Meri Tarahee Ghazal (Guzarish # 9)
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Meri Tarahee Ghazal (Guzarish # 9)
Azeezaan-e giraamee, Aadaab
Rasme qadeem ko qayam rakhte hoe sub se pahle
Mushaaireh meN haazri laga raha hooN. Baani-e Mushaa-
rah ne iss baat ki ijazat dedi hai keh "Kya" lafz ko qafiya
aur "Karte" lafz ko radeef banaya ja sakta hai. Main ne
apni ghazal meN iss riaayat se fayida uThaya hai.
Ummid hai apni aara se nawazeNge aur meri himmat
afzaaii farmayeNge.
Nacheez,
Jawaid badauni
Ghazal
Woh mire haq meN bud-doa karte
Kaash itna mira bhalaa karte
Hum ne kashtee bachaa to lee lekin
Kaash yeh kaam naKhooda karte
Ishq hota jo ik rahe aasaaN
Log kyooN ishq se bachaa karte
Laakh sajdoN se kum nah tha ai Sheikh
Ek majboor ka bhalaa karte
Hum samajhte thay apne gham ka viqaar
“Hum bhalaa arz-e haal kya karte”
Dard hi aasra tha jeene ka
Kiss liye dard ki dawa karte
Aaj hota jo har bashar sairab
Log kyooN yaad "Karabala" karte
Umrbhar justjoo rahee :Jawaid:
Dost kuch pyaar se mila karte
Last edited by jawaid badauni on Fri Sep 02, 2005 6:50 am, edited 5 times in total.
waah SaaHib ! maan gaye aap ko !
janaab Jawaid Badauni SaaHib, aadaab
aap ki Ghazal naz^ar nawaaz hoi aur Hasb--e-saabiq bohut pasand bhi aayee !
maashaa Allah aap ne to beThe beThe hi likh Daali ghazal ! bohut Khoob !
sabhi ash'aar Khoob haiN ! daad qabool kejeye !
wese SaaHib , pehle ham bhi yehi kiyaa karte the , udhar miSra' dekhaa idhar Ghazal likh Daali , laken ab zaraa sust paR gaye haiN , waqt k jhameloN maiN phaNsne ki wajh se !
shukriya
daad qabool kejeye aek baar phir ! aap ka munfarif andaaz hamesha se pasand hai mujhe ! shukriya
moKhliS :
Zia Baloch
janaab Jawaid Badauni SaaHib, aadaab
aap ki Ghazal naz^ar nawaaz hoi aur Hasb--e-saabiq bohut pasand bhi aayee !
maashaa Allah aap ne to beThe beThe hi likh Daali ghazal ! bohut Khoob !
sabhi ash'aar Khoob haiN ! daad qabool kejeye !
wese SaaHib , pehle ham bhi yehi kiyaa karte the , udhar miSra' dekhaa idhar Ghazal likh Daali , laken ab zaraa sust paR gaye haiN , waqt k jhameloN maiN phaNsne ki wajh se !
shukriya
daad qabool kejeye aek baar phir ! aap ka munfarif andaaz hamesha se pasand hai mujhe ! shukriya
moKhliS :
Zia Baloch
Dikhaadi shaan, phir ahl-e-chaman ko, Be-niyaazi ki
Khamoshi se jhatak kar, aaj phir, dast-e-sabaa maiN ne
Zia Baloch
Khamoshi se jhatak kar, aaj phir, dast-e-sabaa maiN ne
Zia Baloch
Khoob kahaa Sara jee !sara_j wrote:mujhe tou umr ka taqaaza lagta haiStar Mind wrote:
wese SaaHib , pehle ham bhi yehi kiyaa karte the , udhar miSra' dekhaa idhar Ghazal likh Daali , laken ab zaraa sust paR gaye haiN , waqt k jhameloN maiN phaNsne ki wajh se !
