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Aap bhi mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage
Posted: Wed Feb 23, 2005 7:52 am
by fatimah
aslaam_u_alikam
guz#43 per kuch mian ney bhi likha hey. jo aap sa key samney hazir hey.
umeed ekrti hun keh aap sab apnii aara sey zaroor nawaazein gey.
chaand taarey bhi jab rooTh jaaney lagey
hum terii yaad sey gher sajaaney lagye
choR ker jab mujhe door jaane lage
dermiyaaN faasalon ko bharaaney lagye
un key aaney ki jab bhi hui thi umeed
nit naye khwaab ham phir sajaane lage
kia silaa meri ulfat ka mujh ko milaa?
"aap bhi mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage "
khauf rehne lagaa aandhioN ka hameN
ham charaagh-e-vafaa jab jalaane lage
ik khataa ne ujaaRa vo ghar fatima
jis ko aabaad karte zamaane lage
shukriya
Aapki TaraHi ghazal khoob hei
Posted: Wed Feb 23, 2005 1:19 pm
by Abdullah Nazir
FATIMA Saahibah
Purkhuloos Tasleemaat,
Aapki TaraHi ghazal dekhkar bahut khushi houi. Din badin aapka andaaz-e-bayaan nikhartaa jaarahaa hei.
chaand taarey bhi jab rooTh jaaney lagey
hum terii yaad sey gher sajaaney lagye
MaTlaA her liHaaz se bahut achchaa hei.
choR ker jab mujhe door jaane lage
dermiyaaN faasalon ko bharaaney lagye
Yeh Husn-e-MaTlaA bhii bahut achchaa hei.
un key aaney ki jab bhi hui thi umeed
nit naye khwaab ham phir sajaane lage
Is sheAr ke pahle misreA meiN "jab bhii hui thi umeed" se yooN maloom houtaa hei ke yeh baat sirf maazi kii thii jiska Haal se koiee taAlluq nahiN. Is TaraH se doosre misreA kaa rabT bhii usi TaraH sirf maazi se houjaataa hei. Isko yooN kiyaa jaasaktaa hei agar aapke ziyaadah se ziyaadah alfaaz ko baghair badle ke kahaiN tou:
unke aane kii phir jaag uThi hei umeed
nit naye khwaab phir ham sajaane lage
kia silaa meri ulfat ka mujh ko milaa?
"aap bhi mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage "
Waah waah Fatima kyaa kehne, bahut hii piyaari gireh lagaayi hei. Mubarakbad.
khauf rehne lagaa aandhioN ka hameN
ham charaagh-e-vafaa jab jalaane lage
Yeh sheAr bhii bahut achcha hei.
ik khataa ne ujaaRa vo ghar fatima
jis ko aabaad karte zamaane lage
Waah wah Fatima, maqTaA bhii bahut hii khoob hei.
Meri daad aur mubaarakbaad qubool farmaayiye is dilkash ghazal ke ashAaar per.
Aapka Mukhlis,
Nazir.[/i]
Re: Aap bhi mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage
Posted: Wed Feb 23, 2005 1:25 pm
by Shummu
chaand taarey bhi jab rooTh jaaney lagey
hum terii yaad sey gher sajaaney lagye
--wah khoob!!!
kia silaa meri ulfat ka mujh ko milaa?
"aap bhi mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage "
--wah nice giraah!!!
khauf rehne lagaa aandhioN ka hameN
ham charaagh-e-vafaa jab jalaane lage
--wah wah ...!
ik khataa ne ujaaRa vo ghar' fatima'
jis ko aabaad karte zamaane lage
--wow maqta sab se zyadaa pasand aaya!
..is mire pe tumhari ghazla bhi paRhke achcha laga...achche sher kahe hain khaaskar quoted ash'aar zyaada pasand ayae..daad haazir hai :-D
Shumaila
shukriya[/color][/i][/b][/quote]
Posted: Fri Feb 25, 2005 7:58 am
by Sarwar A. Raz
Fatima SaaHebah: aadaab aur dua'a
yeh t^araHee Ghazal dekh`ee to th`ee lekin maiN Haal hee meN is qaabil huwaa hooN ke :jam kar: yahaaN kaam kar sakooN! aap ke Khayaalaat aur adaa,igee behtaree kee jaanib jaa rahe haiN. is se dilee Khushee huyee. maiN ne neeche Sirf itnaa kiyaa hai keh aap ke Khayaalaat ko qaa,im rakh`te huYe ek aur shakl tajveez kee hai. is se yeh ho gaa keh aap kee soch ke darwaaze kh`uleN ge aur naYe andaaz soojh`eN ge. baat seedh`ee bh`ee kahee jaa saktee hai aur us ko Zaraa saa :teekh`aa: bh`ee kiyaa jaa saktaa hai. aur yeh soch aur mashq se aa jaataa hai. koyee baRee baat naheeN hai. haaN! yeh Z^arooree naheeN hai keh aap mujh` se muttafiq hee hoN!
