ham ne mehtaab ko khursheed uthaa'e dikhaa

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ham ne mehtaab ko khursheed uthaa'e dikhaa

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doosto Haal hi meiN aik taaza ghazl hu'ii hai aap loogooN ki khidmat meiN paish kra rahaa huN aap ki aaraa kaa intizaar rahe taa


ham ne mehtaab ko khursheed uthaa'e dikhaa
jab hathaili pe usay cheraa tikaa'ae daikhaa :o

ham ne daikhe haiN gale milte hu'ae shaam-o-saHar
jab HaseeN rukh pe usey zulf giraa'ae daikhaa :o

jis ne ik baar bhi daikhe haiN woh aaNkhaiN- usko
umr bhar HairtaiN aaNkhooN meiN basaa'ae daikhaa :twisted:

us ke hooNtooN pe jo halkaa saa tabasum THeraa
phool kaliooN ko bhi kashkool baRhaa'ae dikhaa :rose :rose

jis se do bool kahe us ne moHabbat ke riaz
usko sab raNj-o-alam, dard bhulaa'ae daikhaa :lol:


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Re: ham ne mehtaab ko khursheed uthaa'e dikhaa

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riaz ahmed saraa wrote:doosto Haal hi meiN aik taaza ghazl hu'ii hai aap loogooN ki khidmat meiN paish kra rahaa huN aap ki aaraa kaa intizaar rahe taa


ham ne mehtaab ko khursheed uthaa'e dikhaa
jab hathaili pe usay cheraa tikaa'ae daikhaa :o

ham ne daikhe haiN gale milte hu'ae shaam-o-saHar
jab HaseeN rukh pe usey zulf giraa'ae daikhaa :o

jis ne ik baar bhi daikhe haiN woh aaNkhaiN- usko
umr bhar HairtaiN aaNkhooN meiN basaa'ae daikhaa :twisted:

us ke hooNtooN pe jo halkaa saa tabasum THeraa
phool kaliooN ko bhi kashkool baRhaa'ae dikhaa :rose :rose

jis se do bool kahe us ne moHabbat ke riaz
usko sab raNj-o-alam, dard bhulaa'ae daikhaa :lol:


riaz
janaab Riaz saahaab,

waah!!, aap ne buhat hee umdaah ghazal sunaayee hai.
aik khushgawaar havaa ke jhoNke kee maaniNd :-)

kehne kee zaroorat naheeN hai ke aap kee ghazal pasaNd aayee magar phir bhee daad qubool kijiye!

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assalam o alaikum

wah
wah
riaz sahib

kis kis sheeer ki daad di jayee, janab kamal ker dia aap nay aisee haseen ghazal likh ker..maza aa gia parh ker ...kabhi aap ki awaz mein sunnay ko milay to lutf dobalaa ho jayee...is khubsoorat takhleeq per meri janib say daad hazir hay.

wassalam

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Riaz sahib,
Aap ki ghazal buhat pasand aayii
share karnay ka shukria
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khoob riaz sahib , ghazal apne riwayati manoN mai ubhar kar samne aai hai. balke in mauzuaat ko tark kardia jaye to ghazal ka sara maza hi jaata rahta hai. aap ke tamam sher khoobsurat kalioN pholon jaise lagay mahtaab o aaftaab ki tashbeehat bhi pasand aiN.
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naheedv wrote:
riaz ahmed saraa wrote:doosto Haal hi meiN aik taaza ghazl hu'ii hai aap loogooN ki khidmat meiN paish kra rahaa huN aap ki aaraa kaa intizaar rahe taa


ham ne mehtaab ko khursheed uthaa'e dikhaa
jab hathaili pe usay cheraa tikaa'ae daikhaa :o

ham ne daikhe haiN gale milte hu'ae shaam-o-saHar
jab HaseeN rukh pe usey zulf giraa'ae daikhaa :o

jis ne ik baar bhi daikhe haiN woh aaNkhaiN- usko
umr bhar HairtaiN aaNkhooN meiN basaa'ae daikhaa :twisted:

us ke hooNtooN pe jo halkaa saa tabasum THeraa
phool kaliooN ko bhi kashkool baRhaa'ae dikhaa :rose :rose

jis se do bool kahe us ne moHabbat ke riaz
usko sab raNj-o-alam, dard bhulaa'ae daikhaa :lol:


riaz
janaab Riaz saahaab,

waah!!, aap ne buhat hee umdaah ghazal sunaayee hai.
aik khushgawaar havaa ke jhoNke kee maaniNd :-)

kehne kee zaroorat naheeN hai ke aap kee ghazal pasaNd aayee magar phir bhee daad qubool kijiye!

