Ghazal: "jab se ham chaar paise ..."
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Ghazal: "jab se ham chaar paise ..."
aadaab, dosto!
kuchh roz qabl Abdullah Nazir Sb ne Urdustan meN apnaa ye misra bataur-e-tarah diyaa thaa: aap bhii mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage. maiN ne is zameen meN kuchh ash.aar kahe haiN jo pesh-e-Khidmat haiN. is martaba maiN girah nahiiN lagaa rahaa huuN kyuuNki avval to ye kaam mere liye qadre dushvaar saabit huaa, doyam misre kaa mizaaj Ghazal ke mizaaj se judaa hai, so vo vaise bhii yahaaN khaptaa nahiiN. hasb-e-maamuul, aap kii raae kaa intizaar rahegaa.
Ghazal
jab se ham chaar paise kamaane lage
ahl-e-dunyaa to sar par biThaane lage!
haisiyat se haiN vaabasta rishte sabhii
ye samajhne meN ham ko zamaane lage
kaasa dekhaa jo ik tifl ke haath meN
aish-o-ishrat ke daave fasaane lage
ik zameeN to saNbhaltii nahiiN aur ham
chaaNd taaroN pe dunyaa basaane lage!
ham ne dekhe haiN ahl-e-siyaasat ke dil
buGhz-o-nafrat ke sab kaar.Khaane lage
adl-o-eemaaN mataa-e-dukaaN ho gaye
log in kii bhii bolii lagaane lage
aaj kii nasl kii fikr ke saamne
apne afkaar-e-:nau: bhii puraane lage
kyaa hai tinke kii qeemat, Khabar ho gayii
jab nasheman ham apnaa banaane lage
zindagii kaa sabaq hai, kuchal do use
jab tamannaa koii sar uThaane lage
ham ne sochaa thaa :Abid:, kahoge Ghazal
tum to apne masaail sunaane lage!
niyaazmand,
Irfan :Abid:
kuchh roz qabl Abdullah Nazir Sb ne Urdustan meN apnaa ye misra bataur-e-tarah diyaa thaa: aap bhii mujh pe tuhmat lagaane lage. maiN ne is zameen meN kuchh ash.aar kahe haiN jo pesh-e-Khidmat haiN. is martaba maiN girah nahiiN lagaa rahaa huuN kyuuNki avval to ye kaam mere liye qadre dushvaar saabit huaa, doyam misre kaa mizaaj Ghazal ke mizaaj se judaa hai, so vo vaise bhii yahaaN khaptaa nahiiN. hasb-e-maamuul, aap kii raae kaa intizaar rahegaa.
Ghazal
jab se ham chaar paise kamaane lage
ahl-e-dunyaa to sar par biThaane lage!
haisiyat se haiN vaabasta rishte sabhii
ye samajhne meN ham ko zamaane lage
kaasa dekhaa jo ik tifl ke haath meN
aish-o-ishrat ke daave fasaane lage
ik zameeN to saNbhaltii nahiiN aur ham
chaaNd taaroN pe dunyaa basaane lage!
ham ne dekhe haiN ahl-e-siyaasat ke dil
buGhz-o-nafrat ke sab kaar.Khaane lage
adl-o-eemaaN mataa-e-dukaaN ho gaye
log in kii bhii bolii lagaane lage
aaj kii nasl kii fikr ke saamne
apne afkaar-e-:nau: bhii puraane lage
kyaa hai tinke kii qeemat, Khabar ho gayii
jab nasheman ham apnaa banaane lage
zindagii kaa sabaq hai, kuchal do use
jab tamannaa koii sar uThaane lage
ham ne sochaa thaa :Abid:, kahoge Ghazal
tum to apne masaail sunaane lage!
niyaazmand,
Irfan :Abid:
Re: Ghazal: "jab se ham chaar paise ..."
