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Meri Ghazal...TUM SE SHAYAD.......

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Azeezan.e Gramai, Tasleem

Mohtram Nazir sahab ne jo misra tajveez farmaya tha uss meN Hazal pahle hi irsal kar chuka hooN. Ab ek mukhtasar see Ghazal bhi haazir-e khidmat hai. Ummid hai pasaNd farmayeNge.

Khair Andesh,

Jawaid Badauni
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Dar hai iss meN bhi koii chaal na ho
Dosti dostoN ka jaal na ho

Tujh sa koii rukh-e jamal na ho
Husn-e janaN tiree misaal na ho

Intahaa-e kamaal hai woh shaKhs
Jis se baRhker shikasta haal na ho

Ai taraqqi pasaNd ! apnaa le
Aisa rastaa ke jismeN dhhal na ho

Dene waloN se kah raha tha faqeer
Mera jaisa tumhara haal na ho

Yaad rakhkho koii kamal nahiN
Jiskee taqdeer meN zawaal na ho

Kitna besharm hai woh ai “Jawaid”
Jurm karke jise malaal na ho
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jawaid badauni wrote:Azeezan.e Gramai, Tasleem

Mohtram Nazir sahab ne jo misra tajveez farmaya tha uss meN Hazal pahle hi irsal kar chuka hooN. Ab ek mukhtasar see Ghazal bhi haazir-e khidmat hai. Ummid hai pasaNd farmayeNge.

Khair Andesh,

Jawaid Badauni
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Dar hai iss meN bhi koii chaal na ho
Dosti dostoN ka jaal na ho

Tujh sa koii rukh-e jamaal na ho
Husn-e janaN tiree missal na ho

Intahaa-e kamal hai woh shaKhs
Jis se baRhker shikasta haal na ho

Ai taraqqi pasaNd ! apnaa le
Aisa rastaa ke jismeN dhhal na ho

Dene waloN se kah raha tha faqeer
Mera jaisa tumhara haal na ho

Yaad rakhkho koii kamal nahiN
Jiskee taqdeer meN zawaal na ho

Kitna besharm hai woh ai “Jawaid”
Jurm karke jise malaal na ho

Assalam-o-a'laikum,

moHtarami J.B SaaHib, aap ki kaavish hameN jee jaan se pasand aayee :D . mashaa Allah bahut hi u'mdah asha'aar aap ne nikaale haiN. mujhe pori ghazal hi pasand aaye. daad qabool kejeye :D

mokhliS : Zia Baloch[/b]
Dikhaadi shaan, phir ahl-e-chaman ko, Be-niyaazi ki

Khamoshi se jhatak kar, aaj phir, dast-e-sabaa maiN ne

Zia Baloch
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Star Mind wrote:
jawaid badauni wrote:Azeezan.e Gramai, Tasleem

Mohtram Nazir sahab ne jo misra tajveez farmaya tha uss meN Hazal pahle hi irsal kar chuka hooN. Ab ek mukhtasar see Ghazal bhi haazir-e khidmat hai. Ummid hai pasaNd farmayeNge.

Khair Andesh,

Jawaid Badauni
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Dar hai iss meN bhi koii chaal na ho
Dosti dostoN ka jaal na ho

Tujh sa koii rukh-e jamaal na ho
Husn-e janaN tiree missal na ho

Intahaa-e kamal hai woh shaKhs
Jis se baRhker shikasta haal na ho

Ai taraqqi pasaNd ! apnaa le
Aisa rastaa ke jismeN dhhal na ho

Dene waloN se kah raha tha faqeer
Mera jaisa tumhara haal na ho

Yaad rakhkho koii kamal nahiN
Jiskee taqdeer meN zawaal na ho

Kitna besharm hai woh ai “Jawaid”
Jurm karke jise malaal na ho[/b]

