sabhi ahbab-e sukhan ko AADAB ek ghazal pesh-e khidmat hay
GHAZAL
bhool baiThy thaY jahaaN maiN chand log
khaa kay jhooti pyaar ki sogandh log
haadsay par ab koi ruktaa nahiN
apnay apnay waqt kay paaband log
kuch na kuch Ejaad kartay hi rahay
be hunar be bus zaroorat mand log
jis qabilay say ta,alluq hay mera
os qabilay kay faqat haiN chand log
Umr haatoN say nikal jaati hay aur
Sochtay rahtay haiN ghairatmand log
doobnay walaa to Obhraa bhi nahi
koshishaiN kartay rahay harchand log
lamhaa lamhaa joR kar bantaa hay jo
ToR detay haiN wohi sambandh log
maiN bhut takheer say pahuncha wahan
kar chukay thay ghar kay sub dar band log
teri bakhshi zindgi maiN aey khudaa
Lay rahay haiN muot ka aanand log
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aapky mashwaroN ka intzaar rahayga
rukhsar
ek ghazal ( bhool baiThy thay )
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Azeezi Rukhsar SaaHab
aaap ki deegar ghazal per apni aara pahle hi irsaal kar chuka hoon. Yeh bhi bohat Haseen ghazal hai. bohat dushwaar qawafee ko bohut KhubSuratee se nibhaya hai aap ne. meree daad qubool kijiye.
Sambandh qafiye wale sher ke miSraa.e oolah meN "typo" hai thik kar lijiyega. bahr ke hasaab se "bantaa HAI jo" hona chaahiye.'
Ziyadah doa,
MuKhliS
Jawaid Badauni
aaap ki deegar ghazal per apni aara pahle hi irsaal kar chuka hoon. Yeh bhi bohat Haseen ghazal hai. bohat dushwaar qawafee ko bohut KhubSuratee se nibhaya hai aap ne. meree daad qubool kijiye.
Sambandh qafiye wale sher ke miSraa.e oolah meN "typo" hai thik kar lijiyega. bahr ke hasaab se "bantaa HAI jo" hona chaahiye.'
Ziyadah doa,
MuKhliS
Jawaid Badauni
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Re: ek ghazal ( bhool baiThy thay )
haadsay par ab koi ruktaa nahiN
apnay apnay waqt kay paaband log
bohat hi Khoob ruKhsaar saaHibah, daad HaaZir hai, gar qabool uftaad.
SAMEER
apnay apnay waqt kay paaband log
bohat hi Khoob ruKhsaar saaHibah, daad HaaZir hai, gar qabool uftaad.
SAMEER
mohtaram Jawaid Badauni sahib
aadab
aapki daad aur huosla afzaai ka be hud mamnoon hon bhut shukriyaa
aap nay durust kahaa SAMBANDH qafiy walay sher main ( HAY ) type honay say reh gayaa tha
main nay durost kia magar ghazal paje par do jagah print ho gai
huosla afzai ka baar-e digar shukriyaa
rukhsar
aadab
aapki daad aur huosla afzaai ka be hud mamnoon hon bhut shukriyaa
aap nay durust kahaa SAMBANDH qafiy walay sher main ( HAY ) type honay say reh gayaa tha
main nay durost kia magar ghazal paje par do jagah print ho gai
huosla afzai ka baar-e digar shukriyaa
rukhsar
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rukhsar wrote:mohtaram Jawaid Badauni sahib
aadab
aapki daad aur huosla afzaai ka be hud mamnoon hon bhut shukriyaa
aap nay durust kahaa SAMBANDH qafiy walay sher main ( HAY ) type honay say reh gayaa thamaiN ne doosri jagah se aap ki ghazal delete kar dee hai jaisee ki aap ki marZee thee.main nay durost kia magar ghazal paje par do jagah print ho gai
Jawaid
huosla afzai ka baar-e digar shukriyaa
rukhsar