-paa sab
huve kiuN raaste dushwaar mere
aapkaa yeh she'r paRh kar ek gaane ke chand ek bol yaad aa gaye:
achchhe ki bure! ham jais the
ham jaise the, ham vaise haiN
insaan nahiiN vo mausam hai
jo waqt ke saath badalte haiN
badalte mausamoN ke saath badle
vo jo ai'Hbaab the do_chaar mere
Tsunaamii kii tabaah_kun asaaraat aur halakat-e-insaanii paRh kar aaNsoo nikal aate haiN. kaash hamaare a'maal behtar hoN taa_ki aise qai'hr-e-Ilaahii se bach sakeN. aameen.
koii to le sabaq in zalzaloN se
bhare haiN shai'hr ke aKhbaar mere
bhai waah! kia saajhe_daarii hai...subHaanAllah!
banaayaa hai makaaN donoN ne mil kar
zameeN unkii, dar_o_deewar mere
bahot KhooB janaab!ek kaamiyaab Ghazal share karne par meri taraf se DheroN daad_o_taHseen aur mubaarak_baad, gar qubool uftaad.
faqat Khaak_saar,
Hashmat
aapkii taraHii Ghazal paRh kar bahot lutf aayaa. subHaan Allah, waah waah, kia kahne. Allah kare zor-e-qalam aur ziyaadah. pahle she'r ko to aap ENVIRONMENTALISTS ke nazar kar deN. vo bahot Khush hoNge:
unheN kaTvaa rahe the yaar mere
shajar the jitne saaya_daar mere
urdustan mushaai're meN ek daf'a ek tasveer dii gaii thii jis par Ghazal kahnii thii. vo tasveer ek saaHil kii thii jis meN chand naqsh-e-paa nazar aa rahe the. us tasveer par yeh she'r zabardast fiT baiThta hai:
kahaaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh-e-paa sab
huve kiuN raaste dushwaar mere
aapkaa yeh she'r paRh kar ek gaane ke chand ek bol yaad aa gaye:
achchhe ki bure! ham jais the
ham jaise the, ham vaise haiN
insaan nahiiN vo mausam hai
jo waqt ke saath badalte haiN
badalte mausamoN ke saath badle
vo jo ai'Hbaab the do_chaar mere
Tsunaamii kii tabaah_kun asaaraat aur halakat-e-insaanii paRh kar aaNsoo nikal aate haiN. kaash hamaare a'maal behtar hoN taa_ki aise qai'hr-e-Ilaahii se bach sakeN. aameen.
koii to le sabaq in zalzaloN se
bhare haiN shai'hr ke aKhbaar mere
bhai waah! kia saajhe_daarii hai...subHaanAllah!
banaayaa hai makaaN donoN ne mil kar
zameeN unkii, dar_o_deewar mere
bahot KhooB janaab!ek kaamiyaab Ghazal share karne par meri taraf se DheroN daad_o_taHseen aur mubaarak_baad, gar qubool uftaad.
faqat Khaak_saar,
Hashmat
Re: abhi kuch log haiN uspaar meray
Wah!!! Bahut khoob Sarfaraz sahab....ye ash'aar bahut umda hain..daad haazir hai :)Mahtab Qadr wrote:
badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray
koi to lay sabaq in zalzaloN say
bharay haiN shahr ke akhbar meray
banaya hai makaN donoN ne milkar
zameeN unki dar o deewar meray
Shumaila
Koi pooche humse hamaari haalat ka sabab
to ashk baha kar bhi baat adhoori reh jati hai
Waqt jaise kahin thehar sa gaya hai
Na Gham jaata hai na khushi aati hai
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Re: abhi kuch log haiN uspaar meray
Mahtab Qadr wrote:Jeddah mai di gai aik tarah,:abhi kuch log haiN uspaar meray" par kahi gai aik ghazal..
unhaiN katwa rahay the yaar meray
shhajar the jitnay sayadaar meray
wah bohat a'Alaa bohat khoob!!!! zabardast!!!!!
kahaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh e pa sab
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray
mukarrer zabardast!!!!insaan ki zindagi maiN aise muqaam bhi aa jate haiN keh yeh sochnaa hi peRtaa hai
badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray
oh mere khudaa kayaa hqeeqat bayaan ki haiaa pne bhaa saheb.
koi to lay sabaq in zalzaloN say
bharay haiN shahr ke akhbar meray
aaj tau aap kaa shaiiree ka shaheen bohat bulaand parwaaz ker rehaa hai. wah bohat a'Alaa janaab! kayaa hqeeqat nigaari ki hai Wallah
banaya hai makaN donoN ne milkar
zameeN unki dar o deewar meray
:) encrochment? hahaha mazaaq ber teraf bohat achaa shaer hai.