mukhliS
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aadaab

aap ne is ghazal ko paRha aur saraah meiN aap kaa beHad mamnoon huN ummeed hai aaiNda bhi Hosala afzaaii farmaati rahaiN gi

hamaisah khuh rahaiN

niaz maNd

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riaz ahmed saraa wrote:doosto Haal hi meiN aik taaza ghazl hu'ii hai aap loogooN ki khidmat meiN paish kra rahaa huN aap ki aaraa kaa intizaar rahe taa


ham ne mehtaab ko khursheed uthaa'e dikhaa
jab hathaili pe usay cheraa tikaa'ae daikhaa :o

ham ne daikhe haiN gale milte hu'ae shaam-o-saHar
jab HaseeN rukh pe usey zulf giraa'ae daikhaa :o

jis ne ik baar bhi daikhe haiN woh aaNkhaiN- usko
umr bhar HairtaiN aaNkhooN meiN basaa'ae daikhaa :twisted:

us ke hooNtooN pe jo halkaa saa tabasum THeraa
phool kaliooN ko bhi kashkool baRhaa'ae dikhaa :rose :rose

jis se do bool kahe us ne moHabbat ke riaz
usko sab raNj-o-alam, dard bhulaa'ae daikhaa :lol:


riaz
SALA/\/\.

WAH WAH BOHAT ACHI GHAZAL HAY SHARE KARNAY KA SHUKRIYA.

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riaz ahmed saraa wrote:doosto Haal hi meiN aik taaza ghazl hu'ii hai aap loogooN ki khidmat meiN paish kra rahaa huN aap ki aaraa kaa intizaar rahe taa


ham ne mehtaab ko khursheed uthaa'e dikhaa
jab hathaili pe usay cheraa tikaa'ae daikhaa :o

ham ne daikhe haiN gale milte hu'ae shaam-o-saHar
jab HaseeN rukh pe usey zulf giraa'ae daikhaa :o

jis ne ik baar bhi daikhe haiN woh aaNkhaiN- usko
umr bhar HairtaiN aaNkhooN meiN basaa'ae daikhaa :twisted:

us ke hooNtooN pe jo halkaa saa tabasum THeraa
phool kaliooN ko bhi kashkool baRhaa'ae dikhaa :rose :rose

jis se do bool kahe us ne moHabbat ke riaz
usko sab raNj-o-alam, dard bhulaa'ae daikhaa :lol:


riaz

Naheed saHiba

aadaab

aap ne is ghazal ko paRha aur saraah meiN aap kaa beHad mamnoon huN ummeed hai aaiNda bhi Hosala afzaaii farmaati rahaiN gi

hamaisah khuh rahaiN

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waqar_masood wrote:assalam o alaikum

wah
wah
riaz sahib

kis kis sheeer ki daad di jayee, janab kamal ker dia aap nay aisee haseen ghazal likh ker..maza aa gia parh ker ...kabhi aap ki awaz mein sunnay ko milay to lutf dobalaa ho jayee...is khubsoorat takhleeq per meri janib say daad hazir hay.

wassalam

waqar masood
Waqaar Masood saHib

aadaab

janaab meiN aap kaa beHad mamnoon huN ka aap ne mairy ghazl ko paRha aur ise saraaha

ji kabhi aap ko zaroor sunaa'eeN ge apni aavaaz meiN pata naheeN avaaza bardaasht ho sake yaa naheeN aap se :-) :-)

bohat shukria is pazeeraai kaa

niaz maNd

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zmufti wrote:Riaz sahib,
Aap ki ghazal buhat pasand aayii
share karnay ka shukria
zmufti
Zarqa saHiba

aadaab

beHad mamnoon huN k aap ne ghazl ko paRha aur ise pasaNd faramaaya

umeed hai aaiNda bhi hosala afzaaii farmati rahaiN gi

bohat navaazish

riaz :-)
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Mahtab Qadr wrote:khoob riaz sahib , ghazal apne riwayati manoN mai ubhar kar samne aai hai. balke in mauzuaat ko tark kardia jaye to ghazal ka sara maza hi jaata rahta hai. aap ke tamam sher khoobsurat kalioN pholon jaise lagay mahtaab o aaftaab ki tashbeehat bhi pasand aiN.
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Janab-e-Mahtab Qadr saHib !

aadaab arz jao

jabaab beHad mamnoon huN k aap ne mairy kavish ko paRha aur ise saraaha.

aap ke alfaaz marie lli'ae bohat baRaa a'zaaz hai

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Aapki ghazal pasand aayi

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MuHtarami Riaz Ahmed Sara Saahib,

Purkhuloos Tasleemaat, :-)

Aapki ghazal bahut pasand aayi lekin uske ashAar apni nazar se dekhkar un per tabsirah karne kii jasaarat karrahaa hooN jis se aapka muttafiq hounaa zaroori nahiN hei.

ham ne mehtaab ko khursheed uthaa'e dikhaa
jab hathaili pe usay cheraa tikaa'ae daikhaa

MaTlaA bahut khoob hei lekin mujhe aapki tashbeeh ghair manoos maloom houi. Aap kii tashbeeh se yeh zaahir hourahaa hei ke aap hatheili ko mehtaab aur chere ko khursheed se tashbeeh de rahe heiN.

ham ne daikhe haiN gale milte hu'ae shaam-o-saHar
jab HaseeN rukh pe usey zulf giraa'ae daikhaa