Irfan ji,
aadaab,
buhat arse' ke ba'd aap kee koyee tarahi ghazal paRhne ko milee.
aap ne bajaa kahaa ke ghazal kaa rang misr'e ke rang se hat kar hai aur shaayad yahii baat hai jo isey baaqi dostoN kee iss tarahi ghazal ke judaa hone par majboor kar rahi hai.
ghazal pasaNd aayee aur maqta' kyaa hee khoob hai, hum tau waaqaee ghazal meiN apne dukhaRe rote heiN yaa kam az kam maiN tau aisaa hi kartee hooN tau aap kaa maqta agar sab par naheeN tau mere oopar tau bilkul sahi fit hotaa hai :)
khair meree jaanib se daad paish-e-khidmat hai.
mukhliS
Naheed
aadaab,
buhat arse' ke ba'd aap kee koyee tarahi ghazal paRhne ko milee.
aap ne bajaa kahaa ke ghazal kaa rang misr'e ke rang se hat kar hai aur shaayad yahii baat hai jo isey baaqi dostoN kee iss tarahi ghazal ke judaa hone par majboor kar rahi hai.
ghazal pasaNd aayee aur maqta' kyaa hee khoob hai, hum tau waaqaee ghazal meiN apne dukhaRe rote heiN yaa kam az kam maiN tau aisaa hi kartee hooN tau aap kaa maqta agar sab par naheeN tau mere oopar tau bilkul sahi fit hotaa hai :)
khair meree jaanib se daad paish-e-khidmat hai.
mukhliS
Naheed
Irfan Abid wrote:
Janab-e-Irfan Abid SaaHeb:
Aadaab-o-tasleemaat,
hasb-e-mamool aap ka kalam aur uss meN maujood mazamneen pasand aahe.
jab se ham chaar paise kamaane lage
ahl-e-dunyaa to sar par biThaane lage!
wah bohat khoob
haisiyat se haiN vaabasta rishte sabhii
ye samajhne meN ham ko zamaane lage
sau feesad durust farmayaa aap ne.
kaasa dekhaa jo ik tifl ke haath meN
aish-o-ishrat ke daave fasaane lage
SaHee keh rahe heN aap
ik zameeN to saNbhaltii nahiiN aur ham
chaaNd taaroN pe dunyaa basaane lage!
wah bohat khoob
ham ne dekhe haiN ahl-e-siyaasat ke dil
buGhz-o-nafrat ke sab kaar.Khaane lage
yeh tu hai
adl-o-eemaaN mataa-e-dukaaN ho gaye
log in kii bhii bolii lagaane lage
wah wah jee bohat khoob
aaj kii nasl kii fikr ke saamne
apne afkaar-e-:nau: bhii puraane lage
aisa bhi hotaa hai
kyaa hai tinke kii qeemat, Khabar ho gayii
jab nasheman ham apnaa banaane lage
superb
zindagii kaa sabaq hai, kuchal do use
jab tamannaa koii sar uThaane lage
bohat umdah
ham ne sochaa thaa :Abid:, kahoge Ghazal
tum to apne masaail sunaane lage!
moHtaram Abid saaHeb tamaam hee ashaar laajawab heN. weise iss zameen per shauraa/shairaat kee aksariyaat ne kamaal ke ashaar bhande heN. iss liye bohat lutf aa raha hai sukhanwarooN kee takhleeqaat paRhte hoove.
ek bohat hee shandaar-o-jaandaar ghazal pesh karne par meree janib se daad aur mubarakbaad qubool keejiye.
Wassalam
Zahida Raees :Raji:
Meree sha'iree se mujhe jaan Lo
ke yeh aa'enaa hai meri zaat ka
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ke yeh aa'enaa hai meri zaat ka
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Bohot khoob
Aadaab,
Waah bohot khoob, ghazal ka mizaaz bhi judaa haiy aur andaaz bhi juda,
veyse aapki ye ghazal kisi taareef ki mohtaaj nahi lekin ye kehna zaroori haiy ke kaafi arse baad itni acchhi ghazal paDi haiy ,jiske har lafz se sehmat hoon main.
Zindaghi ke behad kaDvi haqeeqton ko bohot hi khoobsoortee se lafzon ka jaamaa pehnaaya haiy aapne, umeed haiy humaari mubarakbaad kubool karenge.
Safiya
Waah bohot khoob, ghazal ka mizaaz bhi judaa haiy aur andaaz bhi juda,
veyse aapki ye ghazal kisi taareef ki mohtaaj nahi lekin ye kehna zaroori haiy ke kaafi arse baad itni acchhi ghazal paDi haiy ,jiske har lafz se sehmat hoon main.
