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Meri ek ghair riwayatee ghazal

Posted: Sun Oct 02, 2005 8:39 pm
by jawaid badauni

Dosto! Salam qubool kijiye

Ek ghazal jo a'am rawish se zara haTkar kahne ki koshish ki thee, irsaal kar raha hooN. Ummid hai pasaNd farmayeNge.

Mukhlis
Jawaid Badauni



Ghazal

Pal bhar ko ik ghareeb ki himmat baRha gayee
JhoTee thee dil ki aas magar kaam aa gayee

Kaisee ajab ghaTa thee jo barsee nah muddatoN
Barsee to iss tarah keh tabahee machaa gayee

Mazloom ki sadaa ko nah samjho haqeer cheez
Woh jab uThee wujood-e sitamgar miTaa gayee

Rahna hai oos se tum ko bhi mohtat dosto!
Woh aag jo paRos ki bastee jalaa gayee

Ai jhooTee shaan aaj bhi baaqi hai teri bhook?
Too jaaidaad kitne nawaboN ki kha gayee

Kya jane kub bujheNgee siyasat ki mashAleN
Nafrat ki aag daman-e ulfat tak aa gayee

Jab bhi hoa hai qatl ik insaan bequSoor
Insaaniyat bechaari lahoo meN nahaa gayee

UThTho miyaN keh lauT ke jane ka waqt hai
:Jawaid: din tamaam hoa raat aa gayee
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Re: Meri ek ghair riwayatee ghazal

Posted: Mon Oct 03, 2005 6:51 am
by Raji
moHtaram janab-e-Jawaid Badauni SaaHeb:
Aadab-o-tasleemat,

aap kee ghazal ka rang sach poochiye tu mujhe bohat pasand aaya.
tamaam hee ashaar mazameen aur bayaan ke leHaz se ache lage.
so har ek she'r kee babat alag alag likhne se d'ar hai keh kaheeN ek she'r doosre ka Haq nah chein lay.

meree janib se dilee daad aur mubarakbaad qubool keejiye.

khuda kare zor-e-qalam aur ziyadah

wassalam

Zahida Raees :Raji:

jawaid badauni wrote:
Ghazal

Pal bhar ko ik ghareeb ki himmat baRha gayee
JhoTee thee dil ki aas magar kaam aa gayee

Kaisee ajab ghaTa thee jo barsee nah muddatoN
Barsee to iss tarah keh tabahee machaa gayee

Mazloom ki sadaa ko nah samjho haqeer cheez
Woh jab uThee wujood-e sitamgar miTaa gayee

Rahna hai oos se tum ko bhi mohtat dosto!
Woh aag jo paRos ki bastee jalaa gayee

Ai jhooTee shaan aaj bhi baaqi hai teri bhook?
Too jaaidaad kitne nawaboN ki kha gayee

Kya jane kub bujheNgee siyasat ki mashAleN
Nafrat ki aag daman-e ulfat tak aa gayee

Jab bhi hoa hai qatl ik insaan bequSoor
Insaaniyat bechaari lahoo meN nahaa gayee

UThTho miyaN keh lauT ke jane ka waqt hai
:Jawaid: din tamaam hoa raat aa gayee
.............................................................

Re: Meri ek ghair riwayatee ghazal

Posted: Mon Oct 03, 2005 8:48 am
by Shummu
jawaid badauni wrote:
Pal bhar ko ik ghareeb ki himmat baRha gayee
JhoTee thee dil ki aas magar kaam aa gayee

Kaisee ajab ghaTa thee jo barsee nah muddatoN
Barsee to iss tarah keh tabahee machaa gayee

Mazloom ki sadaa ko nah samjho haqeer cheez
Woh jab uThee wujood-e sitamgar miTaa gayee

Rahna hai oos se tum ko bhi mohtat dosto!
Woh aag jo paRos ki bastee jalaa gayee

Ai jhooTee shaan aaj bhi baaqi hai teri bhook?
Too jaaidaad kitne nawaboN ki kha gayee

Kya jane kub bujheNgee siyasat ki mashAleN
Nafrat ki aag daman-e ulfat tak aa gayee

Jab bhi hoa hai qatl ik insaan bequSoor
Insaaniyat bechaari lahoo meN nahaa gayee

UThTho miyaN keh lauT ke jane ka waqt hai
:Jawaid: din tamaam hoa raat aa gayee

WAHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!Be Intehaa khoobsurat kalaam.....aap ki ghazal meiN andaz-e-bayaan meiN ek nayapan hota hai ....har sher bahut umda likha hai aapne...bahut rawaaN dawaaN ghazal hai..dher saaari daad haazir hai khaaskar is sher pe khusoosi daad pesh hai..
Kaisee ajab ghaTa thee jo barsee nah muddatoN
Barsee to iss tarah keh tabahee machaa gayee

Wah...Bahut hi khoob!!!!!


