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hassan_bashir
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by hassan_bashir » Wed May 24, 2006 9:14 am
Sara jii aadab arz hai!
aakhir-kaar aap ne Ghazal keh hii daalii.
mazaaq.bar.taraf, hamesha kii tarah aap ka yeh kalaam bhii pasaNd aaYa tamaam hii ash'aar khuub haiN par she'r #5 bohat bhaaYa.
is kaamyaab takhleeq par merii jaanib se dilee daad qubuul keejiYe. :rose
ShukriYa !
~ Hassan ~
Urdu hai jis ka naam hamiiN jaante haiN :Daagh:
saare jahaaN maiN dhum humaari zubaaN ki hai
Abdullah Nazir
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by Abdullah Nazir » Wed May 24, 2006 5:01 pm
MuHtaramah
Saara SaaHibah,
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PurkhulooS Tasleemaat,
Is baar aapki TaraHi ghazal bahut pasand aayi jiske liye meri dili daad aur mubaarakbaad qubool farmaayiye.
Ghazal:
1. kahiN peh zehn kahiN kaa khayaal houtaa hei
yehi to naghma-e-dil kaa kamaal houtaa hei
2. kaTi hei umr hamaari khuli faZaa meiN magar
"ab aek saans bhi lenaa muHaal houtaa hei"
3. ye bijliyon ki garaj aur siyaah tanhaa raat
bataauN kyaa jo mire dil kaa Haal houtaa hei
4. tiri wafaa ke yahaN phool ab khileN nah khileN
jafaa ki dhoop meiN bhi iHtimaal houtaa hei
5. miri kalaayi meiN jab chooRiyaaN khanakti heiN
nazar se unki AyaaN ek sawaal houtaa hei
6. kabhi jo aapke tewar zaraa badalte heiN
khabar kise hei jo Saara kaa Haal houtaa hei
Saare ashAar achche heiN, waah waah, bahut khoob.
Aapka MukhliS,
Nazir.
tahira Masood
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by tahira Masood » Wed May 24, 2006 6:26 pm
waah sara sis kamaal ker diyaa!
ghazal k pesh kerne kaa andaaz tau beHad khoobsurat hai
ghazal apnee jagah bohat khoob hai
daad qabuul fermaaiN
wassalam
live and let live
haamidbaaqri
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by haamidbaaqri » Wed Jun 07, 2006 4:24 pm
sara_j wrote: DostoN salaam,
aek koshish pesh hei ummeed ke pasand fermayenge.
Ghazal:
1. kahiN peh zehn kahiN kaa khayaal houtaa hei
yehi to naghma-e-dil kaa kamaal houtaa hei
2. kaTi hei umr hamaari khuli faZaa meiN magar
"ab aek saans bhi lenaa muHaal houtaa hei"
3. ye bijliyon ki garaj aur siyaah tanhaa raat
bataauN kyaa jo mire dil kaa Haal houtaa hei
4. tiri wafaa ke yahaN phool ab khileN nah khileN
jafaa ki dhoop meiN bhi iHtimaal houtaa hei
5. miri kalaayi meiN jab chooRiyaaN khanakti heiN
nazar se unki AyaaN ek sawaal houtaa hei
6. kabhi jo aapke tewar zaraa badalte heiN
khabar kise hei jo Saara kaa Haal houtaa hei
salaamun alaikum
hamaari azeez behen sara
bahut khoobsoorat ghazal hai
presentation bhi laajawaab hai
masha allah bahut accha likhrahi hai.n aap
allah(sbhnwt)kare zore qalam aur ziyaadah
aapka bhai
haamid
mai.n to karta nahi.n kuch aur ebaadat ke siwa
paas mere nahi.n kuch aur mohabbat ke siwa
Anmol
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by Anmol » Fri Aug 11, 2006 12:17 pm
sara_j wrote: 1. kahiN peh zehn kahiN kaa khayaal houtaa hei
yehi to naghma-e-dil kaa kamaal houtaa hei
2. kaTi hei umr hamaari khuli faZaa meiN magar
"ab aek saans bhi lenaa muHaal houtaa hei"
Dear
Sara,
Bohot pyaari ghazal kahi hai. Meri jaanib se DheroN daad pesh hai.
Shummu
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by Shummu » Sat Oct 14, 2006 12:48 pm
3. ye bijliyon ki garaj aur siyaah tanhaa raat
bataauN kyaa jo mire dil kaa Haal houtaa hei
wah..!
4. tiri wafaa ke yahaN phool ab khileN nah khileN
jafaa ki dhoop meiN bhi iHtimaal houtaa hei
iHtimaal=?
6. kabhi jo aapke tewar zaraa badalte heiN
khabar kise hei jo Saara kaa Haal houtaa hei
wah bahut khoob..!
Daad pesh hai Sara jee...
Shumaila
Koi pooche humse hamaari haalat ka sabab
to ashk baha kar bhi baat adhoori reh jati hai
Waqt jaise kahin thehar sa gaya hai
Na Gham jaata hai na khushi aati hai
muhammad_19k
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by muhammad_19k » Wed Nov 29, 2006 2:58 pm
Salam Sara Ji,
bila shubaa aap ki ye ghazal khoobsoorat khayalat oar dilkash izhaar ka majmooa hei. laikin iss shair ki khasoosi tareef na karnaa shaid naa insaafi ho.
kabhi jo aapke tewar zaraa badalte heiN
khabar kise hei jo Saara kaa Haal houtaa hei
bohat saada se alfaaz meiN ye bay saakta izhaar. oar bin kahe bhi aik daastaN ke har paRhne walaa apni apni soach ke ta-eeN iss khayal ki latafat meiN ghaotaa zan hotaa chala ja-aye. bohat khoob saara ji.
Allah taala aapko aise lateef khayalaat se nawaztaa rahe.