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Ghazal..Guzarish #3
Posted: Fri Mar 04, 2005 6:16 pm
by nigaah
Assalam alaikum
Guzarish # 3 per meri adnaa si koshish haazir hai...
muhabbat say jab tak ibaadat na hogi
kisi kaam ki ye riyaazat na hogi....!!!
lutaai hai Khud zindagi jaan-o-dil say
na samjho ke hum maiN faraasat na hogi
bhalaa kiuN kahaiN tum say ulfat nahiN hai
abb iss maiN tou hum say siyaasat na hogi
kisi ko tabassum, kisi ko tawajju
"idher kiya nigaah-e-muhabbat na hogi"
raqeeboN ke aagay bichay jaa rahay ho
"idher kiya nigaah-e-muhabbat na hogi"
yeh waada karo abb na ruTho gay hum say
kaho, phir kabhi ye shikaayat na hogi
milaiN wo kabhi ajnabi banke hum say
nahiN!! is say baRhke qayaamat na hogi
sunaaieN tou kab daastaaN un ko apni
kabhi thi, na hai unko fursat, na hogi!!
aaKhir ke 2 ashaar ka aapas maiN talluq hai...jo Ghazal ke usooloN ke Khilaaf hai...lekin chooNke likhay thay tou yahaN bhi type kar deti hooN...
kiya arz,"mehfil maiN gar beth jaooN
hai umeed koi qabaahat na hogi"
kaha,"bethna chaahtay ho tou betho
magar bolnay ki ijaazat na hogi !!"
Nigaah
Bahut khoob
Posted: Sat Mar 05, 2005 2:17 pm
by Abdullah Nazir
MuHtaramah
NIGAH Saahibah,
Purkhuloos Tasleemaat,
Guzarish No.3 ke misreA per aapki TaraHi ghazal bahut achchi hei, beHad pasand aayi khaaskar ghazal ke aakhiri 5 sheAr.
Meri daad aur mubaarakbaad qubool farmaayiye.
Aapka Mukhlis,
Nazir.
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Posted: Sat Mar 05, 2005 10:16 pm
by Anis Hasan
Mohtarma Nigah diyay gayay misray par buhat achi tarhee ghazal likhi hai aap nay saada aur dilkash bharpoor daad qabool kijiyay.
Re: Bahut khoob
Posted: Sun Mar 06, 2005 7:48 am
by nigaah
Abdullah Nazir wrote:
MuHtaramah
NIGAH Saahibah,
Purkhuloos Tasleemaat,
Guzarish No.3 ke misreA per aapki TaraHi ghazal bahut achchi hei, beHad pasand aayi khaaskar ghazal ke aakhiri 5 sheAr.
Meri daad aur mubaarakbaad qubool farmaayiye.
Aapka Mukhlis,
Nazir.
[/b]
Janaab Abdullah Nazir Sahab!!
aap jese aala paye ke shaair jab meri kisi adnaa kaawish ko saraah daiN tou bohut hausla milta hai...... saath hi ye itmenaan bhi ho jata hai ke ashaar main koi aieb hota tou wo bhi aap ki nazr-e-ameeq say bach nahiN sakta tha......yani ek tarah ka "check" ho jata hai........daad aur mubaarakbaad ke liye shukarguzaar hoooN...
Nigaah
Re: Ghazal..Guzarish #3
Posted: Sun Mar 06, 2005 10:19 am
by jawaid badauni
nigaah wrote:Assalam alaikum
Guzarish # 3 per meri adnaa si koshish haazir hai...
muhabbat say jab tak ibaadat na hogi
kisi kaam ki ye riyaazat na hogi....!!!
lutaai hai Khud zindagi jaan-o-dil say
na samjho ke hum maiN faraasat na hogi
bhalaa kiuN kahaiN tum say ulfat nahiN hai
abb iss maiN tou hum say siyaasat na hogi
kisi ko tabassum, kisi ko tawajju
"idher kiya nigaah-e-muhabbat na hogi"
raqeeboN ke aagay bichay jaa rahay ho
"idher kiya nigaah-e-muhabbat na hogi"
yeh waada karo abb na ruTho gay hum say
kaho, phir kabhi ye shikaayat na hogi
milaiN wo kabhi ajnabi banke hum say
nahiN!! is say baRhke qayaamat na hogi
sunaaieN tou kab daastaaN un ko apni
kabhi thi, na hai unko fursat, na hogi!!