Mukhlis,
Shumaila

Re: Meri ek ghair riwayatee ghazal

Posted: Mon Oct 03, 2005 9:00 pm
by jawaid badauni
Raji wrote:moHtaram janab-e-Jawaid Badauni SaaHeb:
Aadab-o-tasleemat,

aap kee ghazal ka rang sach poochiye tu mujhe bohat pasand aaya.
tamaam hee ashaar mazameen aur bayaan ke leHaz se ache lage.
so har ek she'r kee babat alag alag likhne se d'ar hai keh kaheeN ek she'r doosre ka Haq nah chein lay.

meree janib se dilee daad aur mubarakbaad qubool keejiye.

khuda kare zor-e-qalam aur ziyadah

wassalam

Zahida Raees :Raji:

jawaid badauni wrote:
Ghazal

Pal bhar ko ik ghareeb ki himmat baRha gayee
JhoTee thee dil ki aas magar kaam aa gayee

Kaisee ajab ghaTa thee jo barsee nah muddatoN
Barsee to iss tarah keh tabahee machaa gayee

Mazloom ki sadaa ko nah samjho haqeer cheez
Woh jab uThee wujood-e sitamgar miTaa gayee

Rahna hai oos se tum ko bhi mohtat dosto!
Woh aag jo paRos ki bastee jalaa gayee

Ai jhooTee shaan aaj bhi baaqi hai teri bhook?
Too jaaidaad kitne nawaboN ki kha gayee

Kya jane kub bujheNgee siyasat ki mashAleN
Nafrat ki aag daman-e ulfat tak aa gayee

Jab bhi hoa hai qatl ik insaan bequSoor
Insaaniyat bechaari lahoo meN nahaa gayee

UThTho miyaN keh lauT ke jane ka waqt hai
:Jawaid: din tamaam hoa raat aa gayee
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Mohtarmah Zahida "Raji" Sahibah

Ek baar phir aap ne behud purKhuloos daad se nawaza hai. Bahut mamnoon hooN.

Khoosh raheN.

Mukhlis
Jawaid Badauni

Re: Meri ek ghair riwayatee ghazal

Posted: Mon Oct 03, 2005 9:01 pm
by jawaid badauni
Shummu wrote:
jawaid badauni wrote:
Pal bhar ko ik ghareeb ki himmat baRha gayee
JhoTee thee dil ki aas magar kaam aa gayee

Kaisee ajab ghaTa thee jo barsee nah muddatoN
Barsee to iss tarah keh tabahee machaa gayee

Mazloom ki sadaa ko nah samjho haqeer cheez
Woh jab uThee wujood-e sitamgar miTaa gayee

Rahna hai oos se tum ko bhi mohtat dosto!
Woh aag jo paRos ki bastee jalaa gayee

Ai jhooTee shaan aaj bhi baaqi hai teri bhook?
Too jaaidaad kitne nawaboN ki kha gayee

Kya jane kub bujheNgee siyasat ki mashAleN
Nafrat ki aag daman-e ulfat tak aa gayee

Jab bhi hoa hai qatl ik insaan bequSoor
Insaaniyat bechaari lahoo meN nahaa gayee

UThTho miyaN keh lauT ke jane ka waqt hai
:Jawaid: din tamaam hoa raat aa gayee

WAHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!Be Intehaa khoobsurat kalaam.....aap ki ghazal meiN andaz-e-bayaan meiN ek nayapan hota hai ....har sher bahut umda likha hai aapne...bahut rawaaN dawaaN ghazal hai..dher saaari daad haazir hai khaaskar is sher pe khusoosi daad pesh hai..
Kaisee ajab ghaTa thee jo barsee nah muddatoN
Barsee to iss tarah keh tabahee machaa gayee

Wah...Bahut hi khoob!!!!!


Mukhlis,
Shumaila


Azeezah Shumaila Sahibah

Aapki purkhuloos daad ke liye marhoone minnat hooN.

Khoosh RaheN,

Mukhlis
Jawaid