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chaand taarey bhi jab rooTh jaaney lagey
hum terii yaad sey gher sajaaney lagye
dekh`! taare bhi ab jh`ilmilaane lagey
hum terii yaad sey dil sajaaney lagye!
:jh`ilmilaanaa: behtar hai aur is se aaKhir-e-shab muraad hai. yaadoN se :dil: sajaanaa bh`ee :gh`ar sajaane: se behtar lagaa.
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choR ker jab mujhe door jaane lage
dermiyaaN faasalon ko bharaaney lagye
choR ker woh mujhe door jaane lage
faasale darmiyaaN ke bharaaney lagye
alfaaz^ kee heraa-ph`eree se bunat aur bayaan behtar karne kee koshish kee gayee hai.
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un key aaney ki jab bhi hui thi umeed
nit naye khwaab ham phir sajaane lage
yooN bh`ee keh sakte haiN:
un ke aane kee ham ko huyee th`ee umeed
nit-naYe Khwaab ph`ir woh dikh`aane lage!
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kia silaa meri ulfat ka mujh ko milaa?
"aap bhi mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage "
she'r achh`aa hai. bayaan Zaraa saa teekh`aa kar ke dekh` leN:
meree ulafat kaa kyaa hai Silah bas yehee?
"aap bhi mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage "
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khauf rehne lagaa aandhioN ka hameN
ham charaagh-e-vafaa jab jalaane lage
Khauf ne aaNdh`iyoN ke sataayaa bohat
ham charaagh-e-vafaa jab jalaane lage
lekin :kaun see aaNdh`iyaaN:? yeh sawaal reh gayaa! aur sochiYe.
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ik khataa ne ujaaRa vo ghar fatima
jis ko aabaad karte zamaane lage
ek shakl yeh hai:
ek lamHe men ujRaa woh gh`ar :Fatima:
jis ko aabaad hote zamaane lage
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Sarwar A. Raz :Sarwar:
Posted: Fri Feb 25, 2005 6:01 pm
by khurram_shaikh
Assalaam alekum,
bahoooot khoooob chhoooooti bahooot umdeh shukriyaa share kernien kaaa dili daad qaboool karo khush raho
Re: Aapki TaraHi ghazal khoob hei
Posted: Sat Feb 26, 2005 9:11 am
by fatimah
WEBMASTER wrote:
FATIMA Saahibah
Purkhuloos Tasleemaat,
Aapki TaraHi ghazal dekhkar bahut khushi houi. Din badin aapka andaaz-e-bayaan nikhartaa jaarahaa hei.
bohat bohat shukriya nazir sahib
chaand taarey bhi jab rooTh jaaney lagey
hum terii yaad sey gher sajaaney lagye
MaTlaA her liHaaz se bahut achchaa hei.
navazish
choR ker jab mujhe door jaane lage
dermiyaaN faasalon ko bharaaney lagye
Yeh Husn-e-MaTlaA bhii bahut achchaa hei.
bohat shukriya 
un key aaney ki jab bhi hui thi umeed
nit naye khwaab ham phir sajaane lage
Is sheAr ke pahle misreA meiN "jab bhii hui thi umeed" se yooN maloom houtaa hei ke yeh baat sirf maazi kii thii jiska Haal se koiee taAlluq nahiN. Is TaraH se doosre misreA kaa rabT bhii usi TaraH sirf maazi se houjaataa hei. Isko yooN kiyaa jaasaktaa hei agar aapke ziyaadah se ziyaadah alfaaz ko baghair badle ke kahaiN tou:
unke aane kii phir jaag uThi hei umeed
nit naye khwaab phir ham sajaane lage
ji bohat behter :P shukriya
kia silaa meri ulfat ka mujh ko milaa?