Assalam-o-a'laikum,

moHtarami J.B SaaHib, aap ki kaavish hameN jee jaan se pasand aayee :D . mashaa Allah bahut hi u'mdah asha'aar aap ne nikaale haiN. mujhe pori ghazal hi pasand aaye. daad qabool kejeye :D

mokhliS : Zia Baloch[/b]



Azeezi Zia Baloch Sahab, Tasleem

Sub se pahle to yeh ke mujhe aapka tarz-e takallum khusoosan aapke alqaab bahut pasaNd aaye. Ab tak kisee ne mujhe "J.B.Sahab" kah ker nahiN pukara tha. Iss munfarid andaze guftagoo ke liye shukriya.

Aaapke mukammil khat see aap ka khuloos numayaN hai. Itnee sada see ghazal aap ko itni pasaNd aayee yeh bhi khuloos wali baat hai.

Marhoon-e minnat hooN aapka.

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jawaid badauni wrote:
Star Mind wrote:
jawaid badauni wrote:Azeezan.e Gramai, Tasleem

Mohtram Nazir sahab ne jo misra tajveez farmaya tha uss meN Hazal pahle hi irsal kar chuka hooN. Ab ek mukhtasar see Ghazal bhi haazir-e khidmat hai. Ummid hai pasaNd farmayeNge.

Khair Andesh,

Jawaid Badauni
Muscat - Oamn
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Dar hai iss meN bhi koii chaal na ho
Dosti dostoN ka jaal na ho

Tujh sa koii rukh-e jamaal na ho
Husn-e janaN tiree missal na ho

Intahaa-e kamal hai woh shaKhs
Jis se baRhker shikasta haal na ho

Ai taraqqi pasaNd ! apnaa le
Aisa rastaa ke jismeN dhhal na ho

Dene waloN se kah raha tha faqeer
Mera jaisa tumhara haal na ho

Yaad rakhkho koii kamal nahiN
Jiskee taqdeer meN zawaal na ho

Kitna besharm hai woh ai “Jawaid”
Jurm karke jise malaal na ho[/b]

Assalam-o-a'laikum,

moHtarami J.B SaaHib, aap ki kaavish hameN jee jaan se pasand aayee :D . mashaa Allah bahut hi u'mdah asha'aar aap ne nikaale haiN. mujhe pori ghazal hi pasand aaye. daad qabool kejeye :D

mokhliS : Zia Baloch[/b]



Azeezi Zia Baloch Sahab, Tasleem

Sub se pahle to yeh ke mujhe aapka tarz-e takallum khusoosan aapke alqaab bahut pasaNd aaye. Ab tak kisee ne mujhe "J.B.Sahab" kah ker nahiN pukara tha. Iss munfarid andaze guftagoo ke liye shukriya.

moHtarami Jawed Badauni SaaHib,
aSl maiN , maiN bahut jaldi maiN thaa, aur "al-a'jalatu mina-sh-shait^an" k miSdaaq mujh se yeh gustaakhi sarzad hogayee :oops: :oops:
jis keleye maiN tah-e-dil se ma'zirat chaahtaa hoN :D . umeed hai k qaboll farmaayeNge. shukriya

mokhliS : Zia Baloch


Dikhaadi shaan, phir ahl-e-chaman ko, Be-niyaazi ki

Khamoshi se jhatak kar, aaj phir, dast-e-sabaa maiN ne

Zia Baloch
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Star Mind wrote:
jawaid badauni wrote:
Star Mind wrote:
Assalam-o-a'laikum,

moHtarami J.B SaaHib, aap ki kaavish hameN jee jaan se pasand aayee :D . mashaa Allah bahut hi u'mdah asha'aar aap ne nikaale haiN. mujhe pori ghazal hi pasand aaye. daad qabool kejeye :D

mokhliS : Zia Baloch[/b]



Azeezi Zia Baloch Sahab, Tasleem

Sub se pahle to yeh ke mujhe aapka tarz-e takallum khusoosan aapke alqaab bahut pasaNd aaye. Ab tak kisee ne mujhe "J.B.Sahab" kah ker nahiN pukara tha. Iss munfarid andaze guftagoo ke liye shukriya.

