WEBMASTER wrote:
Azeezi
ZIA BALOCH

Purkhuloos Tasleemaat,

Aapki nazm paRhkar uskaa iHaaTah karnaa mushkil hougayaa kiyunkeh is meiN bahut saari tashbeehaat heiN.

Meri dili daad aur mubaarakbaad qubool farmaayiye.


Aapka Mukhlis,
Nazir.

moHtarami A.Nazir SaaHib, w/salaam

kaise haiN aap ?

aap ki tashreef aavari mere leye i'zaaz hai ! aap kaa tah-e-dil se mamnoon hoN ! aap ne jis KhlooS se HoSla afzaayee kee hai aap ka bohut mamnoon hoN ! shukriya

moKhliS :
Zia Baloch

poet wrote:zia sahib mashallah buhat umda nazm hay.
kia khoob talmeehat aur istarat istimal kay hain.
dad qabool farmain
poet

Shummu wrote:wah wah wah STARMIND aap ne to kamaal kar diya..kya nazm likhi hai...aisa laga jaise kise bahut hi pukhta shaayar ko paRh rahi hoon....aap ne shaayri ke maidaan mein bahut hi kam arse mein bahut zyaada taraqqi kar li hai mashaAllah..dheron daad haazir hai..aap aise hi lagan-o-mehnat se shayri karte rahenge to woh din door nahi jab aap ka naam bhi naamwar shoara meiN gina jaayega

Shumaila

moHtarama shumaaila SaaHiba , aadaab
kaisee haiN aap ?

sab aap ki zarra-nawaazi hai ! warna na mujh maiN iasee baat hai na hi Ghazal maiN ! aap ne itne KhoobSoorat alfaaz maiN yaad kiyaa k sharmidna hona paRa nehaayat mamnoon hoN ! shukriya

moKhliS ;

Zia Baloch

StarMind wrote:
aaj aek muddat baa'd connect hosakaa hoN , socha Khaali haath na aayaa jaaye so aek nazm k saath Haazir hoN , yaad rahe k ye nazm pehle bhi paish kee thee magar tab is k faqat 3 ash'aar the ! aur ab 14 :D
ummed hai k ye neesh bhi gawaaraa kareNge ! qat^a'-e-naz^ar is baat k k maiN bohut jald reply nahiN desakoNga kyoNke Net ab bhi Theek Theek nahiN ! shukriya

janaab-e-zia saHib

aap ke net connection se hameN gilaa to hai, lekin aap ne itni umda nazm sunaa ker saare gile door kar diye

mashallah janaab!, nazm bahot umda hai, zabaan-o-bayaan, tashbeehaat-o-istia'raat ka iste'maal, alfaaz ka intikhaab, bahot khoob.

aap ne itne ilaaqoN ka naam likha hai, hameN to aaj pata chalaa ke aap ka jughraafia (geography) bhi bahot acha hai

Mere maHboob tujhe kaise bataaoN aaKhir
tujh ko kis raNg maiN paataa hai tiraa ye shaai'r

aise jaise kisi zindaaN maiN chale taaza hawaa
jaise pardes ki hojaaye wat^an jaisi faZ^aa
jaise gumnaam jazeeroN se mile raahnumaa
jaise africa k saHra maiN koii kaali ghaTaa
jaise boolaan ki choTi pe ruke baad-e-Sabaa
jaise sheeraaz ki waadi maiN bahaaroN ki Sadaa
jaise dosheeza-e-kaaGhaan ki ma'Soom adaa
jaise baGhdaad ki dulhan kare tashreeH-e-wafaa !

jaise iqraar-e-moHabbat maiN banaa taaj maHal
jaise iqbaal k naGhmoN maiN nikharne ka a'mal
jaise fit^rat paRhe kashmeer maiN Ghaalib ki Ghazal
jaise minto ka fasaana kayee zihnoN ka badal

mere maHboob ! Haqeeqat to yehi hai k tiraa
Husn bhi meri moHabbat ki t^araH kaamil hai

hmmmm, poori nazm meiN hameN aitiraaz hai to is she'r se, magar ye sirf hamaara zaati aitiraaz hai, is liye ise agar dar.khur-e-ai'tinaa na bhi samjhen to koi baat nahiN :)

baat ye hai ke doosre misre meiN aap ne apni mohabbat ko kaamil keh dia.

mohabbat (majaazi ya haqeeqi) kisi soorat kaamil nahiN ho sakti.

Iqbal ne isi liye kahaa tha ke :

tire ishq ki intehaa chaahata hooN
miree saadigee dekh kia chaahata hooN

kuch sho'araa ne intehaai ishq tak paunchne ka tazkira kia hai, magar unhoN ne bhi sirf inteha tak paunchne ki baat ki hai, magar uski takmeel nahiN ki.

aur insaani Husn ka falsafa ye hai ke us ko zavaal hai, aur jise zavaal ho, uski takmeel kaise hogi

mere maHboob , mire dard-e-jigar , naaz na kar !
aa k waabasta hai tujh se miri taabinda saHar ! :)

ye she'r bhi acha hai, poori nazm hi bahot khoob hai, jis she'r per maine aitiraaz kia , voh bhi meHz meri zaati raaye hai, jo yaqeenan ghalat bhi ho sakti hai.

magar is nazm ko , is khoobsurat aHsaas ko daad na dena sareeHan zyaadati hogi, aur maiN is zyaadati ka murtakib nahiN ho saktaa.

bharpoor daad qubool farmaaiN :)

amjad