yaad hai aap ko keh maiN hooN kaun?
aashnaa aur baa-wafaa! SaaHeb!
mujh se koyee agar shikaayat hai
keejiYe aap barmalaa SaaHeb!
chhoRiYe, ab mu,a'af kar deejiYe
kuchh agar ho kahaa sunaa SaaHeb!
dostee aur aashtee ke siwaa
is jahaaN meN rakhaa hai kyaa SaaHeb?
aap dil meN haiN, aap aaNkhoN meN
meree Soorat hai aa,eenaa SaaHeb!
reh-rav-e-raah-e-aashnaayee hooN
gar cheh hooN maiN shikastah-paa SaaHeb!
dardmandee ke aur muHabbat ke
wa'de sab keejiYe wafaa SaaHeb!
maiN bhee ho jaa,ooN aap hee jaisaa
mere Haq meN kareN du,a'a SaaHeb!
behr-e-tajdeed-e-shauq :Sarwar: ko
yaad karnaa hai kyaa buraa SaaHeb?
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Sarwar A. Raz :Sarwar:
moHtarmee Sarwar Raz SaaHab,
aadaab
aapki ghazal per meri nazar bohat der se paRi. mera is Taraf aanaa jaana zara kum hi ho raha hai. kuch maSroofiyaat ke sabab ab net per hi kum aata hooN.
Ghazal beHud Haseen hai. taqreeban tamam asha'ar musalsal ya Qit'abund jaise mehsoos hote haiN. yaa'ni mukammal ghazal taqreeban ek hi ruNg meN hai. mundarjazel sher ziyadah achcha laga:
maiN bhee ho jaa,ooN aap hee jaisaa
mere Haq meN kareN du,a'a SaaHeb!
yaad hai aap ko keh maiN hooN kaun?
aashnaa aur baa-wafaa! SaaHeb!
mujh se koyee agar shikaayat hai
keejiYe aap barmalaa SaaHeb!
chhoRiYe, ab mu,a'af kar deejiYe
kuchh agar ho kahaa sunaa SaaHeb!
dostee aur aashtee ke siwaa
is jahaaN meN rakhaa hai kyaa SaaHeb?
aap dil meN haiN, aap aaNkhoN meN
meree Soorat hai aa,eenaa SaaHeb!
reh-rav-e-raah-e-aashnaayee hooN
gar cheh hooN maiN shikastah-paa SaaHeb!
dardmandee ke aur muHabbat ke
wa'de sab keejiYe wafaa SaaHeb!
maiN bhee ho jaa,ooN aap hee jaisaa
mere Haq meN kareN du,a'a SaaHeb!
behr-e-tajdeed-e-shauq :Sarwar: ko
yaad karnaa hai kyaa buraa SaaHeb?
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Sarwar A. Raz :Sarwar:
muhtaram Sarwar A. Raz sahib salam !
bohut khoob sahib kiya kehnay masha'allah aap hi ke'h saktay haiN
aisi pur'kaif ,fikr aNgaiz ,raNgeen,khoobsurat ghazal
khushi huii
aap nay jao bhi kucch kaha saahib
aap hi kao hay ye rawa saahib
mairi taraf say bohut bohut daad qubool farmaa'iye