Ghazal: "hisaar-e-zaat se..."

[irfan abid]

aadaab, dosto!

ek haaliya Ghazal pesh-e-Khidmat hai. mulaahiza farmaaiye aur bataaiye ki kaisii lagii.

Ghazal

hisaar-e-zaat se gar ham nikal nahiiN sakte
diye hamaare tafakkur ke jal nahiiN sakte

hai inqilaab-e-zamaanaa kaa Khvaab be.maanii
ham apne aap ko jab tak badal nahiiN sakte

khulii fazaa kii zaruurat jinheN ho vo paude
ghane daraKht ke saaye meN phal nahiiN sakte

unhiiN kii raah meN patthar bichhaaye hai dunyaa
zaraa sii choT jo khaa kar saNbhal nahiiN sakte

Ghubaar-e-raah kaa saa hashr un kaa hotaa hai
jo log chaal zamaane kii chal nahiiN sakte

vo ban ke zahr dil-o-jaaN meN phail jaate haiN
ba.raah-e-chashm jo aaNsuu ubal nahiiN sakte

kayii to dafn hii rahte haiN dil meN, ai :Abid:
ki saare dard to sheroN meN Dhal nahiiN sakte!

niyaazmand,
Irfan :Abid:

[naheedv]

aadaab, dosto!

ek haaliya Ghazal pesh-e-Khidmat hai. mulaahiza farmaaiye aur bataaiye ki kaisii lagii.

Ghazal

hisaar-e-zaat se gar ham nikal nahiiN sakte
diye hamaare tafakkur ke jal nahiiN sakte

hai inqilaab-e-zamaanaa kaa Khvaab be.maanii
ham apne aap ko jab tak badal nahiiN sakte

khulii fazaa kii zaruurat jinheN ho vo paude
ghane daraKht ke saaye meN phal nahiiN sakte

unhiiN kii raah meN patthar bichhaaye hai dunyaa
zaraa sii choT jo khaa kar saNbhal nahiiN sakte

Ghubaar-e-raah kaa saa hashr un kaa hotaa hai
jo log chaal zamaane kii chal nahiiN sakte

vo ban ke zahr dil-o-jaaN meN phail jaate haiN
ba.raah-e-chashm jo aaNsuu ubal nahiiN sakte

kayii to dafn hii rahte haiN dil meN, ai :Abid:
ki saare dard to sheroN meN Dhal nahiiN sakte!

niyaazmand,
Irfan :Abid:

jajaab Irfan saahab,
salaam,

buhat din ke ba'd aap kaa kalaam nazar nawaz huvaa aur hamesha ki tarah aap kee ye taazah ba taazah ghazal bhee buhat umdah rahi. wah, buhat hi haqeeqat pasaNdaanah tafakkur ki micaal paish kee hai aap ne. iss khoobsoorat kaavish par daad paish karti hooN.

aik choTi see baat, jis se aap kaa mutafiq honaa zaroori naheeN hai.
she'r 5 ke pehle miSre meiN "raah kaa saa" thoRaa kaanoN ko chubh rahaa hai. mujhey ye misra' 3,4 baar paRhnaa paRaa sirf samajhne ke liye, ho saktaa hai ye meree naa.ehli ho aur asaatazah ko aisaa na mehsoos ho. khair maiN ne sochaa ke maiN apnaa tajruba bataati chalooN :)
ghazal kaa maqta' buhat khoob hai. waah!

mukhlis
Naheed

[Mahtab Qadr]

Irfan Abid sahib salam e masnoon

hisaar-e-zaat se gar ham nikal nahiiN sakte
diye hamaare tafakkur ke jal nahiiN sakte
bahut umda khyal hai

hai inqilaab-e-zamaanaa kaa Khvaab be.maanii
ham apne aap ko jab tak badal nahiiN sakte
bilkul baja farmaya hai, khuda ne aajtak us qaum ki halat nahi badli , naho jisko khyal aap apni halat ke badalne ka.

khulii fazaa kii zaruurat jinheN ho vo paude
ghane daraKht ke saaye meN phal nahiiN sakte
wah anokha khyal hai aur bahut khoob hai.

unhiiN kii raah meN patthar bichhaaye hai dunyaa
zaraa sii choT jo khaa kar saNbhal nahiiN sakte
acha sher hai

