aek maAmooli sii taazah ghazal: Abdullah Nazir.

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aek maAmooli sii taazah ghazal: Abdullah Nazir.

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MuHtaramaat o MuHtarameen
aHbaab-e-sukhan,

PurkhulooS tasleemaat, :rose

apni aek maAmooli sii taazah ghazal pesh karne kii saAadat HaaSil karrahaa hooN. Ummeed ke aap apni giraaNqadr aaraa se navaazkar khaaksaar ko shukriyah adaa karne kaa mauqaA denge.

G H A Z A L (roman meiN):

souzish-e-zakhm-e-jigar hei maiN hooN
qulzum-e-deeda-e-tar hei maiN hooN

manzil-e-shauq kaa armaaN thaa bahut
dhoop hei gard-e-safar hei maiN hooN

paa'idaari kii nah taufeeq houi
reit per khaabaoN kaa ghar hei maiN hooN

raaHat-e-dil hei kahaaN dunyaa meiN
gardish-e-shaam o saHar hei maiN hooN

yehi miAraaj-e-muHabbat tou nahiN
meraa sar hei tiraa dar hei maiN hooN

zulmat-e-hijr meiN hei aas kaa noor
uske aane kii khabar hei maiN hooN

apni kashti meiN hooN tanhaa :Nazir:
qahr-e-ToofaaN hei bhaNwar hei maiN hooN
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Aapka MukhliS,
Nazir.

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Mohtarmee Abdullah Nazir SaHab, aadaab

Mujhe Khooshi hai aap ki is haseen Ghazal per sub se pahle tabsara bhejne ke s'AAdat haSil kar raha hooN. Behud haseen Ghazal hai. Awwal to zameen hi nihayat umdah hai. Kaash aap ki yeh Ghazal kisee Khooshguloo glukaar ke haaTh lag jaye mazaa aa jayega. Aapke tamam ashAAr sheiriyyat se bharpoor haiN. Meri janib se daad qubool kijiye. Ummid hai aaindah bhi aisa kalam inayat karte raheNge.


Khulooskaar,

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Salam Nazir sahab ...

MASHALLAH bohat khoob ghazal hay ...

Aik achhay ghazal hum tak pohnchaanay k liye aap k mamnoon haiN.

Khush rahain

Khair Andesh

Raheel Ahmed
Kab Say HooN , Kia BataaooN Jahan-e-Kharab Main
Shab-Haaye Hijr Ko Bhee RakhooN Gar Hisab Main
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moHtaram janab-e-Abdullah Nazir SaaHeb:
Aadaab-o-tasleemaat,


aap ne apnii is KhaS ghazal ko mamoolii ka naam de kar achaa naheeN kiyaa.

choTee beher meN aap kee is ghazal ke tamaam hee ashaar be-intihaa pasand aaye.
kuch arse se maiN meHsoos kar rahii hooN keh aap kee ghazaloN peh ek munfarid rang chah gaya hai.
jo paRhne waale ko apnee taraf khaiNchtaa chala jaataa hai. aur kalaam ko baar baar paRhne par majboor kar daitaa hai.

meree janib se yeh KhoobSoorat taKhleeq pesh karne par dilee daad aur mubarakbaad qubool keejiye.

wassalaam

Zahida Raees :Raji:
Meree sha'iree se mujhe jaan Lo
ke yeh aa'enaa hai meri zaat ka
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wah bahut khoob....umda ghazal likhi hai aapne...... :grin:

Koi pooche humse hamaari haalat ka sabab
to ashk baha kar bhi baat adhoori reh jati hai

Waqt jaise kahin thehar sa gaya hai
Na Gham jaata hai na khushi aati hai
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mukarramee Nazir SaaHeb:aadaab!

aap kee Ghazal muKhtaSar sahee lekin ma'moolee to hargiz naheeN hai! ch`oTee beHr meN ma'nee-aafreenee aasaan to naheeN! Ghazal aap ke maKhSooS raNg kee aa,eenah-daar hai aur u'mdah hai. meree naacheez daad qubool keejiYe.

aaj kal yeh bazm bohat Khaamosh hai. eHbaab ko kuch` karne kee Z^aroorat hai!

Sarwar A. Raz "Sarwar"
yooN aur bohat a'ib haiN :Sarwar: meN wa-lekin
kambaKht muHabbat meN to yaktaa nazar aayaa

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shukriyah

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MuHtarami
Sarwar A. Raz :Sarwar: SaaHib,

PurkhulooS tasleemaat,

Aapke tabSire ke liye beHad shukrguzaar hooN.

aayindah bhi meri HauSlah afzaayi farmaate rahiye aur saath saath rehnumaayi bhii.


Aapka MukhliS,
Nazir.

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