Zindaghi ke behad kaDvi haqeeqton ko bohot hi khoobsoortee se lafzon ka jaamaa pehnaaya haiy aapne, umeed haiy humaari mubarakbaad kubool karenge.
Safiya
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Bhari Irfan Abid sahib
salaam e masnoon
aapki ghazal aur is mizaaj ki ghazal ne bahut acha tassur chorha hai, waqai zindagi ke masayel ko ghazal ki mala mai puro kar aapne waqt ke taqaazoN ke sath ghazal ko hamahang karne ki kamyaab koshish ki hai. is ghazal par aap ki salahiyatoN ko sitayesh ke phool pesh karte huve aapko dili mubarakbaad nazr kar raha hoN.
aapka bhai
Mahtab Qadr
salaam e masnoon
aapki ghazal aur is mizaaj ki ghazal ne bahut acha tassur chorha hai, waqai zindagi ke masayel ko ghazal ki mala mai puro kar aapne waqt ke taqaazoN ke sath ghazal ko hamahang karne ki kamyaab koshish ki hai. is ghazal par aap ki salahiyatoN ko sitayesh ke phool pesh karte huve aapko dili mubarakbaad nazr kar raha hoN.
aapka bhai
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Irfan sahab
Aadaab..
aap kee ghazal nazar say guzry... Wah janab .. kia kahnay hain aap kay ...saada lekin pur-asr andaaz main aap nay zindagi kay talkh haqaaiq ko saamnay rakh dia hay.
Khush rahain
Khair Andesh
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Aadaab..
aap kee ghazal nazar say guzry... Wah janab .. kia kahnay hain aap kay ...saada lekin pur-asr andaaz main aap nay zindagi kay talkh haqaaiq ko saamnay rakh dia hay.
Khush rahain
Khair Andesh
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Re: Ghazal: "jab se ham chaar paise ..."
salaam Abid saaHib,
aapkii Ghazal nazroN se kia guzrii ki vo to vahiiN samaa hii gaii. subHaan Allah. aapkaa kalaam hamesha kii taraH is baar bhii nihaayat umda aur aalaa hai. aapne aasaan alfaaz meN gahre mazaameen nikaale haiN. aapkii Ghazal ke har she'r bahot Khoob haiN magar jo ash'aar mujhe sab se ziyaada pasand aaye unheN raqam kar rahaa huuN.
Hashmat
haisiyat se haiN vaabasta rishte sabhii
ye samajhne meN ham ko zamaane lage
kaasa dekhaa jo ik tifl ke haath meN
aish-o-ishrat ke daave fasaane lage
ik zameeN to saNbhaltii nahiiN aur ham
chaaNd taaroN pe dunyaa basaane lage!
aaj kii nasl kii fikr ke saamne
apne afkaar-e-:nau: bhii puraane lage
zindagii kaa sabaq hai, kuchal do use
jab tamannaa koii sar uThaane lage
ham ne sochaa thaa :Abid:, kahoge Ghazal
tum to apne masaail sunaane lage!
aapkii Ghazal nazroN se kia guzrii ki vo to vahiiN samaa hii gaii. subHaan Allah. aapkaa kalaam hamesha kii taraH is baar bhii nihaayat umda aur aalaa hai. aapne aasaan alfaaz meN gahre mazaameen nikaale haiN. aapkii Ghazal ke har she'r bahot Khoob haiN magar jo ash'aar mujhe sab se ziyaada pasand aaye unheN raqam kar rahaa huuN.
Hashmat
haisiyat se haiN vaabasta rishte sabhii
ye samajhne meN ham ko zamaane lage
kaasa dekhaa jo ik tifl ke haath meN
aish-o-ishrat ke daave fasaane lage
ik zameeN to saNbhaltii nahiiN aur ham
chaaNd taaroN pe dunyaa basaane lage!
aaj kii nasl kii fikr ke saamne
apne afkaar-e-:nau: bhii puraane lage
zindagii kaa sabaq hai, kuchal do use
jab tamannaa koii sar uThaane lage
ham ne sochaa thaa :Abid:, kahoge Ghazal
tum to apne masaail sunaane lage!
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