"phool khiltey hain muskaraney se" Tarhi ghazal

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"phool khiltey hain muskaraney se" Tarhi ghazal

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Aziz membran
meri kuch basat tou nahin magar phir bhi meri yeh kawish hazir hai aap ki aara ka intizar rahey ga
zmufti
unko fursat nahiN zamaney se
Hamko Sapney naye sajaney se

Wadi-I-khawab hi tou hai ke jahaN
”Phool khiltey haiN muskaraney se “

Aur barh jaye gi yeh ruswaai
Zakhm-e-dil aap ko dikhaney se

Dard ke is bayaaN se kiya hoga
Kuch bhee hasil nahiN sunaney se

Tu Sitamgar sahi magar phir bhi
Kia miley ga hameN rulaney se

Yaad-e-mazi tu lout ke mat aa
Baaz aa ja hameN sataney se

Bhool jaa ham khata shuaaron ko
Koi ja ke kehay zamanay se

ab tu Aajiz hee aa chukey hain hum
Dard kay boojh ko uthaney se
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Post by najma »

zmufti sahiba
apki kosh achi hay.ise jaree rakhiye
mash rahay gii to taraqqi bhi karengaii.wazn ki kafii khamiyaaN haiN, lekin waqt ke saath door hojaeiNgii.bas asaatizah jo mashware deN, un par amal kar ke mashq jari rakhiye ga
daad qubool kijiye
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Re: "phool khiltey hain muskaraney se" Tarhi ghaza

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salaam Mufti saaHib,

ummeed hai ki apke mizaaj-e-giraamii ba_Khair hoNge.

aapkii taraHii Ghazal paRh kar bahot lutf aayaa. aapkii musalsal Ghazal mujhe bahot bhaaii...aapne mazaameen ko achchhe andaaz meN Khayaal meN Dhaalaa hai. ek achchhi koshish thii aapkii. sabhii ash'aar munaasib haiN aur Khoob haiN magar zel ke ash'aar ziyaada pasand aaye:


Aur barh jaye gi yeh ruswaai
Zakhm-e-dil har eik ko dikhaney se

Dard ke bayaaN se kiya hoga bhala
Kuch bhi hasil nahiN sunaney se

Bhool bhi jaaye ham gham ke maroN ko
Koi ja ke keh bhi do zamanay se

teri Qasam ab tou Aajiz haiN hum
Dard kay boojh ko uthaney se


par, Huzoor e waalaa! maqt'a to nadaarad hai! :roll:

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Najma Jee,
Adab
Aap Ki raaye ka buhat shukria abhi wazn sahi karney nahin aye shayad maths kamzoor raha ho ya music sense kamzoor hai Aap ki hosla afzaai aur rahnumai donon darkar hein
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Janab Usmani sahib
Adab
Aap ki hosla afzaai ka be had shukria Aap nay shayad ghour nahin kia aur mujhe doosri baar sahiba ki jagah sahib likh diya
Na janey kiyon mujhe aakhri sher ya maqta mein apna naam likhna acha nahin lagta aur shayad yeh intihai zarori bhi nahin
thanks again
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Re: "phool khiltey hain muskaraney se" Tarhi ghaza

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zarqa ji aapki koshish pasand aai , likhti rahiye

zmufti wrote:Aziz membran
meri kuch basat tou nahin magar phir bhi meri yeh kawish hazir hai aap ki aara ka intizar rahey ga
zmufti

Tumko fursat nahiN zamaney se
Hamko Sapney naye sajaney se

micl-e-jannat hai Wadi-I-khawab jahaN
”Phool khiltey haiN muskarney se “

Aur barh jaye gi yeh ruswaai
Zakhm-e-dil har eik ko dikhaney se

Dard ke bayaaN se kiya hoga bhala
Kuch bhi hasil nahiN sunaney se

Tu Sitamgar sahi magar phir bhi
Kia miley ga hameN rulaney se

Yaad-e-mazi tu lout ke mat aa
Baaz aa ja hameN sataney se

Bhool bhi jaaye ham gham ke maroN ko
Koi ja ke keh bhi do zamanay se

teri Qasam ab tou Aajiz haiN hum
Dard kay boojh ko uthaney se
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zmufti wrote:Aziz membran
meri kuch basat tou nahin magar phir bhi meri yeh kawish hazir hai aap ki aara ka intizar rahey ga
zmufti

Tumko fursat nahiN zamaney se
Hamko Sapney naye sajanayse

Aur barh jaye gi yeh ruswaai
Zakhm-e-dil har eik ko dikhaney se


Tu Sitamgar sahi magar phir bhi
Kia miley ga hameN rulaney se

Yaad-e-mazi tu lout ke mat aa
Baaz aa ja hameN sataney se
Mohtarma Zarqa Sahiba achi koshish ki hai aap nay misra-e-tarah par ooper kay ashaar ziyada behtar lagay mashq jaari rakahin.
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Mahataab Qadar sahib
Aap ka behad shukria
dua go
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Sara jee
Aap ka be had shukria yeh Aap ka bara pan hai keh meri hosla afzaai kar rahi hein

Anis hasan Sahib
Meri koshish ko parhney ka shukria


Dua go
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Zarqaa SaaHiba, aadaab :)

aap se shaayad pehlee baar hamkalaam hone ki sa'aadat HaaSil horahee hai ! :)

aap ki Ghazal bhi maashaa Allah Khoob rahee !!. tamaam ash'aar jee jaan se pasand aaye, kis kis shea'r ko daad deN ? hameN to sabhi ash'aar ne bahut luT^f diyaa , daad qabool kejeye :)

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Dikhaadi shaan, phir ahl-e-chaman ko, Be-niyaazi ki

Khamoshi se jhatak kar, aaj phir, dast-e-sabaa maiN ne

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Zia sahib,
Adaab,
Aap ki hosla afzaii kay liye behad mamnoon hon umeed hai ayinda bhee shukria ka mouqa den gay
allah hafiz
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Dunya jee
Aap ki hosla afzaai Kay liye meiN behad mamnoon hon
Aap ka mashwara bhee acha hai magar yeh sher mein nay kuch is tarah kar diya hai

"Aur barh jaye gi yeh ruswaai
Zakhm-e-dil aap ko dikhaney se"

Aap sab say pehli post ko agar dekhien

Aap ki raye aur mubarakbad meray liye buhat eham hain
shukria
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zmufti wrote:Adaab, Zara Ji!

Aur barh jaye gi yeh ruswaai
Zakhm-e-dil aap ko dikhaney se

Khoob.

Tu Sitamgar sahi magar phir bhi
Kia miley ga hameN rulaney se

Haan na aur kya. :(

Yaad-e-mazi tu lout ke mat aa
Baaz aa ja hameN sataney se

Yaad-e-mazi azaab hay yaaRab
Chheen le mujhse haafza mera


Bhool jaa ham khata shuaaron ko
Koi ja ke kehay zamanay se

Very very nice. Isey paRh kar apna aik sher yaad aa gaya,

miree her Khataa yaad dunya rakhe gi
har ik ki nazar ta'na kastee rahay gi

Zara ji, aap ki ghazal bohot khoob hay, daad aur mubarakbaad qubool kijiye. :)
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Anmol jee
Aap ki purkhaloos daad ka buhat shukria
Asal maiN khushi ghami udasi zindagi k yeh rang sab dekhtay haiN aur apney dhang se keh daitay haiN ilfaaz ka thora buhat faraq reh jaata hai
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