bhikari ki tarah na daad mangoN
koi kaasa nahi ashaar meray
"koi kaasa nhahiN ash'Aar mere "
khoob ast!!! dilee daad qbul fermaaeiN moHteram
live and let live
Assalam-o-a'laikum,
moHtarami M.Q SaaHib,
subHana Allah janaab !! kyaa khene aapne tu meHfil hi looT lee
bahut hi u'mdah ghazal !! :D . masha Allah aap ne bahut u'mdah asha'aar nikaale aaye haiN . mujhe tu poori ghazal hi pasand aayee, daad qabool kejeye :D . shukriya
mokhliS: Zia Baloch
moHtarami M.Q SaaHib,
subHana Allah janaab !! kyaa khene aapne tu meHfil hi looT lee
bahut hi u'mdah ghazal !! :D . masha Allah aap ne bahut u'mdah asha'aar nikaale aaye haiN . mujhe tu poori ghazal hi pasand aayee, daad qabool kejeye :D . shukriya
mokhliS: Zia Baloch
Dikhaadi shaan, phir ahl-e-chaman ko, Be-niyaazi ki
Khamoshi se jhatak kar, aaj phir, dast-e-sabaa maiN ne
Zia Baloch
Khamoshi se jhatak kar, aaj phir, dast-e-sabaa maiN ne
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wah wah
mohtaram
MEHTAB QADR SSAHIB
apni is khoobsurat ghazal per meri dili daad qubool kareiN. is tarah meiN
maine bhi kuchh koshish ki hai agar waqt mila to kabhi pesh karooNga.
kiya karooN meri masrrofiat meri raah meiN hayel hai.
khair andaish
irfan barabankwi
MEHTAB QADR SSAHIB
apni is khoobsurat ghazal per meri dili daad qubool kareiN. is tarah meiN
maine bhi kuchh koshish ki hai agar waqt mila to kabhi pesh karooNga.
kiya karooN meri masrrofiat meri raah meiN hayel hai.
khair andaish
irfan barabankwi
iHtisab apne naqaayis ka mujhe aataa hei
Saare Aalam ki maiN taqseer kahaN tak dekhuN
Irfan Barabankwi.
Saare Aalam ki maiN taqseer kahaN tak dekhuN
Irfan Barabankwi.
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Mohatram waqar masood sahib , izzatafzai ke lye mashkoor hoN warna banda e nacheez is layeq kahaN.waqar_masood wrote:kahaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh e pa sab
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray
badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray
mahtab qadr sahib . umda, bay had umdaa ghazal tarteeb de hay .. buhut hi khubsoorat ashaar hain sab kay sab aur takhayyal bhi khoob hay ..umda aslob e beyaan hay ..share kernay ka bay had shukria
waqar masood
shukria
mahtab qadr
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Re: abhi kuch log haiN uspaar meray
mohatram Hashmat sahib isqadar bharpoor khoobsurat tabsire aur daad kelye mamnoon hoNHashmat Usmani wrote:salaam Sarfaraz saaHib,
aapkii taraHii Ghazal paRh kar bahot lutf aayaa. subHaan Allah, waah waah, kia kahne. Allah kare zor-e-qalam aur ziyaadah. pahle she'r ko to aap ENVIRONMENTALISTS ke nazar kar deN. vo bahot Khush hoNge:
unheN kaTvaa rahe the yaar mere
shajar the jitne saaya_daar mere
urdustan mushaai're meN ek daf'a ek tasveer dii gaii thii jis par Ghazal kahnii thii. vo tasveer ek saaHil kii thii jis meN chand naqsh-e-paa nazar aa rahe the. us tasveer par yeh she'r zabardast fiT baiThta hai:
kahaaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh-e-paa sab
huve kiuN raaste dushwaar mere
aapkaa yeh she'r paRh kar ek gaane ke chand ek bol yaad aa gaye:
achchhe ki bure! ham jais the
ham jaise the, ham vaise haiN
insaan nahiiN vo mausam hai
jo waqt ke saath badalte haiN
badalte mausamoN ke saath badle
vo jo ai'Hbaab the do_chaar mere
Tsunaamii kii tabaah_kun asaaraat aur halakat-e-insaanii paRh kar aaNsoo nikal aate haiN. kaash hamaare a'maal behtar hoN taa_ki aise qai'hr-e-Ilaahii se bach sakeN. aameen.
koii to le sabaq in zalzaloN se
bhare haiN shai'hr ke aKhbaar mere
bhai waah! kia saajhe_daarii hai...subHaanAllah!
banaayaa hai makaaN donoN ne mil kar
zameeN unkii, dar_o_deewar mere
bahot KhooB janaab!ek kaamiyaab Ghazal share karne par meri taraf se DheroN daad_o_taHseen aur mubaarak_baad, gar qubool uftaad.