moHtarami Jawed Badauni SaaHib,
aSl maiN , maiN bahut jaldi maiN thaa, aur "al-a'jalatu mina-sh-shait^an" k miSdaaq mujh se yeh gustaakhi sarzad hogayee :oops: :oops:
jis keleye maiN tah-e-dil se ma'zirat chaahtaa hoN :D . umeed hai k qaboll farmaayeNge. shukriya

mokhliS : Zia Baloch




KyooN shaminda karte haiN Zia sahab. Chalta hai. Mujhe to bahut achcha laga aap ka yeh andaaz.

Khoosh RaheN

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Aapki Tarahi ghazal bahut achchi hei

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Muhtarami
JAWAID Badaayooni Saahib


Purkhuloos Tasleemaat, :)


Aapki TaraHi ghazal baasira navaaz houi. Saare ashAar khoob heiN khaaskar mujhe yeh sheAr bahut ziyaadah pasand aayaa:

"Dene waloN se kah raha tha faqeer
Mera jaisa tumhara haal na ho "

Dili daad aur mubaarakbaad qubool farmaayiye.


Aapka Mukhlis,

Nazir.
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Abdullah Nazir wrote:
Muhtarami
JAWAID Badaayooni Saahib


Purkhuloos Tasleemaat, :)


Aapki TaraHi ghazal baasira navaaz houi. Saare ashAar khoob heiN khaaskar mujhe yeh sheAr bahut ziyaadah pasand aayaa:

"Dene waloN se kah raha tha faqeer
Mera jaisa tumhara haal na ho "

Dili daad aur mubaarakbaad qubool farmaayiye.


Aapka Mukhlis,

Nazir.

Janab Abdullah Nazir Sahab, Aadab,

Ghazal per tabsare ke liye aap ka marhoon-e minnat hooN.

Bahut bahut shukriya.

Khulooskaar,

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salaam Javed saaHib,

ummeed hai ki mizaaj-e-giraamii ba_Khair hoNge. aapkii Hazal ke ba'd aaj aapkii yeh taraHii Ghazal paRhii aur bas daad be_saakhta muNh se nikal gaii...subHaan Allah, bahot umda kalaam pesh kiya hai. ek ek she'r maanind e durr-e-naa_yaab hai. kisi ek she'r kii traf ishaara karna be_jaa hogaa kiuNki sabhii ash'aar bahot hii Khoob haiN...chaliye, un ash'aar ka zikr karta hii chaluN jo mujhe be_Had pasand aaye:

Dar hai is meN bhi koii chaal na ho
dostii! dostoN ka jaal na ho

intahaa-e kamaal hai vo shaKhs
jisse baRh kar shikastah Haal na ho

dene_vaaloN se kah raha tha faqeer
mere jaisa tumhara haal na ho

Allah kare zor e qalam aur ziyaada. ek umda aur kaamiyaab Ghazal kahne par merii jaanib se DheroN daad aur mubaarak_baad qubool farmaaiye.

faqat Khaak_saar,

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jawaid badauni wrote:
Dar hai iss meN bhi koii chaal na ho
Dosti dostoN ka jaal na ho

Intahaa-e kamaal hai woh shaKhs
Jis se baRhker shikasta haal na ho

Dene waloN se kah raha tha faqeer
Mera jaisa tumhara haal na ho

Yaad rakhkho koii kamal nahiN
Jiskee taqdeer meN zawaal na ho

Kitna besharm hai woh ai “Jawaid”
Jurm karke jise malaal na ho
Wah janaab waah...hazal ke baad ghazal bhi aap ki paRhi aur kya kehne..intehaaii saad alfaaz mein khoob keh gaye aap...daad haazir hai..wubool farmaayein :)

