a'zeezaan.e giraamee, tasleemaat
akela insaan nah haNsta bhala na rota. guzishta maah mushaireh meN sirf maiN ne hi shirkat ki thee baHeSiyat shayar. is bazm men kayee kohna mashq shoara' maujood haiN. mera unse israar hai keh woh is mahanah TaraHee mushaireh meN kuch dilchaspee leN warnah is TaraH ek payye pe yeh gaRee kitne din chalgee?
is baar Muzaffar Saahab ne achchi zameen tajweez farmayee hai. mujhe yaqeen hai kuch achchi GhazaleN paRhne ko mileNgee. maiN nen kuch sada se ashaar kah kar ek baar phir sub se pahle mushaireh mN shirkat ka khushgawar fareezah anjaam diya hai. koyee sha'r pasand aaye tou likhiyega zaroor.
aap ka muKhliS
Jawaid Badauni
maiN sub ki maanta hooN apni manwana nahiN aata
“samajhtaa hooN magar dunyaa ko samjhanaa naheeN aata”
rah.e Haq per haiN hum donoN magar ik farq baaqee hai
mujhe aata hai tum ko Haq pe mar jana nahiN aata
salam us per keh jiski zindagee aalaam meN guzree
magar hoToN pe phir bhee Gham ka afsana nahiN aata
paseena khet meN har dopahar jis ne bahaya tha
usee ke haath meN gandum ka ik dana nahiN aata
tou kya ab Tanz karna shauq meN shamil nahiN unke
bahut din ho gaye unka koyee Ta’nah nahiN aata
taraqqee ya tanazzul kya kahoN isko keh ai maGrib
Tire logoN ko u’ryaanee meN sharmana nahiN aata
unheN shayar kahoon kaise keh in "Jawaid" SaaHab ko
Ghazal paRhna tou aata hai Ghazal gana nahiN aata
------------------------------------------------------------
Ghazal Mushairah 46 (November)
Moderator: Muzaffar Ahmad Muzaffar
-
- -
- Posts: 810
- Joined: Sat Jan 01, 2005 5:38 am
- Contact:
- sbashwar
- -
- Posts: 1655
- Joined: Wed Dec 08, 2004 1:25 pm
- Do you know URDU language?: Yes
- Location: Hyderabad, India
- Contact:
Re: Ghazal Mushairah 46 (November)
a'zeezaan.e giraamee, tasleemaat
akela insaan nah haNsta bhala na rota. guzishta maah mushaireh meN sirf maiN ne hi shirkat ki thee baHeSiyat shayar. is bazm men kayee kohna mashq shoara' maujood haiN. mera unse israar hai keh woh is mahanah TaraHee mushaireh meN kuch dilchaspee leN warnah is TaraH ek payye pe yeh gaRee kitne din chalgee?
is baar Muzaffar Saahab ne achchi zameen tajweez farmayee hai. mujhe yaqeen hai kuch achchi GhazaleN paRhne ko mileNgee. maiN nen kuch sada se ashaar kah kar ek baar phir sub se pahle mushaireh mN shirkat ka khushgawar fareezah anjaam diya hai. koyee sha'r pasand aaye tou likhiyega zaroor.
aap ka muKhliS
Jawaid Badauni
Yahi baat maine shiddat se mehsoos karte huay pichle mah forum ke tamam sho'ara ko SHO'ARA group mein shamil kardiya hai chahe woh ek ghazal kyon na kahi ho. Kyonke bohat hi kam pabandi se forum par hazir hote hain. Isi liye maine iss mah ka elaan mass email ke zarye tamam Sho'ara karaam ko bhej diya hai.
Aapka ye message bhi sab sho'ara ko mass email ke zarye bhaijdonga. insha-allah.
Shukria
Mukhlis
Salem Bashwar
سالم احمد باشوار
-
- -
- Posts: 810
- Joined: Sat Jan 01, 2005 5:38 am
- Contact:
Re: Ghazal Mushairah 46 (November)
sbashwar wrote:a'zeezaan.e giraamee, tasleemaat
akela insaan nah haNsta bhala na rota. guzishta maah mushaireh meN sirf maiN ne hi shirkat ki thee baHeSiyat shayar. is bazm men kayee kohna mashq shoara' maujood haiN. mera unse israar hai keh woh is mahanah TaraHee mushaireh meN kuch dilchaspee leN warnah is TaraH ek payye pe yeh gaRee kitne din chalgee?
is baar Muzaffar Saahab ne achchi zameen tajweez farmayee hai. mujhe yaqeen hai kuch achchi GhazaleN paRhne ko mileNgee. maiN nen kuch sada se ashaar kah kar ek baar phir sub se pahle mushaireh mN shirkat ka khushgawar fareezah anjaam diya hai. koyee sha'r pasand aaye tou likhiyega zaroor.
aap ka muKhliS
Jawaid Badauni
Yahi baat maine shiddat se mehsoos karte huay pichle mah forum ke tamam sho'ara ko SHO'ARA group mein shamil kardiya hai chahe woh ek ghazal kyon na kahi ho. Kyonke bohat hi kam pabandi se forum par hazir hote hain. Isi liye maine iss mah ka elaan mass email ke zarye tamam Sho'ara karaam ko bhej diya hai.