aaKhir ke 2 ashaar ka aapas maiN talluq hai...jo Ghazal ke usooloN ke Khilaaf hai...lekin chooNke likhay thay tou yahaN bhi type kar deti hooN...
kiya arz,"mehfil maiN gar beth jaooN
hai umeed koi qabaahat na hogi"
kaha,"bethna chaahtay ho tou betho
magar bolnay ki ijaazat na hogi !!"
Nigaah
Azeeza nagaah Sahibah,
Aapki Ghazal bahut pasaNd aaye. Khusoosan "Tazmeen" ka to jawab hi nahiN. Kya sada aur khubsurat grah lagayee hai Bibi. Meri janib se daad.o.tahseen qubool farmaiye.
Khoosh raheN aur aise hi kahtee raheN.
Apka Mukhlis,
Jawaid Badauni
Re: Bahut khoob
Posted: Sun Mar 13, 2005 12:21 pm
by nigaah
Janab Jawaid Badayuni Sahab ..
aap ki hausla afzaai mere liye bohut qeemti hai ....aap ki daad aur mubarak baad ke liye saraapa tashakkur hooN ....
umeed hai aaienda bhi aap ki inaayat rahay gi...
Nigaah
Posted: Sun Mar 13, 2005 12:39 pm
by nigaah
Anis Hasan wrote:Mohtarma Nigah diyay gayay misray par buhat achi tarhee ghazal likhi hai aap nay saada aur dilkash bharpoor daad qabool kijiyay.
Anis Hasan Sahab
zarra nawaazi hai aap ki....bohut shukariya ...:)
Nigaah
Re: Ghazal..Guzarish #3
Posted: Mon Mar 14, 2005 7:09 am
by Mahtab Qadr
nigaah wrote:Assalam alaikum
Guzarish # 3 per meri adnaa si koshish haazir hai...
muhabbat say jab tak ibaadat na hogi
kisi kaam ki ye riyaazat na hogi....!!!
lutaai hai Khud zindagi jaan-o-dil say
na samjho ke hum maiN faraasat na hogi
bhalaa kiuN kahaiN tum say ulfat nahiN hai
abb iss maiN tou hum say siyaasat na hogi
kisi ko tabassum, kisi ko tawajju
"idher kiya nigaah-e-muhabbat na hogi"
raqeeboN ke aagay bichay jaa rahay ho
"idher kiya nigaah-e-muhabbat na hogi"
yeh waada karo abb na ruTho gay hum say
kaho, phir kabhi ye shikaayat na hogi
milaiN wo kabhi ajnabi banke hum say
nahiN!! is say baRhke qayaamat na hogi
sunaaieN tou kab daastaaN un ko apni
kabhi thi, na hai unko fursat, na hogi!!
aaKhir ke 2 ashaar ka aapas maiN talluq hai...jo Ghazal ke usooloN ke Khilaaf hai...lekin chooNke likhay thay tou yahaN bhi type kar deti hooN...
kiya arz,"mehfil maiN gar beth jaooN
hai umeed koi qabaahat na hogi"
kaha,"bethna chaahtay ho tou betho
magar bolnay ki ijaazat na hogi !!"
