Mahtab Qadr wrote:
badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray

koi to lay sabaq in zalzaloN say
bharay haiN shahr ke akhbar meray

banaya hai makaN donoN ne milkar
zameeN unki dar o deewar meray

Mahtab Qadr wrote:Jeddah mai di gai aik tarah,:abhi kuch log haiN uspaar meray" par kahi gai aik ghazal..

unhaiN katwa rahay the yaar meray
shhajar the jitnay sayadaar meray

wah bohat a'Alaa bohat khoob!!!! zabardast!!!!!

kahaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh e pa sab
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray

mukarrer zabardast!!!!insaan ki zindagi maiN aise muqaam bhi aa jate haiN keh yeh sochnaa hi peRtaa hai


badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray

oh mere khudaa kayaa hqeeqat bayaan ki haiaa pne bhaa saheb.


koi to lay sabaq in zalzaloN say
bharay haiN shahr ke akhbar meray

aaj tau aap kaa shaiiree ka shaheen bohat bulaand parwaaz ker rehaa hai. wah bohat a'Alaa janaab! kayaa hqeeqat nigaari ki hai Wallah


banaya hai makaN donoN ne milkar
zameeN unki dar o deewar meray


:) encrochment? hahaha mazaaq ber teraf bohat achaa shaer hai.

bhikari ki tarah na daad mangoN
koi kaasa nahi ashaar meray

"koi kaasa nhahiN ash'Aar mere "
khoob ast!!! dilee daad qbul fermaaeiN moHteram

waqar_masood wrote:kahaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh e pa sab
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray

badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray

mahtab qadr sahib . umda, bay had umdaa ghazal tarteeb de hay .. buhut hi khubsoorat ashaar hain sab kay sab aur takhayyal bhi khoob hay ..umda aslob e beyaan hay ..share kernay ka bay had shukria

waqar masood

Hashmat Usmani wrote:salaam Sarfaraz saaHib,

aapkii taraHii Ghazal paRh kar bahot lutf aayaa. subHaan Allah, waah waah, kia kahne. Allah kare zor-e-qalam aur ziyaadah. pahle she'r ko to aap ENVIRONMENTALISTS ke nazar kar deN. vo bahot Khush hoNge:

unheN kaTvaa rahe the yaar mere
shajar the jitne saaya_daar mere

urdustan mushaai're meN ek daf'a ek tasveer dii gaii thii jis par Ghazal kahnii thii. vo tasveer ek saaHil kii thii jis meN chand naqsh-e-paa nazar aa rahe the. us tasveer par yeh she'r zabardast fiT baiThta hai:

kahaaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh-e-paa sab
huve kiuN raaste dushwaar mere

aapkaa yeh she'r paRh kar ek gaane ke chand ek bol yaad aa gaye:

achchhe ki bure! ham jais the
ham jaise the, ham vaise haiN
insaan nahiiN vo mausam hai
jo waqt ke saath badalte haiN

badalte mausamoN ke saath badle
vo jo ai'Hbaab the do_chaar mere

Tsunaamii kii tabaah_kun asaaraat aur halakat-e-insaanii paRh kar aaNsoo nikal aate haiN. kaash hamaare a'maal behtar hoN taa_ki aise qai'hr-e-Ilaahii se bach sakeN. aameen.

koii to le sabaq in zalzaloN se
bhare haiN shai'hr ke aKhbaar mere

bhai waah! kia saajhe_daarii hai...subHaanAllah!

banaayaa hai makaaN donoN ne mil kar
zameeN unkii, dar_o_deewar mere

bahot KhooB janaab!ek kaamiyaab Ghazal share karne par meri taraf se DheroN daad_o_taHseen aur mubaarak_baad, gar qubool uftaad.

faqat Khaak_saar,

Hashmat

Shummu wrote:

Mahtab Qadr wrote:
badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray

koi to lay sabaq in zalzaloN say
bharay haiN shahr ke akhbar meray

banaya hai makaN donoN ne milkar
zameeN unki dar o deewar meray

Wah!!! Bahut khoob Sarfaraz sahab....ye ash'aar bahut umda hain..daad haazir hai :)

Shumaila

tahira Masood wrote:

Mahtab Qadr wrote:Jeddah mai di gai aik tarah,:abhi kuch log haiN uspaar meray" par kahi gai aik ghazal..

unhaiN katwa rahay the yaar meray
shhajar the jitnay sayadaar meray

wah bohat a'Alaa bohat khoob!!!! zabardast!!!!!

kahaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh e pa sab
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray

mukarrer zabardast!!!!insaan ki zindagi maiN aise muqaam bhi aa jate haiN keh yeh sochnaa hi peRtaa hai

badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray

oh mere khudaa kayaa hqeeqat bayaan ki haiaa pne bhaa saheb.


koi to lay sabaq in zalzaloN say
bharay haiN shahr ke akhbar meray

aaj tau aap kaa shaiiree ka shaheen bohat bulaand parwaaz ker rehaa hai. wah bohat a'Alaa janaab! kayaa hqeeqat nigaari ki hai Wallah


banaya hai makaN donoN ne milkar
zameeN unki dar o deewar meray


:) encrochment? hahaha mazaaq ber teraf bohat achaa shaer hai.

bhikari ki tarah na daad mangoN
koi kaasa nahi ashaar meray

"koi kaasa nhahiN ash'Aar mere "
khoob ast!!! dilee daad qbul fermaaeiN moHteram

Star Mind wrote:Assalam-o-a'laikum,

moHtarami M.Q SaaHib,

subHana Allah janaab !! kyaa khene aapne tu meHfil hi looT lee
bahut hi u'mdah ghazal !! :D . masha Allah aap ne bahut u'mdah asha'aar nikaale aaye haiN . mujhe tu poori ghazal hi pasand aayee, daad qabool kejeye :D . shukriya

mokhliS: Zia Baloch

najm wrote:

Mahtab Qadr wrote:Jeddah mai di gai aik tarah,:abhi kuch log haiN uspaar meray" par kahi gai aik ghazal..

unhaiN katwa rahay the yaar meray
shhajar the jitnay sayadaar meray

kahaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh e pa sab
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray

badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray

koi to lay sabaq in zalzaloN say
bharay haiN shahr ke akhbar meray

banaya hai makaN donoN ne milkar
zameeN unki dar o deewar meray

bhikari ki tarah na daad mangoN
koi kaasa nahi ashaar meray

dearest mahtab jee, aadaab-o-tasleemat.
aap ki Ghazal paRhi. bohat achchii lagii. har she'r dosre se baRh kar hai.
aap ki meHfil nau-waarad hooN. leHaaza logoN ko bilkul naheeN jaantaa aur aap se bhi pehli dafa'a ham-kalam hooN. hukm-e-izan mile to aik baat arz karna chahtaa thaa.

kahaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh e pa sab
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray

aap ka ye she'r bohat achaa hai. agar pehle misra'e ko yooN badal diyaa jaaye to is ka lutf aur dobaalaa ho jaataa hai.

kahaN gum naqsh e pa sab ho gaye haiN
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray

ummeed karta hooN merii ye jisaarat giraaN na guzrae gii.

taalib-e-du'aa
Najm