"aap bhi mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage "
Waah waah Fatima kyaa kehne, bahut hii piyaari gireh lagaayi hei. Mubarakbad.
bohat shukriya nazir sahib
khauf rehne lagaa aandhioN ka hameN
ham charaagh-e-vafaa jab jalaane lage
Yeh sheAr bhii bahut achcha hei.
navazish
ik khataa ne ujaaRa vo ghar fatima
jis ko aabaad karte zamaane lage
Waah wah Fatima, maqTaA bhii bahut hii khoob hei.
bohat shukriya
Meri daad aur mubaarakbaad qubool farmaayiye is dilkash ghazal ke ashAaar per.
bohat shukriya nazir sahib.aap hamesha jis terha faseelii reply kertey hain mujhey bohat khushii hotii hey.main tah_e_dil sey aap ki mumnoon hun.
isi terha rehnumaaii fermaatey rahiye ga.
bohat shukriya
Aapka Mukhlis,
Nazir.
Re: Aap bhi mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage
Posted: Mon Feb 28, 2005 8:32 am
by fatimah
Shummu wrote:chaand taarey bhi jab rooTh jaaney lagey
hum terii yaad sey gher sajaaney lagye
--wah khoob!!!
kia silaa meri ulfat ka mujh ko milaa?
"aap bhi mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage "
--wah nice giraah!!!
khauf rehne lagaa aandhioN ka hameN
ham charaagh-e-vafaa jab jalaane lage
--wah wah ...!
ik khataa ne ujaaRa vo ghar' fatima'
jis ko aabaad karte zamaane lage
--wow maqta sab se zyadaa pasand aaya!
..is mire pe tumhari ghazla bhi paRhke achcha laga...achche sher kahe hain khaaskar quoted ash'aar zyaada pasand ayae..daad haazir hai :-D
Shumaila
shukriya[/color][/i][/b]
[/quote]
aslaam_u_alikam
bohat bohat shukriya shu
Re: Aap bhi mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage
Posted: Mon Feb 28, 2005 12:48 pm
by tahira Masood
fatimah wrote:aslaam_u_alikam
guz#43 per kuch mian ney bhi likha hey. jo aap sa key samney hazir hey.
umeed ekrti hun keh aap sab apnii aara sey zaroor nawaazein gey.
chaand taarey bhi jab rooTh jaaney lagey
hum terii yaad sey gher sajaaney lagye
choR ker jab mujhe door jaane lage
dermiyaaN faasalon ko bharaaney lagye
un key aaney ki jab bhi hui thi umeed
nit naye khwaab ham phir sajaane lage
kia silaa meri ulfat ka mujh ko milaa?
"aap bhi mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage "
khauf rehne lagaa aandhioN ka hameN
ham charaagh-e-vafaa jab jalaane lage
ik khataa ne ujaaRa vo ghar fatima
jis ko aabaad karte zamaane lage
shukriya
waah =D>
bohat khoob bohat a'alaa
daad qabul kijiay Fatimah ji
Re: Aap bhi mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage
Posted: Thu Mar 03, 2005 9:16 am
by fatimah
sara_j wrote:fatimah wrote:
chaand taarey bhi jab rooTh jaaney lagey
hum terii yaad sey gher sajaaney lagye
choR ker jab mujhe door jaane lage
dermiyaaN faasalon ko bharaaney lagye
un key aaney ki jab bhi hui thi umeed
nit naye khwaab ham phir sajaane lage
kia silaa meri ulfat ka mujh ko milaa?
"aap bhi mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage "
khauf rehne lagaa aandhioN ka hameN
ham charaagh-e-vafaa jab jalaane lage
ik khataa ne ujaaRa vo ghar fatima
jis ko aabaad karte zamaane lage
shukriya
waah fatima bohat khoob! ghazal ke sabhi ashaar bohat pasand aye, girah tou bohat alaa lagayi ho.
dhair saari daad aur mubarakbaad qubool keejiye.
