na woh jaan rahi na woh dil raha na hi dil ki phir woh lugi rahi
na sukoon raha na junoon raha na khayal-e-khana dari rahi
na malal-e-ishq-e-buthan raha na sawal-e-soz-nehan raha
jo raha so deeda-e-thur raha jo rahi so daman thuri rahi
na hi ghum tera na hi justuju na hi soz-e-ghum na hi aarzoo
na woh baath tujh mein teri rahi na woh baat mujh mein meri rahi
na weqar-e-aah-e-seher raha na mizaj-e-shaam-e-alam raha
na hi dusht-e-saaya-e-ghum raha na hi jaan ki phir woh kuni rahi
na khayal-e-thunha sufur rah na malal-e-khauf-o-khatar raha
na junoon-e-shauq-e-nazar raha na khayal-e-be khubari rahi
ek ghazal
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khudrath ali khan
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Janab Qudrat Ali Khan SaHeb,
Urdu Bandhan meiN aap ko khush amdeed kehtaa hooN. aap ki ghazal bohat achchhi aor mairi pasandeeda beHr meiN hai. aisi khoobSoorat koshish par bhalaa daad na di jaa-aye kiaa kia jaa-aye? daad qabool kijiaye.
na woh jaan rahi na woh dil raha na hi dil ki phir woh lugi rahi
na sukoon raha na junoon raha na khayal-e-khana dari rahi-------------sha'er pasand aayaa.
na malal-e-ishq-e-buthan raha na sawal-e-soz-nehan raha
jo raha so deeda-e-thur raha jo rahi so daman thuri rahi ----------------bohat khoob. "daman" se shayed aap ki muraad "daamaaN" hai.
na hi ghum tera na hi justuju na hi soz-e-ghum na hi aarzoo
na woh baath tujh mein teri rahi na woh baat mujh mein meri rahi ---- bohat khoob janab. ye sha'er paRh kar dhayaan Iqbaal ki taraf jaataa hai.
na weqar-e-aah-e-seher raha na mizaj-e-shaam-e-alam raha
na hi dusht-e-saaya-e-ghum raha na hi jaan ki phir woh kuni rahi ---- jaaN kuni ke turkray qaabil e ghor haiN. sha'er achchha hai.
na khayal-e-thunha sufur rah na malal-e-khauf-o-khatar raha
na junoon-e-shauq-e-nazar raha na khayal-e-be khubari rahi --- khubari? ye lafz samajh naheeN aayaa. kia be khabri kehna chah rahay haiN aap?
aik baar phir daad qabool fama-iaye,
mukhliS,
Muhammad K. Siddiqui.
Urdu Bandhan meiN aap ko khush amdeed kehtaa hooN. aap ki ghazal bohat achchhi aor mairi pasandeeda beHr meiN hai. aisi khoobSoorat koshish par bhalaa daad na di jaa-aye kiaa kia jaa-aye? daad qabool kijiaye.
na woh jaan rahi na woh dil raha na hi dil ki phir woh lugi rahi
na sukoon raha na junoon raha na khayal-e-khana dari rahi-------------sha'er pasand aayaa.
na malal-e-ishq-e-buthan raha na sawal-e-soz-nehan raha
jo raha so deeda-e-thur raha jo rahi so daman thuri rahi ----------------bohat khoob. "daman" se shayed aap ki muraad "daamaaN" hai.
na hi ghum tera na hi justuju na hi soz-e-ghum na hi aarzoo
na woh baath tujh mein teri rahi na woh baat mujh mein meri rahi ---- bohat khoob janab. ye sha'er paRh kar dhayaan Iqbaal ki taraf jaataa hai.
na weqar-e-aah-e-seher raha na mizaj-e-shaam-e-alam raha
na hi dusht-e-saaya-e-ghum raha na hi jaan ki phir woh kuni rahi ---- jaaN kuni ke turkray qaabil e ghor haiN. sha'er achchha hai.
na khayal-e-thunha sufur rah na malal-e-khauf-o-khatar raha
na junoon-e-shauq-e-nazar raha na khayal-e-be khubari rahi --- khubari? ye lafz samajh naheeN aayaa. kia be khabri kehna chah rahay haiN aap?
aik baar phir daad qabool fama-iaye,
mukhliS,
Muhammad K. Siddiqui.
Muhammad K. Siddiqui.
+92 321 4435273
938-C-Faisal Town, Lahore.
Pakistan.
+92 42 111516516
muhammad_19k@hotmail.com
+92 321 4435273
938-C-Faisal Town, Lahore.
Pakistan.
+92 42 111516516
muhammad_19k@hotmail.com
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jawaid badauni
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Re: ek ghazal
khudrath ali khan wrote:na woh jaan rahi na woh dil raha na hi dil ki phir woh lugi rahi
na sukoon raha na junoon raha na khayal-e-khana dari rahi
na malal-e-ishq-e-buthan raha na sawal-e-soz-nehan raha
jo raha so deeda-e-thur raha jo rahi so daman thuri rahi
na hi ghum tera na hi justuju na hi soz-e-ghum na hi aarzoo
na woh baath tujh mein teri rahi na woh baat mujh mein meri rahi
na weqar-e-aah-e-seher raha na mizaj-e-shaam-e-alam raha
na hi dusht-e-saaya-e-ghum raha na hi jaan ki phir woh kuni rahi
na khayal-e-thunha sufur rah na malal-e-khauf-o-khatar raha
na junoon-e-shauq-e-nazar raha na khayal-e-be khubari rahi
MoHtarmee Khudrath Ali Khan SaaHab,
aadaab.o.taslemaat
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