Nigaah
Nigaah sahiba
salam e masnoon
wah wah bahut khoob nigah ji aap ki ghazal bahut pasand aai , balke aapke ashaar se aapki kuhna mashqi ki khushbu aarahi hai, aakhri ke do sher jo qataband haiN ghaleban waqiaati haiN . ghazal se unka talluq na hote huve bhi sher achay lagay.
shukria
Mahtab Qadr
Re: Ghazal..Guzarish #3
Posted: Mon Mar 14, 2005 1:52 pm
by tahira Masood
nigaah wrote:Assalam alaikum
Guzarish # 3 per meri adnaa si koshish haazir hai...
muhabbat say jab tak ibaadat na hogi
kisi kaam ki ye riyaazat na hogi....!!!
lutaai hai Khud zindagi jaan-o-dil say
na samjho ke hum maiN faraasat na hogi
bhalaa kiuN kahaiN tum say ulfat nahiN hai
abb iss maiN tou hum say siyaasat na hogi
kisi ko tabassum, kisi ko tawajju
"idher kiya nigaah-e-muhabbat na hogi"
raqeeboN ke aagay bichay jaa rahay ho
"idher kiya nigaah-e-muhabbat na hogi"
yeh waada karo abb na ruTho gay hum say
kaho, phir kabhi ye shikaayat na hogi
milaiN wo kabhi ajnabi banke hum say
nahiN!! is say baRhke qayaamat na hogi
sunaaieN tou kab daastaaN un ko apni
kabhi thi, na hai unko fursat, na hogi!!
aaKhir ke 2 ashaar ka aapas maiN talluq hai...jo Ghazal ke usooloN ke Khilaaf hai...lekin chooNke likhay thay tou yahaN bhi type kar deti hooN...
kiya arz,"mehfil maiN gar beth jaooN
hai umeed koi qabaahat na hogi"
kaha,"bethna chaahtay ho tou betho
magar bolnay ki ijaazat na hogi !!"
Nigaah
Nigaah ji
tasleemaat!
Mashalah bohat hi Haseen kalaam inaayat kiya aaap ne. muslasal aur arwaaN. nehaayat sheereeN.
dilee daad ki mustaHiq haiN aap. khush rehaiN.
wassalam
Re: Ghazal..Guzarish #3
Posted: Sat Mar 19, 2005 3:15 pm
by nigaah
Mahtab Qadr wrote:nigaah wrote:Assalam alaikum
Guzarish # 3 per meri adnaa si koshish haazir hai...
muhabbat say jab tak ibaadat na hogi
kisi kaam ki ye riyaazat na hogi....!!!
lutaai hai Khud zindagi jaan-o-dil say
na samjho ke hum maiN faraasat na hogi
bhalaa kiuN kahaiN tum say ulfat nahiN hai
abb iss maiN tou hum say siyaasat na hogi
kisi ko tabassum, kisi ko tawajju
"idher kiya nigaah-e-muhabbat na hogi"
raqeeboN ke aagay bichay jaa rahay ho
"idher kiya nigaah-e-muhabbat na hogi"
yeh waada karo abb na ruTho gay hum say
kaho, phir kabhi ye shikaayat na hogi
milaiN wo kabhi ajnabi banke hum say
nahiN!! is say baRhke qayaamat na hogi
sunaaieN tou kab daastaaN un ko apni
kabhi thi, na hai unko fursat, na hogi!!
aaKhir ke 2 ashaar ka aapas maiN talluq hai...jo Ghazal ke usooloN ke Khilaaf hai...lekin chooNke likhay thay tou yahaN bhi type kar deti hooN...
kiya arz,"mehfil maiN gar beth jaooN
hai umeed koi qabaahat na hogi"
kaha,"bethna chaahtay ho tou betho
magar bolnay ki ijaazat na hogi !!"
Nigaah
Nigaah sahiba
salam e masnoon
wah wah bahut khoob nigah ji aap ki ghazal bahut pasand aai , balke aapke ashaar se aapki kuhna mashqi ki khushbu aarahi hai, aakhri ke do sher jo qataband haiN ghaleban waqiaati haiN . ghazal se unka talluq na hote huve bhi sher achay lagay.
shukria
Mahtab Qadr
Janab Mahtab Qadr Sahab!!
aap ki daad ke liye mamnoon thehri ..... bohut shukariya....aakhir ke 2 ashaar ke baaray maiN aap ka andaza durust hai...lekin behter hota agar ye 2 ashaar ek shair ki shakls maiN hoty .....yani agar Ghazal ki bahr 8 rukni fa'oolun hoti.... tab ye ek hi mazmoon ke aaienaadaar hotay aur Ghazal ka hissa bhi hotay.....
baharkaif...daad ke liye aap ka shukariya ...:)...koi Khaami dekhaiN tou us per bhi bila tawaqquf meri tawajju mabzool karwaaiye....