Ghubaar-e-raah kaa saa hashr un kaa hotaa hai
jo log chaal zamaane kii chal nahiiN sakte
theek hai

vo ban ke zahr dil-o-jaaN meN phail jaate haiN
ba.raah-e-chashm jo aaNsuu ubal nahiiN sakte
wah wah bahut khoob

kayii to dafn hii rahte haiN dil meN, ai :Abid:
ki saare dard to sheroN meN Dhal nahiiN sakte!
wah bahut umda sher hai aur sahi kaha hai aapne bilkulaisa hi hota hai
shukria

MahtabQadr

[Sarwar A. Raz]

mukarramee Irfan SaaHeb: aadaab a'rZ^!

aap kee yeh Ghazal Hasb-e-ma'mool u'mdah hai. kayee Khayaalaat Zehn meN aaYe. sab se oopar daad kaa number th'aa. so HaaZ^ir hai! Ghazal meN aap kaa KhaaS raNg numaayaaN hai. ab ek baat kee ijaazat?

Ghubaar-e-raah kaa saa hashr un kaa hotaa hai
jo log chaal zamaane kii chal nahiiN sakte

is she'r se to yeh caabit huwaa keh jo log zamaaneh ke saath` naheeN chal sakte un kaa Haal Kharaab hotaa hai aur woh SafHah-e-hastee se miT jaate haiN. yeh to a'jeeb see baat hai! Haqeeqat to yeh hai keh vohee log kaam kar gaye jo zamaane se laRe! aap Khud hee socheN ge to ma'loom ho jaaYe gaa keh jo log zamaane se alag chale haiN unhoN ne hee inqilaab bapaa kiYe haiN. ziyaadah Hadd-e-adab!

Sarwar A. Raz :Sarwar:

[Abdullah Nazir]

Muhtaram Bhaayi
IRFAN ABID Saahib,


Purkhuloos Tasleemaat,

Aapki ghazal se bahut luTf andouz houaa. Her sheAr ma'ni aafreeN hei aur waqt-e-Haazir kii Aakkasi karrahaa hei:
Ghazal

hisaar-e-zaat se gar ham nikal nahiiN sakte
diye hamaare tafakkur ke jal nahiiN sakte

hai inqilaab-e-zamaanaa kaa Khvaab be.maanii
ham apne aap ko jab tak badal nahiiN sakte

khulii fazaa kii zaruurat jinheN ho vo paude
ghane daraKht ke saaye meN phal nahiiN sakte

unhiiN kii raah meN patthar bichhaaye hai dunyaa
zaraa sii choT jo khaa kar saNbhal nahiiN sakte

Ghubaar-e-raah kaa saa hashr un kaa hotaa hai
jo log chaal zamaane kii chal nahiiN sakte

vo ban ke zahr dil-o-jaaN meN phail jaate haiN
ba.raah-e-chashm jo aaNsuu ubal nahiiN sakte

kayii to dafn hii rahte haiN dil meN, ai :Abid:
ki saare dard to sheroN meN Dhal nahiiN sakte!)))

Saare ashAaar bahut pasand aaye. Khaksaar kii daad aur mubarakbaad qubool farmaayiye.


Aapka Mukhlis,
Nazir.



(((

[irfan abid]

Naheed sahiba, aadaab!

kaisii haiN aap? bahut dinoN baad niyaaz haasil huaa. aap ne Ghazal pasand farmaayii, to ye mere liye masarrat kaa maqaam huaa. inaayaat kaa shukriya!

paaNchveN sher ke pahle misre kii adaaigii meN aap ko diqqat shaayad is liye pesh aayii ki is meN lafz-e-:kaa: kaa alif gir rahaa hai. aap to jaantii hii haiN ki is kii ijaazat hai, lekin is se ravaanii par farq to baharhaal paRtaa hai. aap kaa Khat dekh kar hii maiN is misre par nazar-e-saanii karne jaa rahaa thaa ki Sarwar Sb kaa Khat bhii nigaah se guzraa. sher kii maujuudah shakl mere taKhayyul ko safaaii se zaahir nahiiN kar sakii. so is sher par mazeed fikr yuuN bhii darkaar hai! :)

niyaazmand,
Irfan :Abid:

[Shummu]

Wah Wah Wah Irfan sahab...kya kehna...bahut hi umda..har sher apni misaal aap ke...bahut umda ghazal kahi hai aapne hamesha ki tarah..har sher per besaakhta wah nikal raha hai...dheron daad haazir hai is behtareen ghazal pe...ye ash'aar zyaada pasand aaye...

