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Ghazal - beyfikr kabhi aur kahiN ho nahiN sakta
Posted: Thu Apr 12, 2007 4:24 pm
by Sohail Malik
Ehalian e bazm aap ki khidmet maiN aik aur ghazal pesh kerta huN
aap ki raey ka muntazir huN.
Beyfikr kabhi aur kahiN ho nahiN sakta
Her baat peh ab dil to hazeeN ho nahiN sakta
Is bazm ki ronaq kehay ji lo koi din aur
Yeh rang kabhi zer e zameeN ho nahiN sakta
Is taak main rehta hay keh chand tukRay uTha lay
Kargas kabhi aflak nasheeN ho nahiN sakta
Suntay haiN keh gulshan main baRa nazm raha tha
Yeh shehr kabhi waisa haseeN ho nahiN sakta
Ik aaho baka, shor o fughaN, garm tmasha
Bey khater try ghar ka makeeN ho nahiN sakta
Itnay millay ezaz keh dil bhar sa gaya hay
Her lamha to pendar e muteeN ho nahiN sakta
Chand aur marahil haiN keh ho garm tira dil
Sab kuch to miray dost yehiN ho nahiN sakta
Nadan baseerat ko teri zang laga hay
Cheetah kabhi bheRoN ka ameeN ho nahiN sakta
wassalam
sohail malik
Posted: Sun Apr 15, 2007 6:30 am
by muhammad_19k
Janab Sohail SaHeb,
leejiaye aap ki ye ghazal bhi daikh li meiN ne.
Beyfikr kabhi aur kahiN ho nahiN sakta
Her baat peh ab dil to hazeeN ho nahiN sakta
Pehla miSra kia keh rahaa hai kuch khaaS samajh naheeN aai
Is bazm ki ronaq kehay ji lo koi din aur
Yeh rang kabhi zer e zameeN ho nahiN sakta
bohat khoob!
Is taak main rehta hay keh chand tukRay uTha lay
Kargas kabhi aflak nasheeN ho nahiN sakta
bohat khoob Sir!
Suntay haiN keh gulshan main baRa nazm raha tha
Yeh shehr kabhi waisa haseeN ho nahiN sakta
ye aik Caqeel sha'er lagaa. kuch khaaS samajh naheeN aayaa.
Ik aaho baka, shor o fughaN, garm tmasha
Bey khater try ghar ka makeeN ho nahiN sakta
ji bohat khoob. tamaasha ke saath koi aor izaafat shayed iss se bhi achchha taaSSur paidaa kare.
Itnay millay ezaz keh dil bhar sa gaya hay
Her lamha to pendar e muteeN ho nahiN sakta
iss sha'er meiN mujhe apni naaqiS aql par afsoos hai.
Chand aur marahil haiN keh ho garm tira dil
Sab kuch to miray dost yehiN ho nahiN sakta
bohat khoob Sir. mujhe aap ki baat ittefaaq hai.
Nadan baseerat ko teri zang laga hay
Cheetah kabhi bheRoN ka ameeN ho nahiN sakta
sha'er achchha hai. mujhe "cheetaah" ne impress naheeN kiyaa. is meiN sha'eriat kam lag rahi hai
aap ka mukhliS,
Muhammad K. Siddiqui.
Posted: Sun Apr 15, 2007 9:14 am
by Sohail Malik
Siddiqui Sahib
Assalam o alekum
aap nay ghazal peRhi aur pasand ki maiN aap ka mashkur huN
jin ashaar nay ibham peda kia un per baat ker laitay haiN
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Suntay haiN keh gulshan main baRa nazm raha tha
Yeh shehr kabhi waisa haseeN ho nahiN sakta
ye aik Caqeel sha'er lagaa. kuch khaaS samajh naheeN aayaa.
apnay bhalay waqtoN ko yaad kijiay jab hamara system of adminsteration tamam duniya ka liay aik misal tha hamara nazm o zabt hamara akhlaq hamari dianat hamara insaaf,,,,,,,,,,,,,aur aaj kia haal hay
yahaN afsoos kay saath hasrat ka bhi izhar kia hay keh kia dobara waisa mumkin nahiN
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Ik aaho baka, shor o fughaN, garm tmasha
Bey khater try ghar ka makeeN ho nahiN sakta
ji bohat khoob. tamaasha ke saath koi aor izaafat shayed iss se bhi achchha taaSSur paidaa kare.
shukria janab ---- agar koi munasib izaafat aap tajweez ker daiN to mamnun huN ga
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Itnay millay ezaz keh dil bhar sa gaya hay
Her lamha to pendar e muteeN ho nahiN sakta
iss sha'er meiN mujhe apni naaqiS aql par afsoos hai.
yahN tanz hay
ezaz say murad woh baateiN haiN jo logoN ki teraf say sunani peRi haiN
jab logoN ko sanjeedah naseehat (pendar e muteen) keraiN to akser yehi hota hay.
to teng aa ker kaha keh ab yeh naseehat ka kaam roz roz nahiN ho sakta kiunkeh is maiN khasi baateiN sun chuka huN.