Aapka ye message bhi sab sho'ara ko mass email ke zarye bhaijdonga. insha-allah.
Shukria
Mukhlis
Salem Bashwar
Mohtarmee Bashwar SaaHab
aap itne Gussey meN they keh meri nacheez Ghazal per tawajjo farmana hi bhool gaye.
MuKhliS
Jawaid Badauni
Re: Ghazal Mushairah 46 (November)
Ghazal likhne main sabqat le gaye is baar bhi sab se
kabhi Jawaid ko aaraam farmana naheen aataa
Murassa hai ghazal unki bahut rang e taghazzul se
Ghazal kahne main mahir hain magar gana nahin aata
Iradatmand
Ahmad Ali Barqi Azmi
kabhi Jawaid ko aaraam farmana naheen aataa
Murassa hai ghazal unki bahut rang e taghazzul se
Ghazal kahne main mahir hain magar gana nahin aata
Iradatmand
Ahmad Ali Barqi Azmi
http://www.drbarqiazmi.com
-
- -
- Posts: 810
- Joined: Sat Jan 01, 2005 5:38 am
- Contact:
Re: Ghazal Mushairah 46 (November)
aabarqi wrote:Ghazal likhne main sabqat le gaye is baar bhi sab se
kabhi Jawaid ko aaraam farmana naheen aataa
Murassa hai ghazal unki bahut rang e taghazzul se
Ghazal kahne main mahir hain magar gana nahin aata
Iradatmand
Ahmad Ali Barqi Azmi
moHtarmee Barqi SaaHab, tasleemaat
aapki dilchusp manzoom daad baayiSe i'zzo.oifteKhaar hai. himmat afzaayee ke liye aap ka beHud mamnoon hooN.
KhulooSkaar,
Jawaid Badauni
- sbashwar
- -
- Posts: 1655
- Joined: Wed Dec 08, 2004 1:25 pm
- Do you know URDU language?: Yes
- Location: Hyderabad, India
- Contact:
Re: Ghazal Mushairah 46 (November)
Mohtaram Jawaid Badauni SahebMohtarmee Bashwar SaaHab
aap itne Gussey meN they keh meri nacheez Ghazal per tawajjo farmana hi bhool gaye.
MuKhliS
Jawaid Badauni
Nahi bhai aisi baat nahi. main bohat thandi mizaj ka aadmi houn. Hua yun ke uss waqt main mass email ke problem mein phans gaya tha. 2 invalid email address thay woh disturb kar rahe thay. Alhamdlillah, moshkil hal hogayi.
Aapki ghazal ko araam se puri tawajeh se paRhna chahta tha:
maiN sub ki maanta hooN apni manwana nahiN aata
“samajhtaa hooN magar dunyaa ko samjhanaa naheeN aata” .... boaht khoob
rah.e Haq per haiN hum donoN magar ik farq baaqee hai
mujhe aata hai tum ko Haq pe mar jana nahiN aata .... bohat achcha sheir hai
salam us per keh jiski zindagee aalaam meN guzree
magar hoToN pe phir bhee Gham ka afsana nahiN aata .... wah
paseena khet meN har dopahar jis ne bahaya tha
usee ke haath meN gandum ka ik dana nahiN aata ... yeh ek haqeeqat hai.
tou kya ab Tanz karna shauq meN shamil nahiN unke
bahut din ho gaye unka koyee Ta’nah nahiN aata .... ye sheir bhi pasand ayaa khas '' Ta'nah...''
taraqqee ya tanazzul kya kahoN isko keh ai maGrib
Tire logoN ko u’ryaanee meN sharmana nahiN aata .... Yeh bhi haqeeqat par mubni hai...
unheN shayar kahoon kaise keh in "Jawaid" SaaHab ko
Ghazal paRhna tou aata hai Ghazal gana nahiN aata ..... Boaht khoob bhai
Meri dili daad aur mubarakbaad qubool kijiye.
Mukhlis
Salem Bashwar
سالم احمد باشوار
-
- -
- Posts: 1258
- Joined: Sun Feb 12, 2006 1:40 pm
- Location: London, England
- Contact:
Re: Ghazal Mushairah 46 (November)
mukarrami Janaab jawaid Badauni SaaHib aadaab!jawaid badauni wrote:a'zeezaan.e giraamee, tasleemaat
akela insaan nah haNsta bhala na rota. guzishta maah mushaireh meN sirf maiN ne hi shirkat ki thee baHeSiyat shayar. is bazm men kayee kohna mashq shoara' maujood haiN. mera unse israar hai keh woh is mahanah TaraHee mushaireh meN kuch dilchaspee leN warnah is TaraH ek payye pe yeh gaRee kitne din chalgee?