hisaar-e-zaat se gar ham nikal nahiiN sakte
diye hamaare tafakkur ke jal nahiiN sakte

--wah bahut khoob matla!! 8O

khulii fazaa kii zaruurat jinheN ho vo paude
ghane daraKht ke saaye meN phal nahiiN sakte

unhiiN kii raah meN patthar bichhaaye hai dunyaa
zaraa sii choT jo khaa kar saNbhal nahiiN sakte

vo ban ke zahr dil-o-jaaN meN phail jaate haiN
ba.raah-e-chashm jo aaNsuu ubal nahiiN sakte

ye 3 ash'aar bhi bahut khoob lage..!

kayii to dafn hii rahte haiN dil meN, ai :Abid:
ki saare dard to sheroN meN Dhal nahiiN sakte!

Wah..maqta sab se zyaada pasand aaya!!! :)

Shumaila

[Hashmat Usmani]

salaam 'Abid saaHib,

aapkii Ghazal nazar nawaaz huii magar zara taaKhir se, kiuNki:

huii taaKhiir to kuchh baa'is-e-taaKhiir bhii thaa
ham to aate the magar koii 'onaaN_geer bhii thaa

ab yeh kiuN bataauuN ki Khaar-e-seHat ne daaman pakaR liyaa thaa

Khair, aapkii Ghazal hamesha kii taraH fikr se bhar-poor hai. aapne kaise kaise aur umda umda Khayaal murattab kiye haiN. aapkii parvaaz-e-taKhaiyul kii rasaaii na jaane kujaa hotii hai...kahiiN bahot oopar, aasmaanoN ke paar. masha Allah!

har ehe'r pasand aayaa ab kiskii nishaan_dehii karuuN, kuchh samajh meN nahiN aataa, is liye sabhii ash'aar ko chuntaa huuN.

Allah kare zor e qalam aur ziyaada!

faqat Khaak_nashiiN,

Hashmat

[irfan abid]

mukarramee Mahtab Sb, aadaab arz hai!

aap ne jis tafseel se is adnaa kaavish par nigaah-e-karam farmaayii aur ise apnii giraaN.qadr daad se navaazaa, vo mere liye behad Khushii kaa baais hai. inaayat kaa bahut bahut shukriya!

niyaazmand,
Irfan :Abid:

[irfan abid]

muhtaram Sarwar Sb, aadaab!

aap kii daad se to hameshaa hii Khushii hotii hai, so is baar bhii huii. bahut bahut shukriya!

sher #5 par aap ke taassuraat paRh kar kayii baateN zahn meN aayiiN. pahle sochaa ki muKhtasar javaab duuN, lekin phir kuchh tafseel zaruurii mahsuus huii. mulaahiza farmaaiye.

aap ke savaal kaa ek javaab to ye hai ki zamaane ke Khilaaf chalne vaale ziyaada.tar afraad be.naam-o-nishaaN miTte haiN. aap ne jin ashKhaas kaa zikr kiyaa hai, un kii taadaad nisbatan bahut kam hai. lihaaza aap kaa aitaraaz durust to hai, lekin is kii haisiyyat sirf vaaqiyah ke ek pahluu jitnii hai, aur is se sher kii munaasibat par farq nahiiN paRtaa.

duusraa javaab ye hai ki jin ash.aar meN shaair qaarii ko kisii naa.munaasib kaam yaa raaste kii jaanib maail kartaa nazar aaye, vo dar-asl shaair kii shikast-o-maayuusii (frustration) kaa aaina hote haiN, us kii himaayat kaa izhaar nahiiN. talaash karne par aise DheroN ash.aar mil jaayeNge. filhaal Nida Fazli kaa ek sher dekhiye:

yahaaN kisii ko koii raastaa nahiiN detaa
mujhe giraa ke agar tum saNbhal sako to chalo

zaahir hai ki koii hoshmand insaan kisii ko Khud ko giraane kii talqeen nahiiN karegaa. dar-haqeeqat ye us nafsaa-nafsii kaa shikva hai jo aaj kii dunyaa meN chaaroN taraf numaayaaN hai.