Nigaah
Re: Ghazal..Guzarish #3
Posted: Sat Mar 19, 2005 3:35 pm
by nigaah
tahira Masood wrote:nigaah wrote:Assalam alaikum
Guzarish # 3 per meri adnaa si koshish haazir hai...
muhabbat say jab tak ibaadat na hogi
kisi kaam ki ye riyaazat na hogi....!!!
lutaai hai Khud zindagi jaan-o-dil say
na samjho ke hum maiN faraasat na hogi
bhalaa kiuN kahaiN tum say ulfat nahiN hai
abb iss maiN tou hum say siyaasat na hogi
kisi ko tabassum, kisi ko tawajju
"idher kiya nigaah-e-muhabbat na hogi"
raqeeboN ke aagay bichay jaa rahay ho
"idher kiya nigaah-e-muhabbat na hogi"
yeh waada karo abb na ruTho gay hum say
kaho, phir kabhi ye shikaayat na hogi
milaiN wo kabhi ajnabi banke hum say
nahiN!! is say baRhke qayaamat na hogi
sunaaieN tou kab daastaaN un ko apni
kabhi thi, na hai unko fursat, na hogi!!
aaKhir ke 2 ashaar ka aapas maiN talluq hai...jo Ghazal ke usooloN ke Khilaaf hai...lekin chooNke likhay thay tou yahaN bhi type kar deti hooN...
kiya arz,"mehfil maiN gar beth jaooN
hai umeed koi qabaahat na hogi"
kaha,"bethna chaahtay ho tou betho
magar bolnay ki ijaazat na hogi !!"
Nigaah
Nigaah ji
tasleemaat!
Mashalah bohat hi Haseen kalaam inaayat kiya aaap ne. muslasal aur arwaaN. nehaayat sheereeN.
dilee daad ki mustaHiq haiN aap. khush rehaiN.
wassalam
Tahira Masood sahiba
bohut acha laga aap ke taassuraat jaan kar....ye kaawish aap ko achi lagi....qadr afzaai hai meri .....
daad ke liye bohut shukariya
Nigaah
Re: Ghazal..Guzarish #3
Posted: Wed Mar 23, 2005 4:24 am
by Hashmat Usmani
salaam Nigaah saaHiba,
ummeed hai ki aapke mizaaj e giraamii ba_Khair hoNge.
aapkii taraHii Ghazal nazar guzaar huii. aapkaa kalaam hameN bahot bhaayaa hai. masha allah aapne Khoob kaamiiyaab Ghazal kahii hai. merii jaanib se DheroN mubaarak_baad qubool kijiiye.
jab do ash'aar aapas meN Khayaal kii buniiyaad par marboot hote haiN to unheN qit'a kah lete haiN aur iskii qata'ii ijaazat hai usool e Ghazal goyii kii roo se...bas aap do ash'aar ke beech Harf-e-"qaaf" raqam kar dijiiye.
aapkii Ghazal kaa har she'r Khoob hai balki ek dusre se Khoob_tar hai. mubaarkaaN.
Hashmat
wah bahut khoob
Posted: Fri Mar 25, 2005 2:21 pm
by irfan barabankwi
mohtaramh
NIGAAH SAAHIBAH
purkhuloos tasleemat
aaj aapki ghazal meri nigaah se guzri. waah bahut umdah ghazal hai.
meri taraf se dili daad aur mubarakbad qubool kareiN.
khiar andaish
irfan barabankwi
Posted: Thu Apr 07, 2005 4:15 pm
by nigaah
Sara Sahiba
Assalam alaikum
aap ki hausla afzaai say dil ko Khaatir Khuaah taqwiyat hui....
....aayenda bhi nazar famaati rahiye.....daad aur mubaarakbaad ke liye maiN mamnoon thehri.....
Nigaah