Shumaila

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to ashk baha kar bhi baat adhoori reh jati hai

Waqt jaise kahin thehar sa gaya hai
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Hashmat Usmani wrote:salaam Javed saaHib,

ummeed hai ki mizaaj-e-giraamii ba_Khair hoNge. aapkii Hazal ke ba'd aaj aapkii yeh taraHii Ghazal paRhii aur bas daad be_saakhta muNh se nikal gaii...subHaan Allah, bahot umda kalaam pesh kiya hai. ek ek she'r maanind e durr-e-naa_yaab hai. kisi ek she'r kii traf ishaara karna be_jaa hogaa kiuNki sabhii ash'aar bahot hii Khoob haiN...chaliye, un ash'aar ka zikr karta hii chaluN jo mujhe be_Had pasand aaye:

Dar hai is meN bhi koii chaal na ho
dostii! dostoN ka jaal na ho

intahaa-e kamaal hai vo shaKhs
jisse baRh kar shikastah Haal na ho

dene_vaaloN se kah raha tha faqeer
mere jaisa tumhara haal na ho

Allah kare zor e qalam aur ziyaada. ek umda aur kaamiyaab Ghazal kahne par merii jaanib se DheroN daad aur mubaarak_baad qubool farmaaiye.

faqat Khaak_saar,

Hashmat
Ghazal ki bahud pazeerayee ki hai ap ne. Jazak Allah. Mamnoon hooN aapka. Mujhe iss baat ki bahut khooshi hai ke mere seedhe saade ashAar aap ko itne achche lage. Shukriya bhai.

Ummid hai aainda bhi yaad karte raheNge.

Khoosh RaheN,
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Shummu wrote:
jawaid badauni wrote:
Dar hai iss meN bhi koii chaal na ho
Dosti dostoN ka jaal na ho

Intahaa-e kamaal hai woh shaKhs
Jis se baRhker shikasta haal na ho

Dene waloN se kah raha tha faqeer
Mera jaisa tumhara haal na ho

Yaad rakhkho koii kamal nahiN
Jiskee taqdeer meN zawaal na ho

Kitna besharm hai woh ai “Jawaid”
Jurm karke jise malaal na ho
Wah janaab waah...hazal ke baad ghazal bhi aap ki paRhi aur kya kehne..intehaaii saad alfaaz mein khoob keh gaye aap...daad haazir hai..wubool farmaayein :)

Shumaila
Shumaila Bahin

Ghazal ko pasand karne ke liye aap ka marhoon-e minnat hooN. Bahut bahut shukriya.

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sara_j wrote:Jawaid bhai ,

salam.

waah! abhi hazal ka nasha utra nahi ke aapki ghazal bhi naseeb hogayi.

matla tou behad pasand aaya bohat khoob! tamaam asha'ar bohat umdah hain, aek baar aur daad aur mubarakbaad qubool keejiye.

sara

Sara main aap ka mail miss kar gaya tha aj hi dekha hai. Ghazal ki pazeerayee ke liye shukria. Nashsha sharab se hota hai Bibi. Woh to ek sada see hazal thee aap sub ko haNsane ke liye. Ghazal bhi ujlat meN kahi hai aap ke mushaaireh meN shirkat karna thi iss liye.

Yaad aavri ka shukriya.

Khair Andesh

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Dear Jawaid Bhai,
Aadab
Aap ki ghazal parhi, bohat pasand aaee.Khayaal-o-bayaan ka haseen imtezaj dekhne ko mila.
May God blesss you
Keep the good work up

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shahzadwaseem wrote:Dear Jawaid Bhai,
Aadab
Aap ki ghazal parhi, bohat pasand aaee.Khayaal-o-bayaan ka haseen imtezaj dekhne ko mila.
May God blesss you
Keep the good work up

shahzadwaseem

Ghazal ki pazeerayee ke liye bahut bahut shukiya Shahzadwaseem Sahab.

Khoosh raheN.

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