• Sher ke doosre misre ke pehle/aakhri alfaaz se sher kahiye!

Posted: **Fri May 20, 2005 12:49 pm**

sara_j wrote:har shaakh-e-gul ko dhoonda, dekhi kali kali mein

lekin teri adayein paayi nahi kisi mein

lekin / mein

kahaaN laa ke mara hay aap ne bhi sara j sahibaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!!!!!!!!!!!

ab aap hi is pe dijiye
koee she,r
mujhe to koee esa yaad naheeN jo
''lekin'' ya '' meiN'' se shuruu, hota ho

:P

Posted: **Sat May 21, 2005 1:21 am**

najma wrote:
sara_j wrote:har shaakh-e-gul ko dhoonda, dekhi kali kali mein
lekin teri adayein paayi nahi kisi mein

lekin / mein
mujhe to koee esa yaad naheeN jo ''lekin'' ya '' meiN'' se shuruu, hota ho :P

maiN ne bhii pichhli baat bahot jhak maarii thii...bil_aaKhior mujhe fil_badeeh she'r kah kar peechhaa chhuRaanaa paRaa thaa

ab AAPKI BAARI hai, ham dil thaam ke baiThte haiN

Posted: **Sat May 21, 2005 1:29 am**

sara jeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

ab fil-badee, jo keh sakii keh diya
aur aap par bohat gussa bhi aarahaa hay==========

tamaatar :P
lekin tumhii batao k lik.kheN to kya likheN
tum ne to aazmaane ka Thekaaa hi le liya
najma

Posted: **Sat May 21, 2005 1:31 am**

najma wrote:sara jeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
ab fil-badee, jo keh sakii keh diya
aur aap par bohat gussa bhi aarahaa hay========== tamaatar :P
lekin tumhii batao k lik.kheN to kya likheN
tum ne to aazmaane ka Thekaaa hi le liya
najma

Posted: **Sat May 21, 2005 1:33 am**

Hashmat Usmani wrote:
najma wrote:sara jeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
ab fil-badee, jo keh sakii keh diya
aur aap par bohat gussa bhi aarahaa hay========== tamaatar :P
lekin tumhii batao k lik.kheN to kya likheN
tum ne to aazmaane ka Thekaaa hi le liya
najma

aur kya======
sara ki bach,chii daal daal kach,chii
tamaatar

Posted: **Sat May 21, 2005 7:08 am**

hamaari dousti ne kitne rangeeN gul khilaaye heiN

Miri deewanagi per bhii wo akcar muskuraaye heiN.

iiri/heiN

Posted: **Sat May 21, 2005 8:41 am**

yaqeeN mohkam, amal paiham, mohabbata faatah-e-aalam
jihad-e-zindagaanii meiN ye haiN mardoN ki shamsheereN

jihaad/shamsheer

Posted: **Sat May 21, 2005 6:08 pm**

sara_j wrote:
najma wrote:yaqeeN mohkam, amal paiham, mohabbata faatah-e-aalam
jihad-e-zindagaanii meiN ye haiN mardoN ki shamsheereN

jihaad/shamsheer
mujhe tou nahi milraha koi shair aur filbadeh bhi nahi samjh aa raha so filwaqt to yehi pesh hai:

jazba-e-be_iKHtiyaar-e-shauq dekha chaahiye
seena-e-shamsheer se baahar hai dam shamsheer ka

lekin Ustad ji ka intezar hai voh zaroor kuch likhdenge :P

to phir aap ne haar maan lii naaaaaaaaa :P

seena-e-sad-chaak kya hoga rafuu
kis tarah unko maiN chara-gar kahooN
bafis ahmad siddiqui

kis/kahooN

Posted: **Sun May 22, 2005 8:39 am**

mehfil meiN un kii aaj bhi ham ajnabii se thay
ab aabroo-e-ishq, yahaaN tak chalii gaee

nafis ahmad siddiqui

Posted: **Sun May 22, 2005 6:36 pm**

mujhe aarzoo thi siki, wo muqaam aagayaa hay

mire dil kidhakanoN meiN tira naam aagayaa hay

mire/hay

Posted: **Mon May 23, 2005 10:15 pm**

khaaN ye martabah mera, ke takleef-e-sharakat dooN
magar mehmaaN hueyhaiN baadshah,akcar faqeeroN ke

magar/ ke/faqeeroN

Posted: **Tue May 24, 2005 4:21 am**

chale to kat hi jaeyga safar aahita aahita
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''aahistah''

Posted: **Tue May 24, 2005 5:31 am**

najma wrote:chale to kat hi jaeyga safar aahita aahita
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''aahistah''

aapkaa she'r na mukammil hai. aur aaKhiri lafz to "aahista" hai magar dusre misr'e kaa pahlaa lafz kia hai?

please aap ise delete kar ke koii nayaa she'r dijiiye. shukria

Posted: **Tue May 24, 2005 10:52 am**

Aahistah chalte chalte vahaaN aagaye heiN ham

koii bahaanah sunne kii Aadat nahiN rahi.

(koii/rehi)

Nasir.
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Posted: **Tue May 24, 2005 10:58 am**

koee ummed bar naheeN aatii, koee soorat nazar naheeN aatii
maut ka ik din mu,ayyan hay, neen kyuuN raat bhar naheeN aatii

maut/aatii

Sher ke doosre misre ke pehle/aakhri alfaaz se sher kahiye!

"hamaari"

"aahistah"