ulfat
Posted: Tue Apr 12, 2005 5:20 pm
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moHteram Dawood ji :roseDawood_Rizwan wrote:tahira g adab
aap ki ghazal paRhi achi lagi. doo aik chhooTi chhooTii batooN par ghoor farma lain
teesray sher main lafz diwanay ki imla "ya" kay baghair hoo gi
us say aglay sher ka pehlay misray main aap nay " kah" koo doo rukni bandha hay joo beherhal darurst nahi go kah kafi loog aisa kar jatay hain. agar aap is suqam koo door kar lain too ziada munasib bat hoo gi
mukhlis
rizwan
matla acha hai, magar doosra misra beHr se kharij ho rahaa hai, aap yooN kar lijiye :teri ulfat ka yaqeen aata naheeN
daagh jo dil par laga hai jaata naheeN
khoob kahaa, bas aik aham baat ki taraf tavajjoh dilaana chaahooN ga ke , pehle mein "teri" aur doosre meiN "tum" shutur.gurbah paida kar rahaa hai. ye shaa'iree mein aib samjha jaata hai, is liye aap doosre misre ko yooN kar deN :teri chaahat rach gaii hai rooH meiN
koii bhi tum bin hameN bhata naheeN
khoob kahaa, acha she'r hai,raag ulfat ka baRa dil.soz hai
juz deewane ke koii gata naheeN
ye dono ashaar bhi pasand aaye, meri jaanib se daad qubool kijiye, aur isi taraH apni ghazal hameN sunaati raheN :)ham to keh dete haiN seedhi baat hi
TeRhii baatoN ka hunar aata naheeN
dekh kar dasht-e-junooN ke daam bhi
paaoN ka shoq-e-safar jaata naheeN
mohtaram rizwan saHibDawood_Rizwan wrote:
us say aglay sher ka pehlay misray main aap nay " kah" koo doo rukni bandha hay joo beherhal darurst nahi go kah kafi loog aisa kar jatay hain. agar aap is suqam koo door kar lain too ziada munasib bat hoo gi
mukhlis
rizwan