sara
aslaam_u_alikam
bohat bohat shukriya sara ji
Posted: Sat Mar 19, 2005 9:43 am
by fatimah
Sarwar Raz wrote:Fatima SaaHebah: aadaab aur dua'a
yeh t^araHee Ghazal dekh`ee to th`ee lekin maiN Haal hee meN is qaabil huwaa hooN ke :jam kar: yahaaN kaam kar sakooN! aap ke Khayaalaat aur adaa,igee behtaree kee jaanib jaa rahe haiN. is se dilee Khushee huyee. maiN ne neeche Sirf itnaa kiyaa hai keh aap ke Khayaalaat ko qaa,im rakh`te huYe ek aur shakl tajveez kee hai. is se yeh ho gaa keh aap kee soch ke darwaaze kh`uleN ge aur naYe andaaz soojh`eN ge. baat seedh`ee bh`ee kahee jaa saktee hai aur us ko Zaraa saa :teekh`aa: bh`ee kiyaa jaa saktaa hai. aur yeh soch aur mashq se aa jaataa hai. koyee baRee baat naheeN hai. haaN! yeh Z^arooree naheeN hai keh aap mujh` se muttafiq hee hoN!
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chaand taarey bhi jab rooTh jaaney lagey
hum terii yaad sey gher sajaaney lagye
dekh`! taare bhi ab jh`ilmilaane lagey
hum terii yaad sey dil sajaaney lagye!
:jh`ilmilaanaa: behtar hai aur is se aaKhir-e-shab muraad hai. yaadoN se :dil: sajaanaa bh`ee :gh`ar sajaane: se behtar lagaa.
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choR ker jab mujhe door jaane lage
dermiyaaN faasalon ko bharaaney lagye
choR ker woh mujhe door jaane lage
faasale darmiyaaN ke bharaaney lagye
alfaaz^ kee heraa-ph`eree se bunat aur bayaan behtar karne kee koshish kee gayee hai.
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un key aaney ki jab bhi hui thi umeed
nit naye khwaab ham phir sajaane lage
yooN bh`ee keh sakte haiN:
un ke aane kee ham ko huyee th`ee umeed
nit-naYe Khwaab ph`ir woh dikh`aane lage!
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kia silaa meri ulfat ka mujh ko milaa?
"aap bhi mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage "
she'r achh`aa hai. bayaan Zaraa saa teekh`aa kar ke dekh` leN:
meree ulafat kaa kyaa hai Silah bas yehee?
"aap bhi mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage "
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khauf rehne lagaa aandhioN ka hameN
ham charaagh-e-vafaa jab jalaane lage
Khauf ne aaNdh`iyoN ke sataayaa bohat
ham charaagh-e-vafaa jab jalaane lage
lekin :kaun see aaNdh`iyaaN:? yeh sawaal reh gayaa! aur sochiYe.
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ik khataa ne ujaaRa vo ghar fatima
jis ko aabaad karte zamaane lage
ek shakl yeh hai:
ek lamHe men ujRaa woh gh`ar :Fatima:
jis ko aabaad hote zamaane lage
-------------------------
Sarwar A. Raz :Sarwar:
Sarwar A. Raz wrote:Fatima SaaHebah: aadaab aur dua'a
yeh t^araHee Ghazal dekh`ee to th`ee lekin maiN Haal hee meN is qaabil huwaa hooN ke :jam kar: yahaaN kaam kar sakooN! aap ke Khayaalaat aur adaa,igee behtaree kee jaanib jaa rahe haiN. is se dilee Khushee huyee. maiN ne neeche Sirf itnaa kiyaa hai keh aap ke Khayaalaat ko qaa,im rakh`te huYe ek aur shakl tajveez kee hai. is se yeh ho gaa keh aap kee soch ke darwaaze kh`uleN ge aur naYe andaaz soojh`eN ge. baat seedh`ee bh`ee kahee jaa saktee hai aur us ko Zaraa saa :teekh`aa: bh`ee kiyaa jaa saktaa hai. aur yeh soch aur mashq se aa jaataa hai. koyee baRee baat naheeN hai. haaN! yeh Z^arooree naheeN hai keh aap mujh` se muttafiq hee hoN!
aslaam_u_alikam
sarwar sahib.
aap ko yahan dekh ker bohat khushii ho rahii hey.main aap kii mumnoon hun keh aap ney merii gazal key liye waqt nikaalaa.ALLAH aap ko sehat sey bherpur zindagii aataa karey.
ameen
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chaand taarey bhi jab rooTh jaaney lagey
hum terii yaad sey gher sajaaney lagye
dekh`! taare bhi ab jh`ilmilaane lagey
hum terii yaad sey dil sajaaney lagye!
