sara_j wrote:Wah shummu kya baat hai! aapne khoob ashaar nikaale hain aur bohat hi lajawaab.........sabhi ashaar bohat pasand aaye.
daad qubool keejiye :rose
sara
Shukriya Sara jee..arey aap ki baat bhala kaise Taal sakte the..aap ne kaha to hum lag gaye kaam pe..aur ye result nikla aap ko sabhi ashaar pasand aaye jaan kar khushi hui.....daad se nawaazne ka shukriyaa!!
Shumaila
Koi pooche humse hamaari haalat ka sabab
to ashk baha kar bhi baat adhoori reh jati hai
Waqt jaise kahin thehar sa gaya hai
Na Gham jaata hai na khushi aati hai
Aapki ghazal paRhkar bahut luTf aayaa. Is meiN koii shak nahiN ke aap ke kalaam meiN musalsal dilkashi aur paayedaari paidaa hourahii hei.
Meri jaanib se dili daad aur mubaarkabaad Haazir hei.
SheAr No.12 ke pahle miSreA meiN, aap ne seHr ko seHar likhdiyaa hei jis ki vajah se miSraA vazn se khaarij hourahaa hei lekin agar usko yooN kardeejiye to Teu durust houjaayega:
jawaid badauni wrote:Azeezah Shumaailah, Salam aur Doa
Khuda jane maiN aap ka naam saheeh likhta bhi hooN keh nahiN.
TaKheer se ghazal bhejne ka haseen izalah kiya hai aap ne, solah ashAAr aur woh bhi itne khubsoorat. Zindabad bahin.
Meri daad qubool kijiye.
Apka Mukhlis,
Jawaid Badauni
W'salaam Jawaid sahab!!!
jee jee bilkul sahi likhte hain..sahi talaffuz yahi hai naam ka yaani "shumaa'ilah"
bahut shukriya meri hausla afzaayi farmaane ka..bas jee koshish kar lete hain kuch likhne ki warna kahan mujhe itni shayri aati hai ..aap logon ke kalaam paRhne ke baad zara himmat aa jaati hai to likh lete hain TooTa phooTa
Talib-e-dua,
Shumaila
Koi pooche humse hamaari haalat ka sabab
to ashk baha kar bhi baat adhoori reh jati hai
Waqt jaise kahin thehar sa gaya hai
Na Gham jaata hai na khushi aati hai
Aapki ghazal paRhkar bahut luTf aayaa. Is meiN koii shak nahiN ke aap ke kalaam meiN musalsal dilkashi aur paayedaari paidaa hourahii hei.
Meri jaanib se dili daad aur mubaarkabaad Haazir hei.
SheAr No.12 ke pahle miSreA meiN, aap ne seHr ko seHar likhdiyaa hei jis ki vajah se miSraA vazn se khaarij hourahaa hei lekin agar usko yooN kardeejiye to Teu durust houjaayega:
jakaR letaa hei apne seHr meiN wo
Note:
seHar yaa saHar = SubH
seHr = jaadoo
Aapka Mukhlis,
Nazir.
Adaab Mohtaram Nazir sahab!
WaAllah aap ko apni thread mein dekh kar jhoom uThti hoon.... aap jaise kohna mashq shayar jab meir koshish ko saraahte hain to khushi se main phool jaati hoon aap ki daad paa ke dil baaGh baaGh ho gaya...shukriya dil ki gehraaiyoN se.....maine ab sher #12 ko badal diya hai aur kuch yuN kar diya hai..
12. jakaR letaa hai hum ko ik fusooN meiN
woh ho ker lab.kushaa jaadoogarii se
kaisa hai
Talib-e-duaa,
Shumaila
Koi pooche humse hamaari haalat ka sabab
to ashk baha kar bhi baat adhoori reh jati hai
Waqt jaise kahin thehar sa gaya hai
Na Gham jaata hai na khushi aati hai
bohut arsay baad muKhatib honay ka mouqa mila...:)...umeed hai Kheiryat say hoNgi aap.....
aur janaaaaab!... aap ke matlay tou bas....hum paRhtay haiN aur Parhtay hi chalay jaatay haiN kaiee baar....kahaN say lay aati haiN ye matloN ki bahaar aap ? :)....aaj raaz bata hi dijye ....:)...
koii hota nahiN mujrim khushii se
'khataa hoti hai Saahib aadmii se'
janaab matla'aat ki bhar maar se pareeshaan ho kar ham mufaSSal comments dene se a'aajiz haiN ! kuchh to Khudaa ka Khauf kejeye! aaKhir ungliyaaN haiN thak jaatee haiN likhte likhte ! is leye maiN ne is baar 3 mat'aoN aur 2 shea'roN par iktefaa kiyaa hai !
aap ki Ghazal ka har shea;r apnee daad wusool karchukaa hai , to ab maiN Ghareeb kis shumaar maiN ?
jitnee aap chaaheN daad qabool kejeye ! is KhoobSoorat taKhleeq par !
moKhliS :
Zia Baloch
Dikhaadi shaan, phir ahl-e-chaman ko, Be-niyaazi ki
Khamoshi se jhatak kar, aaj phir, dast-e-sabaa maiN ne
bohut arsay baad muKhatib honay ka mouqa mila...:)...umeed hai Kheiryat say hoNgi aap.....
aur janaaaaab!... aap ke matlay tou bas....hum paRhtay haiN aur Parhtay hi chalay jaatay haiN kaiee baar....kahaN say lay aati haiN ye matloN ki bahaar aap ? :)....aaj raaz bata hi dijye ....:)...
koii hota nahiN mujrim khushii se
'khataa hoti hai Saahib aadmii se'
jee nigaah sis kaisi hain aap? waqaii bahut arse baad aap ka deedaar naseeb hua...aap ko ghazal pasand aayi jaankar khushi hui...bahut bahut shukriya daad-o-tehseen se nawazne ka.... matle pata nahi kyon apne aap se hote chale jaate hain....na rokuN to saare matle ki hi ghazal tayyar ho jaaye lolz waise zia sahab bhi kam nahi matlon ki bauchaar karne mein
aati rahiyega ko bazm ko raunaq bakhsti rahiyega
Shumaila
Koi pooche humse hamaari haalat ka sabab
to ashk baha kar bhi baat adhoori reh jati hai
Waqt jaise kahin thehar sa gaya hai
Na Gham jaata hai na khushi aati hai
zmufti wrote:Shummo jee
aap ki ghazal buhat achi lagi
khas tor per yeh sher
ye kaisa shehr hai? yaaro!yahaan par
humeiN hotii hai wehshat aadmii se
take care
zarqa
Zarqaa jee ghazal ki pazeraayi farmaane ka aur khaas taur pe us ek sher ko pasand farmaane ka dili shukriya
SHumaila
Koi pooche humse hamaari haalat ka sabab
to ashk baha kar bhi baat adhoori reh jati hai
Waqt jaise kahin thehar sa gaya hai
Na Gham jaata hai na khushi aati hai