waqar_masood wrote:nazar nahi aa rehi ......................hamesha ki terah..naheedv ji ki ghazal bhi nazar nahi aa rehi

najma wrote:SATHIYO!
AADAAB
aaj ek nazm leka hazir hooN.ye nazm kaee mushairoN meiN farmaaish par bhi suna chukii hooN.nazm to jesii bhji hay, lekin ummeed hay keh iska mauzuu, apko zarooer pasand aeyga.ye nazm aaj ke daur ke ek larzah-khez saanihe se muta,ccar ho kar sar zad huee thii, is meiN aawurd ka dakhl naheeN, ye sarasar aamad hay.
aap bhi dekhiye aurapnii aaraa, se nawaziye.
asaatiza-e-kiraam se islaah ki bhi darkhaast hay. :P
arz kartii chalooN , keh merii koee betee to naheeN, lekin ek maaN aur betee ke ehsasaat to har dil meiN hote haiN.
ab aap hi ye nazm paRhiye aur bataiyye, kesii lagii



den hay qudrat! tirii, malik! tira eh,saan hay [-o<
chaand see betee ataa kii, jo aziz az jaan hay
bachpane meiN khel guRyoN ke bohat khele, magar
aaj jo paaee hay guRya, wo miree pehchaan hay
nau maheene khaab bun,ne meiN jo guzre haiN, na pooch :P
dard jo maiN ne sahay, tera karam, rehmaan! hay [-o<
sadqe waarii ho ke bhaee choomte haiN tere haath :rose
tujh meiN hay abuu ki, aur abbu meiN terii jaan hay :rose
ye dar-o-deewaar haiN sau jaan se tujh par fidaa
teri aamad se miraa ghar khushyoN ka unwaan hay :rose :rose

aankh se mujhko tasawwur ki ye aata hay nazar
waqt ik raftaar se kis tarha jata hay guzar

ghuTnoN ke bal chalte chalte tuu kabhi gir jaaey gii :P
girte girte ek din chal kar mire paas aaey gii
mast hi kar jaaey gii ma,soom see har har ada
totlee guftaar terii har kisii ko bhaaey gii lol
paRh ke bismillaah, che kalme sikhaaooN gii tujhe
din meiN sau sau baar un kalmoN ko tuu dohraaey gii
nursury, school, phir college ka daur_ajaaey gaa :comp
sir balandii paaungii, jab digriyaaN tuu laaey gii =D>
ek din shaadii ke phir paiGhaam, tere aaeiN gay
mashwara tujh se karooNgii, tuu bohat sharmaaey gii

ek anjaane khatar se khauf saa aane laga
fikr ka lamha mire ehsaas pe chaane laga

chaa rahii hay chaar suu kaisii balaa, hanstii huee
maGhribii tehzeeb kii kalii ghataa, uThtee huee
munh chiRaatii hay hamarii mashriqii tehzeeb ka
izzat-o-naamoos ki dhajji har-ik, uRtee huee
raat ki raanii bhi apnii zaat meiN meh,boos hay
chand sikkoN ke liye baazaar meiN biktii huee
mar gaee Ghairat se shaaKh-e-gul, jo guzra saaniha
raat uski hi kalii, be-aab saa motii huee
lekin aiy lakht-e-jigar! tuu hay mira woh e,timaad 8)
jheel meiN jaise keh ho bas, chaandinii chantii huee

aaj hay NAJMA, watan kii maaN , tuu kal keh,laaey gii
sham,a ban ke har andhere ko nigaltii jaaey gii

naheedv wrote:waah Namja ji,

buaht hi hassaas mozoo' aur nihaayat hee umdah andaaz.e.biyaaN!
aap ne vaaqa'ee dil ko choone waalee nazm takhliq kee hai.
meree taraf se dhair saaree daad qubool kijiye!

mukhlis
Naheed


aapki daad sir aaNkhoN pe naheed v sahiba!
is hausla-afzaee ke liye mamnoon hooN
khair andesh
najma

naheedv wrote:waah Namja ji,

buaht hi hassaas mozoo' aur nihaayat hee umdah andaaz.e.biyaaN!
aap ne vaaqa'ee dil ko choone waalee nazm takhliq kee hai.
meree taraf se dhair saaree daad qubool kijiye!

mukhlis
Naheed


aapki daad sir aaNkhoN pe naheed v sahiba!
is hausla-afzaee ke liye mamnoon hooN
khair andesh
najma

Star Mind wrote:moHtarama Najma SaaHiba, aadaab :)

aap ki kaavish har i'tebaar se mukammal kaavish hai , aur mujhe nazar aarahi hai :)

kaavish har kiHaaz se bahut KhoobSoorat hai , daad qabool kejeye

shukriyaa

moKhliS : Zia Baloch

Abbasi wrote:Assalamualaikum

Bahoot Khoob Bahoot hi khobsurat nazam likhkhi hai aur mauzu tu bahoot hi khobsurat chunna hai. Sadda Khush Rahain.