moKhliS :
Zia Baloch
Dikhaadi shaan, phir ahl-e-chaman ko, Be-niyaazi ki
Khamoshi se jhatak kar, aaj phir, dast-e-sabaa maiN ne
Zia Baloch
Khamoshi se jhatak kar, aaj phir, dast-e-sabaa maiN ne
Zia Baloch
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Star Mind wrote:waah SaaHib ! maan gaye aap ko !
janaab Jawaid Badauni SaaHib, aadaab
aap ki Ghazal naz^ar nawaaz hoi aur Hasb--e-saabiq bohut pasand bhi aayee !
maashaa Allah aap ne to beThe beThe hi likh Daali ghazal ! bohut Khoob !
sabhi ash'aar Khoob haiN ! daad qabool kejeye !
wese SaaHib , pehle ham bhi yehi kiyaa karte the , udhar miSra' dekhaa idhar Ghazal likh Daali , laken ab zaraa sust paR gaye haiN , waqt k jhameloN maiN phaNsne ki wajh se !
shukriya
daad qabool kejeye aek baar phir ! aap ka munfarif andaaz hamesha se pasand hai mujhe ! shukriya
moKhliS :
Zia Baloch
Bahut bahut shukriya Zia Sahab. Aaap ki daad meN Khuloos-e dil shamil ho gaya hai. Behud mamnoon hooN.
MaiN agar jald nah kahoN to Ghazal hamesha ke liye rah jayegi aur Bani-e Mushaairah ki barhamee ka samna karna paR sakta hai. Aap aaraam se kah leN jaldi kya hai.
HameN aapki Ghazal ka intezar rehega.
Apka Bhai
Jawaid
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Re: Meri Tarahee Ghazal (Guzarish # 9)
Azeezah Sara Sahibah, Doasara_j wrote:jawaid bhai,jawaid badauni wrote:
Azeezaan-e giraamee, Aadaab
Rasme qadeem ko qayam rakhte hoe sub se pahle Mushaaireh meN haazri laga raha hooN. Baani-e Mushaarah ne iss baat ki ijazat dedi hai keh "Kya" lafz ko qafiya aur "Karte" lafz ko radeef banaya ja sakta hai. Main ne apni ghazal meN iss riaayat se faida uThaya hai.
Ummid hai apni aara se nawazeNge aur meri himmat afzaaii farmayeNge.
Nacheez,
Jawaid badauni
Ghazal
Woh mire haq meN bud-doa karte
Kaash itna mira bhalaa karte
Hum ne kashtee bachaa to lee lekin
Kaash yeh kaam naKhooda karte
Ishq hota jo ik rahe aasaaN
Log kyooN ishq se bachaa karte
Laakh sajdoN se kum na tha ai Sheikh
Ek majboor ka bhalaa karte
Hum samajhte thay apne gham ka viqaar
“Hum bhalaa arz-e haal kya karte”
Dard hi aasra tha jeene ka
Kiss liye dard ki dawa karte
Aaj hota jo har bashar sairab
Log kyooN yaad Karabala karte
Umrbhar justjoo rahee :Jawaid:
Dost kuch pyaar se mila karte
salaam.
"bunyaad tum ne Daali hei rasm-e-qadeem kii
is iltifaat-e-sheAr o sukhan kaa nahiN javaab"
aapki ghazal jo apne on the spot likhdi
bohat pasand aayi sabhi ashaar bohat ache hain .
daad qubool keejiye.
sara
Binaye aashyan to Daal dee hai
Ab aage jo reza burq-e tapaan ki
Aap ki daad ka bhi jawab nahiN bahin. MaiN agar jald nah kahooN to sher kah hi nahin pata. Kuch aisa hi hai shuroo se.
Guzishta Mushaairah zara sust chala tha magar bAAd meN itni GhazaleN aayeeN aur itni achchee achchee ghazaleN aaiiN keh jiski had nah thee. Ummid hai iss baaar bhi hamara Mushaairah bahut kaamyab rahega.