Bahut hii achcha sheAr hei. Waah waah.

jis ne ik baar bhi daikhe haiN woh aaNkhaiN- usko
umr bhar HairtaiN aaNkhooN meiN basaa'ae daikhaa

pahle misreA meiN jis ne ik baar bhi dekhi heiN hounaa chaahiye kiyooNkeh lafz "ne" ka isteAmal is qaaAide kii paabandi ko laazim qaraar detaa hei agar faa'Ail mufrad hou tou "dekhii" saheeh hei. Waise sheAr achcha hei.

us ke hooNtooN pe jo halkaa saa tabasum THeraa
phool kaliooN ko bhi kashkool baRhaa'ae dikhaa

SheAr bahut achcha hei.

jis se do bool kahe us ne moHabbat ke riaz
usko sab raNj-o-alam, dard bhulaa'ae daikhaa

Aapke maqTeA ke pahle misreA meiN "jis se" kii bajaaye "jis ne" hou tou misraA barabar houjayega
lekin ibaarat ko vaazeh karne ke liye us misreA ko yooN karnaa paRega: "jis ne do boul muHabbat ke kahe dil se Riaz". Is TaraH maqteA kaa mafhoom bhii samajh meiN aajaega. Doosre misreA meiN ranj-o-alam, dard meiN "aur" yaa Harf-e-Atf kii kami meHsoos hourahi hei. isko yooN kardeN to ibaarat vaazeh houjayegi"usko sab ranj o gham o dard bhulaaye dekhaa


Aakhir meiN aapki is bahut hii dilkash ghazal per mubaarakbaad pesh kartaa hooN. Meri dili daad qubool farmaayiye.


Aapka Mukhlis,
Nazir.

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sara_j wrote:
riaz ahmed saraa wrote:doosto Haal hi meiN aik taaza ghazl hu'ii hai aap loogooN ki khidmat meiN paish kra rahaa huN aap ki aaraa kaa intizaar rahe taa


ham ne mehtaab ko khursheed uthaa'e dikhaa
jab hathaili pe usay cheraa tikaa'ae daikhaa :o

ham ne daikhe haiN gale milte hu'ae shaam-o-saHar
jab HaseeN rukh pe usey zulf giraa'ae daikhaa :o

jis ne ik baar bhi daikhe haiN woh aaNkhaiN- usko
umr bhar HairtaiN aaNkhooN meiN basaa'ae daikhaa :twisted:

us ke hooNtooN pe jo halkaa saa tabasum THeraa
phool kaliooN ko bhi kashkool baRhaa'ae dikhaa :rose :rose

jis se do bool kahe us ne moHabbat ke riaz
usko sab raNj-o-alam, dard bhulaa'ae daikhaa :lol:


riaz
riaz saahib,

salaam.

bohat khoob! bohat hi khoob!

aapki ghazal bohat pasand aayi, haseen khayalaat ko bohat hi haseen alfaaz mein qalamband kiye hain.

baRi muddat baad aek haseen tehreer paRhi dil khush hua.

daad aur mubarakbaad qubool keejiye.

sara
Sara saHbiba

aadaab

aap kaa bohat shukr guzaar huN k aap ne mairy kaavish ko paRha aur ise saraa

ghazal ki pasaNdeedagi par bhi bohat mamnoon huN :grin:

hamaisha khuh rahain

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Riaz Sb.,

Nihayat murassa Ghazal per meri janib se mubarakbaad qubool kijiye.

Mukhlis,

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little abbasi wrote:
riaz ahmed saraa wrote:doosto Haal hi meiN aik taaza ghazl hu'ii hai aap loogooN ki khidmat meiN paish kra rahaa huN aap ki aaraa kaa intizaar rahe taa


ham ne mehtaab ko khursheed uthaa'e dikhaa
jab hathaili pe usay cheraa tikaa'ae daikhaa :o

ham ne daikhe haiN gale milte hu'ae shaam-o-saHar
jab HaseeN rukh pe usey zulf giraa'ae daikhaa :o

jis ne ik baar bhi daikhe haiN woh aaNkhaiN- usko
umr bhar HairtaiN aaNkhooN meiN basaa'ae daikhaa :twisted:

us ke hooNtooN pe jo halkaa saa tabasum THeraa
phool kaliooN ko bhi kashkool baRhaa'ae dikhaa :rose :rose

jis se do bool kahe us ne moHabbat ke riaz
usko sab raNj-o-alam, dard bhulaa'ae daikhaa :lol:


riaz
SALA/\/\.

WAH WAH BOHAT ACHI GHAZAL HAY SHARE KARNAY KA SHUKRIYA.

ATTIQ ABBASI
Attiq Abbasi saHib

aadaab

janaab mamnoon huN k aap ne ghazal ko paRha aur ise apni raa'ae se navaaza.

ummeed hai k aaNida bhi Hosala afzaaii farmaate rahaiN ge

niaz mand

riaz :-)
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