Sher ke doosre misre ke pehle/aakhri alfaaz se sher kahiye!

Post by **najma** » Sat May 21, 2005 1:33 am

Hashmat Usmani wrote:
najma wrote:sara jeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
ab fil-badee, jo keh sakii keh diya
aur aap par bohat gussa bhi aarahaa hay========== tamaatar :P
lekin tumhii batao k lik.kheN to kya likheN
tum ne to aazmaane ka Thekaaa hi le liya
najma

aur kya======
sara ki bach,chii daal daal kach,chii
tamaatar

Abdullah Nazir · Post by **Abdullah Nazir** » Sat May 21, 2005 7:08 am

hamaari dousti ne kitne rangeeN gul khilaaye heiN

Miri deewanagi per bhii wo akcar muskuraaye heiN.

iiri/heiN

Post by **najma** » Sat May 21, 2005 8:41 am

yaqeeN mohkam, amal paiham, mohabbata faatah-e-aalam
jihad-e-zindagaanii meiN ye haiN mardoN ki shamsheereN

jihaad/shamsheer

Post by **najma** » Sat May 21, 2005 6:08 pm

sara_j wrote:
najma wrote:yaqeeN mohkam, amal paiham, mohabbata faatah-e-aalam
jihad-e-zindagaanii meiN ye haiN mardoN ki shamsheereN

jihaad/shamsheer
mujhe tou nahi milraha koi shair aur filbadeh bhi nahi samjh aa raha so filwaqt to yehi pesh hai:

jazba-e-be_iKHtiyaar-e-shauq dekha chaahiye
seena-e-shamsheer se baahar hai dam shamsheer ka

lekin Ustad ji ka intezar hai voh zaroor kuch likhdenge :P

to phir aap ne haar maan lii naaaaaaaaa :P

seena-e-sad-chaak kya hoga rafuu
kis tarah unko maiN chara-gar kahooN
bafis ahmad siddiqui

kis/kahooN

Post by **najma** » Sun May 22, 2005 8:39 am

mehfil meiN un kii aaj bhi ham ajnabii se thay
ab aabroo-e-ishq, yahaaN tak chalii gaee

nafis ahmad siddiqui

Post by **najma** » Sun May 22, 2005 6:36 pm

mujhe aarzoo thi siki, wo muqaam aagayaa hay

mire dil kidhakanoN meiN tira naam aagayaa hay

mire/hay

Post by **najma** » Mon May 23, 2005 10:15 pm

khaaN ye martabah mera, ke takleef-e-sharakat dooN
magar mehmaaN hueyhaiN baadshah,akcar faqeeroN ke

magar/ ke/faqeeroN

Post by **najma** » Tue May 24, 2005 4:21 am

chale to kat hi jaeyga safar aahita aahita
-------------------------?

''aahistah''

Post by **Hashmat Usmani** » Tue May 24, 2005 5:31 am

najma wrote:chale to kat hi jaeyga safar aahita aahita
-------------------------?

''aahistah''

aapkaa she'r na mukammil hai. aur aaKhiri lafz to "aahista" hai magar dusre misr'e kaa pahlaa lafz kia hai?

please aap ise delete kar ke koii nayaa she'r dijiiye. shukria

Abdullah Nazir · Post by **Abdullah Nazir** » Tue May 24, 2005 10:52 am

Aahistah chalte chalte vahaaN aagaye heiN ham

koii bahaanah sunne kii Aadat nahiN rahi.

(koii/rehi)

Nasir.
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Post by **najma** » Tue May 24, 2005 10:58 am

koee ummed bar naheeN aatii, koee soorat nazar naheeN aatii
maut ka ik din mu,ayyan hay, neen kyuuN raat bhar naheeN aatii

maut/aatii

Abdullah Nazir · Post by **Abdullah Nazir** » Tue May 24, 2005 11:05 am

Maut aajaye tou behtar hei qaraar aayegaa

kab talak sunte raheN Heele Hawaale un ke.

(kab / kle)

Nasir.
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Post by **najma** » Tue May 24, 2005 12:14 pm

kab tak rahay NAFIS taGhazzuk ye saaz-gaar
mish,al yehi hay wus,at-e-afkaar ke liye

nafis ahmad siddiqui

mish,al/liye

Abdullah Nazir · Post by **Abdullah Nazir** » Tue May 24, 2005 3:42 pm

mish'al-e-raah-e-muHabbat ko bujhaate kiyooN hou

her qadam per mujhe majboor banaate kiyuN hou.

(her/hou)

Nazir.

Post by **najma** » Tue May 24, 2005 7:33 pm

har har qadam pe jis ne diye haiN hazaar Gham
us fitna-gar ko bhool na jaaoN, to kya karooN
najma

Sher ke doosre misre ke pehle/aakhri alfaaz se sher kahiye!

"hamaari"

"aahistah"

"maut"

mish'al