Nazir Sahab ke karam se hamare nacheez deevan meN har maah ek nacheez ghazal ka izafa ho jata hai.
Faqat,
Jawaid
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Bahut khoob waah waah
MuHtarami o Azeezi
Jawaid Badayuni Saahib,
Purkhuloos Tasleemaat,
Hasb-e-rasm-e-dereenah, sab se pahle aap kii hii TaraHi ghazal paRhne ko mili jou yooN hei:
Woh mire haq meN bud-doa karte
Kaash itna mira bhalaa karte
Hum ne kashtee bachaa to lee lekin
Kaash yeh kaam naKhooda karte
Ishq hota jo ik rahe aasaaN
Log kyooN ishq se bachaa karte
Laakh sajdoN se kum na tha ai Sheikh
Ek majboor ka bhalaa karte
Hum samajhte thay apne gham ka viqaar
“Hum bhalaa arz-e haal kya karte”
Dard hi aasra tha jeene ka
Kiss liye dard ki dawa karte
Aaj hota jo har bashar sairab
Log kyooN yaad Karabala karte
Umrbhar justjoo rahee :Jawaid:
Dost kuch pyaar se mila karte
Saare ke saare ashAaar bahut khoob heiN aur aapki kuhnah mashqi aur mahaarat ki daleel bhi.
Is dilkash aur kaamyaab kaavish per meri dili daad aur mubaarakbaad qubool farmaayiye.
Aapka Mukhlis,
Nazir.[/i]
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Re: Bahut khoob waah waah
WEBMASTER wrote:
MuHtarami o Azeezi
Jawaid Badayuni Saahib,
Purkhuloos Tasleemaat,
Hasb-e-rasm-e-dereenah, sab se pahle aap kii hii TaraHi ghazal paRhne ko mili jou yooN hei:
Woh mire haq meN bud-doa karte
Kaash itna mira bhalaa karte
Hum ne kashtee bachaa to lee lekin
Kaash yeh kaam naKhooda karte
Ishq hota jo ik rahe aasaaN
Log kyooN ishq se bachaa karte
Laakh sajdoN se kum na tha ai Sheikh
Ek majboor ka bhalaa karte
Hum samajhte thay apne gham ka viqaar
“Hum bhalaa arz-e haal kya karte”
Dard hi aasra tha jeene ka
Kiss liye dard ki dawa karte
Aaj hota jo har bashar sairab
Log kyooN yaad Karabala karte
Umrbhar justjoo rahee :Jawaid:
Dost kuch pyaar se mila karte
Saare ke saare ashAaar bahut khoob heiN aur aapki kuhnah mashqi aur mahaarat ki daleel bhi.
Is dilkash aur kaamyaab kaavish per meri dili daad aur mubaarakbaad qubool farmaayiye.
Aapka Mukhlis,
Nazir.[/i]
Mohtaram Abdullah Nazir Sahab,
Aapki daad.o.tahseen hamare liye sanad ka darjah rakhtee hai isee liye aapke graNqadr tabsaaroN ka intezaar rahta hai.
Insha Allah, Mushaairah iss baar aur bhi bahut ziyadah kaamyaab rahega kyooNkeh iss baar misraH bahut aasaan hai aur iss meN bahut gunjaa,ish hai. Waise hamara guzishta Mushaairah bhi bahut kaamyaab tha. Log aaraam se kalam bhejeNge, sub meri tarah "jaldbaaz to hote nahiN haiN."
Nacheez,
Jawaid
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Mohtarma Z. Mufti Sahibahzmufti wrote:Javaid sahib
aap ki ghazal buhat pasand aayii
sarey ashaar achey haiN
khas ker yeh
Dard hi aasra tha jeene ka
Kiss liye dard ki dawa karte
regards
zmufti
Aapki purkhuloos daad.o.tahseen ke liye aap ka mamnoon hooN. Ummid hai aaindah bhi apne tabsaroN se nawazti raheNgee.