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Nadan baseerat ko teri zang laga hay
Cheetah kabhi bheRoN ka ameeN ho nahiN sakta
sha'er achchha hai. mujhe "cheetaah" ne impress naheeN kiyaa. is meiN sha'eriat kam lag rahi hai
aap nay theek fermaya
darasal yeh un chand tajrubaat maiN say hay keh jahaN maiN kabhi kabhar ikka dukka namanus lafz ghazal maiN Dalnay ki koshish kerta huN. dekhiay ghazal kitni hassas hay keh kahiN say aik bhi namanoos lafz aa jaey to forun kaan khaRay ho jaatay haiN.
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khair andesh
Sohail Malik
Posted: Sun Apr 15, 2007 9:25 pm
by Muzaffar Ahmad Muzaffar
moHtaram Sohail Malik SaHib aadaab!
kiya kene baRee barjastagee se Ghazal kahee hai. Ghazal kee rawanee aor salasat aap kee kubee-e-fan kee aae'inah daar hai. Allah kare Z^aor-e-qalam aor ziyadah!
meree dilee dad aor mubarak baad qubool kijiye!
Wassalam
Muz^affar A Muz^affar
Posted: Mon Apr 16, 2007 10:36 am
by Sohail Malik
Muzaffar Ahmad Muzaffar wrote:moHtaram Sohail Malik SaHib aadaab!
kiya kene baRee barjastagee se Ghazal kahee hai. Ghazal kee rawanee aor salasat aap kee kubee-e-fan kee aae'inah daar hai. Allah kare Z^aor-e-qalam aor ziyadah!
meree dilee dad aor mubarak baad qubool kijiye!
Wassalam
Muz^affar A Muz^affar
Muzaffar Sahib
Zehay naseeb keh aap ko hamaray bayrabt khayalat achay lagay
Aap ki duaeN aur hosla afzai yunhi barasti rehiN to is baat ka khadsha hay keh kahiN sach much hi yeh tuk bandi shaeri maiN nah badal jaey
wassalam
Sohail Malik
Posted: Tue Apr 17, 2007 2:00 am
by muhammad_19k
Janab Sohail Sahib,
aik baar phir mukhtisiran likhne ki muaafi chahtaa hooN.
Sohail Malik wrote:Siddiqui Sahib
Assalam o alekum
aap nay ghazal peRhi aur pasand ki maiN aap ka mashkur huN
jin ashaar nay ibham peda kia un per baat ker laitay haiN
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Suntay haiN keh gulshan main baRa nazm raha tha
Yeh shehr kabhi waisa haseeN ho nahiN sakta
ye aik Caqeel sha'er lagaa. kuch khaaS samajh naheeN aayaa.
apnay bhalay waqtoN ko yaad kijiay jab hamara system of adminsteration tamam duniya ka liay aik misal tha hamara nazm o zabt hamara akhlaq hamari dianat hamara insaaf,,,,,,,,,,,,,aur aaj kia haal hay
yahaN afsoos kay saath hasrat ka bhi izhar kia hay keh kia dobara waisa mumkin nahiN
doosre miSraa meiN ye pehlay miSra meiN chupay huway woh ka ishaaraa kartaa hai. is leeaye mafhoom meiN abham huwa, doosre miSra ke leeaye ye tajweez daikhiaye,
phir shehr mairaa waisaa HaseeN ho naheeN saktaa
ye aap ke mafhooM ko barqaaraar rakhne ki koshish thi. aor agar aap ijaazat daiN to meiN keh saktaa hooN?
kyooN shehr miraa phir se HaseeN ho naheeN saktaa?
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Ik aaho baka, shor o fughaN, garm tmasha
Bey khater try ghar ka makeeN ho nahiN sakta
ji bohat khoob.
tamaasha ke saath koi aor izaafat shayed iss se bhi achchha taaSSur paidaa kare.
shukria janab ---- agar koi munasib izaafat aap tajweez ker daiN to mamnun huN ga
abhi to kuch zahn meiN naheeN aa rahaa hai 
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Itnay millay ezaz keh dil bhar sa gaya hay
Her lamha to pendar e muteeN ho nahiN sakta
iss sha'er meiN mujhe apni naaqiS aql par afsoos hai.
yahN tanz hay
ezaz say murad woh baateiN haiN jo logoN ki teraf say sunani peRi haiN
jab logoN ko sanjeedah naseehat (pendar e muteen) keraiN to akser yehi hota hay.
to teng aa ker kaha keh ab yeh naseehat ka kaam roz roz nahiN ho sakta kiunkeh is maiN khasi baateiN sun chuka huN.
iss shaer par dobaaraa ghor kar lijiaye. miraa naheeN Khyaal ke jo mafhoom aap keh rahaiN woh adaa ho rahaa hai.