faqat Khaak_saar,
Hashmat
shukria
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Re: abhi kuch log haiN uspaar meray
shummu ji aapka isqadar masroofiat ke bawajood hameiN daad dena yaqeenan aik qeemti amar mai jiskelye mai aapka mashkoor hoN.Shummu wrote:Wah!!! Bahut khoob Sarfaraz sahab....ye ash'aar bahut umda hain..daad haazir hai :)Mahtab Qadr wrote:
badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray
koi to lay sabaq in zalzaloN say
bharay haiN shahr ke akhbar meray
banaya hai makaN donoN ne milkar
zameeN unki dar o deewar meray
Shumaila
shukria
Mahtab Qadr
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Re: abhi kuch log haiN uspaar meray
Tahira Masood sahibatahira Masood wrote:Mahtab Qadr wrote:Jeddah mai di gai aik tarah,:abhi kuch log haiN uspaar meray" par kahi gai aik ghazal..
unhaiN katwa rahay the yaar meray
shhajar the jitnay sayadaar meray
wah bohat a'Alaa bohat khoob!!!! zabardast!!!!!
kahaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh e pa sab
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray
mukarrer zabardast!!!!insaan ki zindagi maiN aise muqaam bhi aa jate haiN keh yeh sochnaa hi peRtaa hai
badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray
oh mere khudaa kayaa hqeeqat bayaan ki haiaa pne bhaa saheb.
koi to lay sabaq in zalzaloN say
bharay haiN shahr ke akhbar meray
aaj tau aap kaa shaiiree ka shaheen bohat bulaand parwaaz ker rehaa hai. wah bohat a'Alaa janaab! kayaa hqeeqat nigaari ki hai Wallah
banaya hai makaN donoN ne milkar
zameeN unki dar o deewar meray
:) encrochment? hahaha mazaaq ber teraf bohat achaa shaer hai.
bhikari ki tarah na daad mangoN
koi kaasa nahi ashaar meray
"koi kaasa nhahiN ash'Aar mere "
khoob ast!!! dilee daad qbul fermaaeiN moHteram
ye to aapki zarraaaanawaazi hai, ke aapne itni bharpoor daad se nawaza mai is hausla afzai ke lye mashkoor hoN.
Mahtab Qadr
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Star Mind wrote:Assalam-o-a'laikum,
moHtarami M.Q SaaHib,
subHana Allah janaab !! kyaa khene aapne tu meHfil hi looT lee
bahut hi u'mdah ghazal !! :D . masha Allah aap ne bahut u'mdah asha'aar nikaale aaye haiN . mujhe tu poori ghazal hi pasand aayee, daad qabool kejeye :D . shukriya
mokhliS: Zia Baloch
bradar e azeez Zia sahib , JazakAllah khair, mahfileiN lootna to aap jaise ghazal ke shahzadoN ka kaam hai ham to apne afkaar e paraganda se jo kuch ban parhe pesh kardete haiN, kuch na samjhe khuda kare koi
shukria pasandeedgi ke izhaar ka
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Re: abhi kuch log haiN uspaar meray
Najm sahib khushaamdeeed , aapki shirkat yaqeenan hamare lye aik sarmaya hogi. daad o tahseen kelye mashkoor o mamnoon hoN. aapki tajveez ki qadar karta hoN misre ki tabdeeeli ke baare mai inshallah ghaur karoNganajm wrote:dearest mahtab jee, aadaab-o-tasleemat.Mahtab Qadr wrote:Jeddah mai di gai aik tarah,:abhi kuch log haiN uspaar meray" par kahi gai aik ghazal..
unhaiN katwa rahay the yaar meray
shhajar the jitnay sayadaar meray
kahaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh e pa sab
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray
badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray
koi to lay sabaq in zalzaloN say
bharay haiN shahr ke akhbar meray
banaya hai makaN donoN ne milkar
zameeN unki dar o deewar meray
bhikari ki tarah na daad mangoN
koi kaasa nahi ashaar meray
aap ki Ghazal paRhi. bohat achchii lagii. har she'r dosre se baRh kar hai.
aap ki meHfil nau-waarad hooN. leHaaza logoN ko bilkul naheeN jaantaa aur aap se bhi pehli dafa'a ham-kalam hooN. hukm-e-izan mile to aik baat arz karna chahtaa thaa.
aap ka ye she'r bohat achaa hai. agar pehle misra'e ko yooN badal diyaa jaaye to is ka lutf aur dobaalaa ho jaataa hai.kahaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh e pa sab
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray
kahaN gum naqsh e pa sab ho gaye haiN
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray
ummeed karta hooN merii ye jisaarat giraaN na guzrae gii.
taalib-e-du'aa
Najm
shukria
Mahtab Qadr