Allah Hafiz

Yousaf Abbasi

gurya wrote:

najma wrote:SATHIYO!
AADAAB
aaj ek nazm leka hazir hooN.ye nazm kaee mushairoN meiN farmaaish par bhi suna chukii hooN.nazm to jesii bhji hay, lekin ummeed hay keh iska mauzuu, apko zarooer pasand aeyga.ye nazm aaj ke daur ke ek larzah-khez saanihe se muta,ccar ho kar sar zad huee thii, is meiN aawurd ka dakhl naheeN, ye sarasar aamad hay.
aap bhi dekhiye aurapnii aaraa, se nawaziye.
asaatiza-e-kiraam se islaah ki bhi darkhaast hay. :P
arz kartii chalooN , keh merii koee betee to naheeN, lekin ek maaN aur betee ke ehsasaat to har dil meiN hote haiN.
ab aap hi ye nazm paRhiye aur bataiyye, kesii lagii


guRya
ye nazm ham ne sbhi achii achii aur pyarii pyarii bachiyoN k liye likhi hay.tum bhi un meiN yaqeenanshamil ho, aur wese bhi tumhara to naam hi GURYA hay.
sada khush raho

bohat shukriya



den hay qudrat! tirii, malik! tira eh,saan hay [-o<
chaand see betee ataa kii, jo aziz az jaan hay
bachpane meiN khel guRyoN ke bohat khele, magar
aaj jo paaee hay guRya, wo miree pehchaan hay
nau maheene khaab bun,ne meiN jo guzre haiN, na pooch :P
dard jo maiN ne sahay, tera karam, rehmaan! hay [-o<
sadqe waarii ho ke bhaee choomte haiN tere haath :rose
tujh meiN hay abuu ki, aur abbu meiN terii jaan hay :rose
ye dar-o-deewaar haiN sau jaan se tujh par fidaa
teri aamad se miraa ghar khushyoN ka unwaan hay :rose :rose

aankh se mujhko tasawwur ki ye aata hay nazar
waqt ik raftaar se kis tarha jata hay guzar

ghuTnoN ke bal chalte chalte tuu kabhi gir jaaey gii :P
girte girte ek din chal kar mire paas aaey gii
mast hi kar jaaey gii ma,soom see har har ada
totlee guftaar terii har kisii ko bhaaey gii lol
paRh ke bismillaah, che kalme sikhaaooN gii tujhe
din meiN sau sau baar un kalmoN ko tuu dohraaey gii
nursury, school, phir college ka daur_ajaaey gaa :comp
sir balandii paaungii, jab digriyaaN tuu laaey gii =D>
ek din shaadii ke phir paiGhaam, tere aaeiN gay
mashwara tujh se karooNgii, tuu bohat sharmaaey gii

ek anjaane khatar se khauf saa aane laga
fikr ka lamha mire ehsaas pe chaane laga

chaa rahii hay chaar suu kaisii balaa, hanstii huee
maGhribii tehzeeb kii kalii ghataa, uThtee huee
munh chiRaatii hay hamarii mashriqii tehzeeb ka
izzat-o-naamoos ki dhajji har-ik, uRtee huee
raat ki raanii bhi apnii zaat meiN meh,boos hay
chand sikkoN ke liye baazaar meiN biktii huee
mar gaee Ghairat se shaaKh-e-gul, jo guzra saaniha
raat uski hi kalii, be-aab saa motii huee
lekin aiy lakht-e-jigar! tuu hay mira woh e,timaad 8)
jheel meiN jaise keh ho bas, chaandinii chantii huee

aaj hay NAJMA, watan kii maaN , tuu kal keh,laaey gii
sham,a ban ke har andhere ko nigaltii jaaey gii

bachpane meiN khel guRyoN ke bohat khele, magar
aaj jo paaee hay guRya, wo miree pehchaan hay


ye shair meray liye likha hai kya?????????

mazak bartaraf bohot he acha likha hai ap ne bohot pasand aya

sara_j wrote:najma ji,

wah waah! kya khoob aapne beti per nazm likhi, bohat khoob!

bohat hi dil ko moh lene wali tehreer hai.

dhair saari daad qubool keejiye.

sara