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Nadan baseerat ko teri zang laga hay
Cheetah kabhi bheRoN ka ameeN ho nahiN sakta
sha'er achchha hai. mujhe "cheetaah" ne impress naheeN kiyaa. is meiN sha'eriat kam lag rahi hai
aap nay theek fermaya
darasal yeh un chand tajrubaat maiN say hay keh jahaN maiN kabhi kabhar ikka dukka namanus lafz ghazal maiN Dalnay ki koshish kerta huN. dekhiay ghazal kitni hassas hay keh kahiN say aik bhi namanoos lafz aa jaey to forun kaan khaRay ho jaatay haiN.
bohat khoob Sir
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khair andesh
Sohail Malik
aap ka mukhliS,
muhammad k. Siddiqui.
Posted: Tue Apr 17, 2007 10:45 am
by Sohail Malik
Siddique Sahib
Assalam o alekum
Aap kay mashweray dekhay aur yaqeenan qabil e ghour haiN
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Suntay haiN keh gulshan main baRa nazm raha tha
Yeh shehr kabhi waisa haseeN ho nahiN sakta
ye aik Caqeel sha'er lagaa. kuch khaaS samajh naheeN aayaa.
apnay bhalay waqtoN ko yaad kijiay jab hamara system of adminsteration tamam duniya ka liay aik misal tha hamara nazm o zabt hamara akhlaq hamari dianat hamara insaaf,,,,,,,,,,,,,aur aaj kia haal hay
yahaN afsoos kay saath hasrat ka bhi izhar kia hay keh kia dobara waisa mumkin nahiN
doosre miSraa meiN ye pehlay miSra meiN chupay huway woh ka ishaaraa kartaa hai. is leeaye mafhoom meiN abham huwa, doosre miSra ke leeaye ye tajweez daikhiaye,
phir shehr mairaa waisaa HaseeN ho naheeN saktaa
ye aap ke mafhooM ko barqaaraar rakhne ki koshish thi. aor agar aap ijaazat daiN to meiN keh saktaa hooN?
kyooN shehr miraa phir se HaseeN ho naheeN saktaa?
Aap kay donoN hi tajweez kerda misray bohat bhalay lagay haiN aur in maiN say aik inshaAllah meray likhay ki jagah lay lay ga.
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Itnay millay ezaz keh dil bhar sa gaya hay
Her lamha to pendar e muteeN ho nahiN sakta
iss sha'er meiN mujhe apni naaqiS aql par afsoos hai.
yahN tanz hay
ezaz say murad woh baateiN haiN jo logoN ki teraf say sunani peRi haiN
jab logoN ko sanjeedah naseehat (pendar e muteen) keraiN to akser yehi hota hay.
to teng aa ker kaha keh ab yeh naseehat ka kaam roz roz nahiN ho sakta kiunkeh is maiN khasi baateiN sun chuka huN.
iss shaer par dobaaraa ghor kar lijiaye. miraa naheeN Khyaal ke jo mafhoom aap keh rahaiN woh adaa ho rahaa hai.
Filhaal to zehn issi per qael hay behrhaal lashaur ko refer ker dia hay aur akzerr wahaN say munasib waqt per jawab aa jata hay.
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khair andesh
Sohail Malik
Posted: Wed Apr 18, 2007 10:26 am
by sbashwar
Mohtaram Sohail Sahib,
Aapki ghazal pasand ai, yeh sheir bohat khoob hai:
Is bazm ki ronaq kehay ji lo koi din aur
Yeh rang kabhi zer e zameeN ho nahiN sakta
Meri daad aur mubarakbaad qubool farmayeN
Posted: Wed Apr 18, 2007 12:10 pm
by Sohail Malik
Mohtaram sbashwar Sahib,
Aapki ghazal pasand ai, yeh sheir bohat khoob hai:
Is bazm ki ronaq kehay ji lo koi din aur
Yeh rang kabhi zer e zameeN ho nahiN sakta
Meri daad aur mubarakbaad qubool farmayeN
Pasandeedgi aur hosla afzai kay liay mamnoon huN
khair andesh
Sohail Malik