taza ghazal guzarish no 8

[khozema husaini]

hazreen e mehfil
assalam o alaikum
3 maah ki taweel gairhazri ke baad ghazal ke saath hazir hua hoon shayad kisi qabil ho aur hamesha ki tarah aap ki aara ka intezaar rahega
talib e duAa
husaini
ghazal
mili souGHaat yeh deevaangi se
rihaii mil gai qaid e KHudii se

nazar hum per hi itni barhami se?
milo ho jabkeh sab se KHushdili se

mila tohfa hameN yeh zindagi se
raha Khali nah daman bekasi se

hue manos hum yuoN teeragi se
keh bujh jata hai ab dil roshni se

saKHi se aur nah ibn e saKHi se
miri Aadat nahiN maagooN kisi se

ba faiz e ishq chashm e tar se gohar
luTae hum ne bhi daryah dili se

ajab hai kaif e qaid e zulf e dilbar
aseeri chahta hai dil KHushi se

zehr kaise adawat men ugalna
yeh fun ab saaNp seekheN aadmi se

azal hi se yeh baani e KHataa hai
KHataa hoti hai saheb aadmi se

tabiyat per girani hai husaini
chalo behlayen ab dil shaeri se

[Star Mind]

subHaana-Allah !

Hussaini SaaHib, aap ne to Ghazab Dhaadiyaa ! maashaa Allah kyaa kamaal ki Ghazal kahee hai aap ne ! G Khush hogayaa !

aek aek shea'r dil maiN utar jaane waalaa !

kis kis ko daad deN ! poori Ghazal hi daad k qaabil hai !

meeri jaanib se itnee KhoobSoorat Ghazal par DheroN daad qabool ho ! shukriya

moKhliS :

Zia Baloch

[abdulqayyum sahil]

MuHtarami
Khozema Husaini Saahib,

Aapki ghazal bahut pasand aay jo yooN hei:

ghazal
hua yeh faidah deevaangi se
rihaii mil gai qaid e KHudii se

nazar hum per hi itni barhami se?
milo ho jabkeh sab se KHushdili se

mile hen yeh tahaaef zindagi se
raha labrez daman bekasi se

hue manos hum yuoN teeragi se
keh dil ghabra raha hai roshni se

saKHi se aur nah ibn e saKHi se
miri Aadat nahiN maagooN kisi se

ba faiz e ishq chashm e tar se gohar
luTae hum ne bhi daryah dili se

ajab hai kaif e qaid e zulf e dilbar
aseeri chahta hai dil KHushi se

adawat men zahar kaise ugalna
yeh fun ab saaNp seekheN aadmi se

azal hi se sazawaar e KHataa hai
KHataa hoti hai saheb aadmi se

tabiyat per garani hai husaini
chalo behlayenge dil shaeri se

Aapke teesre shear ke doosre misre meiN "labrez" kaa lafz munaasib nahiN maloom houaa.

sheAr No.5 ke pahle miSreA meiN "nah" ko bar-vazn "naa" isteAmaal karnaa bhii bahut hii shaaz hei jisko ghalaT samjhaa jaasaktaa hei.

SheAr No.8 ke pahle miSreA meiN "zehar" kaa lafz "zahr" barvazn fikr, kufr, hounaa chaahiye. Isko agar miSreA meiN ham saHeeH talaffuz se paRheN tou miSraA bevazn houjaayegaa.

Waise manavi liHaaz se aapki ghazal beHad pasand aayi jiske liye meri daad aur mubaarakbaad qubool farmaayiye.

Khair Andesh,
Sahil,

[Shummu]

nazar hum per hi itni barhami se?
milo ho jabkeh sab se KHushdili se

mile hen yeh tahaaef zindagi se
raha labrez daman bekasi se

hue manos hum yuoN teeragi se
keh dil ghabra raha hai roshni se

ba faiz e ishq chashm e tar se gohar
luTae hum ne bhi daryah dili se

ajab hai kaif e qaid e zulf e dilbar
aseeri chahta hai dil KHushi se

adawat men zahar kaise ugalna
yeh fun ab saaNp seekheN aadmi se

tabiyat per garani hai husaini
chalo behlayenge dil shaeri se

wah bahut khoob! Daad haazir hai....is umda kaavish pe Khozema sahab

Shumaila

[khozema husaini]

janab zia saheb
mohtaram sahil saheb
mohtarma shumaila sahibah
aadaab
ghazal ki pazeeraii ka shukriya men sahil saheb ka batour e KHaas mamnoon hoon ke unhon ne ghazal ki ghalatiyon ki nishandahi farmaii
bohat bohat shukriyah
husaini

[khozema husaini]

shukriyah sara sahebah
Husaini