is baar Muzaffar Saahab ne achchi zameen tajweez farmayee hai. mujhe yaqeen hai kuch achchi GhazaleN paRhne ko mileNgee. maiN nen kuch sada se ashaar kah kar ek baar phir sub se pahle mushaireh mN shirkat ka khushgawar fareezah anjaam diya hai. koyee sha'r pasand aaye tou likhiyega zaroor.
aap ka muKhliS
Jawaid Badauni
maiN sub ki maanta hooN apni manwana nahiN aata
“samajhtaa hooN magar dunyaa ko samjhanaa naheeN aata”
rah.e Haq per haiN hum donoN magar ik farq baaqee hai
mujhe aata hai tum ko Haq pe mar jana nahiN aata
salam us per keh jiski zindagee aalaam meN guzree
magar hoToN pe phir bhee Gham ka afsana nahiN aata
paseena khet meN har dopahar jis ne bahaya tha
usee ke haath meN gandum ka ik dana nahiN aata
tou kya ab Tanz karna shauq meN shamil nahiN unke
bahut din ho gaye unka koyee Ta’nah nahiN aata
taraqqee ya tanazzul kya kahoN isko keh ai maGrib
Tire logoN ko u’ryaanee meN sharmana nahiN aata
unheN shayar kahoon kaise keh in "Jawaid" SaaHab ko
Ghazal paRhna tou aata hai Ghazal gana nahiN aata
------------------------------------------------------------
mahanah mushae'rooN kee baabat aap kee tashweesh bajaa hai. maiN bhee isee fikr-o-andoh se do chaar hooN. zaatee t^aor par mera yeh kheyaal hai. keh mahanah mushae'rooN meN jo Ghazalaliyaat shaamil hotee haiN. un ke takhleeqkar agarcheh kuhnah mashq waaqea' huwe haiN lekin shaaz ke t^aor par hee sahee kaheeN kaheeN kisee se bhee koee fannee gunjaae'ish kaa nikal aana fit^ree amar hai. najeejata" apnee raae'eY ke iz^haar meN aek aadh jagah iSlaaHee rang meN mashwarah yaa tajweez pesh karna ham sab kaa macaawee fareeZ^ah hai ho saktaa hai. yeh baat eHbaab ke mizaaj par giraaN guzartee hai. jis ke baa'ec shua'raa mushae'rah se daaman bachaane lage haiN. HalaNkeh naqqaad kaa maqSad HaoSlah shuknee hargiz naheeN hotaa. khaer is baat kaa aae'ndah kam az kam meree jaanib se bharpoor kheyaal rakhaa jae gaa keh mut^aalea'ah-e-kalam ke daoraan meHeZ^ daad-o-ta'teef par hee iktefaa kiya jaae aor kisee bhee iSlaaHee qaabil-e-tajweez nuktah par mashwarah nah diya jae.
"kheyaal-e-khaat^ir-e-eHbaab chahiye hardam
Anees theys nah lag jaae aabgeenooN ko"
Mirza Anees
jahaN tak aap kee Ghazal kaa ta'aluq hai. mashAllah Hasb-e-caabiqah shaandaar aor pur maGhaz hai. mua'asharatee masaai'l iSlaH aor tehzeeb-o-tamaddun ke waqaar-e-gumgushtah ko ujaagar karne ke kaawishooN se wabastah maoZ^oa'aat ko Ghazal ke peraae meN Dhaalne kee kaamyaab koshish hai. Aap ne iz^haar-e-kheyaal ke liye naz^m ke e'laawah Ghazal ko medaan-e-tag-o-taaz banaya. aor is maHaaz par hanooz seenah sipar hai. meree jaanib se is kaamyaab koshish par dilee daad aor mubarak baad kaa toHfah pesh-e-khidmat hai.
Muzaffar A Muzaffar
[/b]
- haamidbaaqri
- -
- Posts: 567
- Joined: Tue Oct 11, 2005 10:50 am
- Location: bangalore, india 00-91-9341253797
- Contact:
Re: Ghazal Mushairah 46 (November)
Assalaam o alaikum
jawaid bhaii sahib
kaisay haiN aap?
bahut dinoN baad aapsay mukhaatib hau rahay haiN hum
aap ka kalaam hamesha ki tarah munfarid hai.bahut umdah.....kya kehnay
hamari dilee daad aur mubaarakbaad qubool farmaayeN =D>
ALLAH(SBHNWT)karay zoray qalam aur ziyaadah
aapka apna
haamid baaqari
jawaid bhaii sahib
kaisay haiN aap?
bahut dinoN baad aapsay mukhaatib hau rahay haiN hum
aap ka kalaam hamesha ki tarah munfarid hai.bahut umdah.....kya kehnay
hamari dilee daad aur mubaarakbaad qubool farmaayeN =D>
ALLAH(SBHNWT)karay zoray qalam aur ziyaadah
aapka apna
haamid baaqari
mai.n to karta nahi.n kuch aur ebaadat ke siwa
paas mere nahi.n kuch aur mohabbat ke siwa
paas mere nahi.n kuch aur mohabbat ke siwa