Khoosh raheN!
Jawaid
Re: Meri Tarahee Ghazal (Guzarish # 9)
Woh mire haq meN bud-doa karte
Kaash itna mira bhalaa karte
Hum ne kashtee bachaa to lee lekin
Kaash yeh kaam naKhooda karte
Laakh sajdoN se kum nah tha ai Sheikh
Ek majboor ka bhalaa karte
Hum samajhte thay apne gham ka viqaar
“Hum bhalaa arz-e haal kya karte”
Dard hi aasra tha jeene ka
Kiss liye dard ki dawa karte
Umrbhar justjoo rahee :Jawaid:
Dost kuch pyaar se mila karte
bahut hi khoob!!!!!!!!!!!!aap ki ye ghazal bhi hasb-e-ma'aamol behad pasand aayi.....dheron daad haazir hai
Shumaila
Koi pooche humse hamaari haalat ka sabab
to ashk baha kar bhi baat adhoori reh jati hai
Waqt jaise kahin thehar sa gaya hai
Na Gham jaata hai na khushi aati hai
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Re: Meri Tarahee Ghazal (Guzarish # 9)
Shummu wrote:Woh mire haq meN bud-doa karte
Kaash itna mira bhalaa karte
Hum ne kashtee bachaa to lee lekin
Kaash yeh kaam naKhooda karte
Laakh sajdoN se kum nah tha ai Sheikh
Ek majboor ka bhalaa karte
Hum samajhte thay apne gham ka viqaar
“Hum bhalaa arz-e haal kya karte”
Dard hi aasra tha jeene ka
Kiss liye dard ki dawa karte
Umrbhar justjoo rahee :Jawaid:
Dost kuch pyaar se mila karte
bahut hi khoob!!!!!!!!!!!!aap ki ye ghazal bhi hasb-e-ma'aamol behad pasand aayi.....dheron daad haazir hai
Shumaila
Shumaila Sahibah,,bahut bahut shukriya.
Khoosh Rahen!
Jawaid
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moHtaram janab-e- Jawaid Badauni SaaHeb:
Aadaab-o-tasleemat,
aap kee ghazal daikhee aur achii lagee so daad qubool keejiye. khaS taur par yeh ashaar pasand aaye jin meN saadgi aur manviyat donooN yakjah heN.
wassalam
Zahida Raees :Raji:
Aadaab-o-tasleemat,
aap kee ghazal daikhee aur achii lagee so daad qubool keejiye. khaS taur par yeh ashaar pasand aaye jin meN saadgi aur manviyat donooN yakjah heN.
Jawaid Badauni wrote:
Hum ne kashtee bachaa to lee lekin
Kaash yeh kaam naKhooda karte
Dard hi aasra tha jeene ka
kes liye dard ki dawa karte
wassalam
Zahida Raees :Raji:
Meree sha'iree se mujhe jaan Lo
ke yeh aa'enaa hai meri zaat ka
(Raji)
ke yeh aa'enaa hai meri zaat ka
(Raji)
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Mohtarma Zahida Raees SahibahRaji wrote:moHtaram janab-e- Jawaid Badauni SaaHeb:
Aadaab-o-tasleemat,
aap kee ghazal daikhee aur achii lagee so daad qubool keejiye. khaS taur par yeh ashaar pasand aaye jin meN saadgi aur manviyat donooN yakjah heN.
Jawaid Badauni wrote:
Hum ne kashtee bachaa to lee lekin
Kaash yeh kaam naKhooda karte
Dard hi aasra tha jeene ka
kes liye dard ki dawa karte
wassalam
Zahida Raees :Raji:
Bahut din bAAd aapka tabsara dekh kar khooshi hoii. Himmat afzaaii ke liye bahut bahut shukriya.
Khulooskaar,
Jawaid Badauni