:jh`ilmilaanaa: behtar hai aur is se aaKhir-e-shab muraad hai. yaadoN se :dil: sajaanaa bh`ee :gh`ar sajaane: se behtar lagaa.
ji bohat behter
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choR ker jab mujhe door jaane lage
dermiyaaN faasalon ko bharaaney lagye
choR ker woh mujhe door jaane lage
faasale darmiyaaN ke bharaaney lagye
alfaaz^ kee heraa-ph`eree se bunat aur bayaan behtar karne kee koshish kee gayee hai.
is sher main yeh tabdelii bhi bohat achii lagii.
shukriya
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un key aaney ki jab bhi hui thi umeed
nit naye khwaab ham phir sajaane lage
yooN bh`ee keh sakte haiN:
un ke aane kee ham ko huyee th`ee umeed
nit-naYe Khwaab ph`ir woh dikh`aane lage!
yeh bhi bohat achaa lagaa
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kia silaa meri ulfat ka mujh ko milaa?
"aap bhi mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage "
she'r achh`aa hai. bayaan Zaraa saa teekh`aa kar ke dekh` leN:
meree ulafat kaa kyaa hai Silah bas yehee?
"aap bhi mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage "
ji behter
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khauf rehne lagaa aandhioN ka hameN
ham charaagh-e-vafaa jab jalaane lage
Khauf ne aaNdh`iyoN ke sataayaa bohat
ham charaagh-e-vafaa jab jalaane lage
lekin :kaun see aaNdh`iyaaN:? yeh sawaal reh gayaa! aur sochiYe.
ji purii koshish karun gi
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ik khataa ne ujaaRa vo ghar fatima
jis ko aabaad karte zamaane lage
ek shakl yeh hai:
ek lamHe men ujRaa woh gh`ar :Fatima:
jis ko aabaad hote zamaane lage
yeh bhi bohat pasand aayaa
bohat shukriya sarwar sahib aap ka
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Sarwar A. Raz :Sarwar:
Re: Aap bhi mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage
Posted: Mon Mar 21, 2005 9:27 am
by Safiya
fatimah wrote:aslaam_u_alikam
guz#43 per kuch mian ney bhi likha hey. jo aap sa key samney hazir hey.
umeed ekrti hun keh aap sab apnii aara sey zaroor nawaazein gey.
chaand taarey bhi jab rooTh jaaney lagey
hum terii yaad sey gher sajaaney lagye
choR ker jab mujhe door jaane lage
dermiyaaN faasalon ko bharaaney lagye
un key aaney ki jab bhi hui thi umeed
nit naye khwaab ham phir sajaane lage
kia silaa meri ulfat ka mujh ko milaa?
"aap bhi mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage "
khauf rehne lagaa aandhioN ka hameN
ham charaagh-e-vafaa jab jalaane lage
ik khataa ne ujaaRa vo ghar fatima
jis ko aabaad karte zamaane lage
shukriya
Fatima saheba
Aadaab, aapka kalaam pehli dafa paDa aur bohot khoob lagha,
achha likha haiy aapne, khoobsoorat andaaz me kaafi umda koshish ki haiy aapne, umeed haiy ke aapki ye koshishen jaari rahengi, aur yunhi hum doston ko apne kalaam se lutf-andoz hone ka maoka detin rahengi.
Safiya
Re: Aap bhi mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage
Posted: Wed Mar 23, 2005 2:32 am
by Hashmat Usmani
salaam Fatima saaHiba,
aapkii yeh Ghazal bhii mujhe bahot pasand aayii...masha Allah ab to aapke kalaam meN din ba din nikhaar aataa jaa raha hai...mubaarak ho. jo ash'aar mujhe ziyaada pasand aaye vo yeh haiN.
Allah kare zor e qalam aur ziyaada
Hashmat
un key aaney ki jab bhi hui thi umeed
nit naye khwaab ham phir sajaane lage
kia silaa meri ulfat ka mujh ko milaa?
"aap bhi mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage "
khauf rehne lagaa aandhioN ka hameN
ham charaagh-e-vafaa jab jalaane lage
ik khataa ne ujaaRa vo ghar fatima
jis ko aabaad karte zamaane lage