ab is tafseel ke baad arz kartaa huuN ki mazkuurah baalaa dalaail meN se maiN koii bhii apne difaa.a meN pesh nahiiN karuuNgaa kyoNki mere zahn meN zaraa muKhtalif Khayaal thaa, aur vo ye hai ki jo log zamaane ke saath nahiiN chalte (yaa nahiiN badalte), vo Ghubaar-e-raah kii tarah peechhe paRe rah jaate haiN ( :kaarvaaN guzar gayaa, Ghubaar dekhte rahe: kii tarah). meraa qaul siyaasii, mazhabii yaa samaajii nahiiN, Khaalisatan ma.aashii nauiyat kaa hai, lihaaza aap kaa aitaraaz is par laaguu nahiiN hotaa. lekin aap ke aur deegar ahbaab ke Khutuut se ye bhii zaahir hai ki maiN apnaa mauqif safaaii se bayaan nahiiN kar sakaa.

yahaaN kisii naqqaad kaa ye qaul yaad aa rahaa hai ki jis qadar mafaaheem nikleN, sher utnaa hii achchhaa tasleem kiyaa jaayegaa. lekin meraa maannaa hai ki in mafaaheem meN se kam.az.kam ek shaair kaa iraadii (intended) mafhuum bhii honaa chaahiye, varna sher kaam.yaab nahiiN, Khvaah vo chachaa Ghalib hii kaa kyoN na ho! :) qissa muKhtasar ye ki maiN is sher ko bahtar banaane kii koshish karuuNgaa.

niyaazmand,
Irfan :Abid:

[Sarwar A. Raz]

mukarramee Irfan SaaHeb:aadaab!

aap kaa Khat^ paRh kar bohat lut^f aayaa. aap ne do jawaab likh`e lekin dar-aSl un meN se koyee ek bh`ee SaHeeH jawaab naheeN th`aa! ph`ir yeh ma'loom huwaa keh she'r kaa it^laaq aaj kal ke ma,a'ashee manz^ar-naameh par maqSood hai aur aap is par aur kaam kareN ge. shukriyah!

is qism ke sawaal-o-jawaab se jahaaN aur cheezeN HaaSil hotee haiN waheeN nayee soch ke dar bh`ee kh`ulte haiN. ab yehee dekh`iYe ke aap ke donoN jawaab ham ko da'vat-e-fikr de rahe haiN!

aap kee mehrbaaniyoN ke liYe dil se mamnoon hooN!

Sarwar A. Raz :Sarwar:

[Star Mind]

Assalam-o-a'laikum,

moHtarami Irfan Abid SaaHib,

aap ki yeh ghazal aur us par keye gaye tabSire itne pasand aaye k "pasand" ka lafz choTa aur is k ma'aani maHdood lagne lage .

ham kaheN bhi to kyaa kaheN .......k aap ka dil-kash kalaam is qadr dil-kash hai k "waah waah" , "bahut khoob" jaise lafaaz munaasib nahiN lagte , aur dil kuch aur bhi kehnaa chaahtaa hai , magar hamaari kam i'lmee aur bad-bakhtee k ham apne maafi-zzameer ka izhaar nahiN karsakte !! . bas itnaa hi keh sakte haiN k is meHfil maiN jaan aap k kalaam se hi paRsakti hai , jo diloN maiN utarjaaye to "dhaRkan" , dimaagh maiN utara jaaye to "SiHat bakhsh" , gulshan maiN chalaa jaaye to "Bahaar" !!
ba-har-Haal DheeroN daad qabool kejeye shukriya

mokhliS : Zia Baloch

[irfan abid]

muhtaram Nazir Sb, aadaab!

aap jaise ustaad-e-fan kii daad kisii ke liye bhii faKhr-o-masarrat kaa baais hai, phir mujh nau.mashq ke liye kyoN na ho! inaayat ke liye behad mamnuun huuN. bahut bahut shukriya!

niyaazmand,
Irfan :Abid:

[irfan abid]

Shumaila sahiba, aadaab arz hai!

aap ne jis qadar faraaKh.dilii se is adnaa koshish ko navaazaa hai, vo aap hii kaa Khaassa hai. maiN is navaazish ke liye behad ahsaan.mand huuN. meraa pur.Khuluus shukriya qubuul keejiye!

niyaazmand,
Irfan :Abid:

[najma]

janab irfan abid sahib
assalam-o-alaikum
aapkii ye ghazal pasand aaee, bohat khoob fikr ki haamil hay.
daad hazir hay
khair andesh
najma
:)