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Assalam o allaikum!
Ek taza tareen ghazal pesh e khidmat hai.Ap ki raey ka intezar rahey ga.
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moHtarami Aakif SaaHib, aadaab :)

aap ki Ghazal nehaayat munfarid aur di-kash lagee, daad qabool kejeye !
shukryioya

moKhliS : Zia Baloch
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Khamoshi se jhatak kar, aaj phir, dast-e-sabaa maiN ne

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Re: Zameen Sakht na aasman sangdil hai...ek taza ghazal

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akifghani wrote:Assalam o allaikum!
Ek taza tareen ghazal pesh e khidmat hai.Ap ki raey ka intezar rahey ga.
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janab akifghani sahib
aadaab
aap ki Ghazal meiN khoob khayalaat haiN.
daad qubool kijiye
wese kuch muqaamaat par aap ke talaffuz ki bina par wazn khaarij ho raha hay.

1=she,r 1 ka pehla misr,a=saheeh lafz(nah) hota hay.aap ne (naaa)baandha hay
2= she,r 2 ka pehla misr,a=saheeh lafz(qadam) hota hay.aap ne (qad,m) baandha hay
3=maqt,a ka pehla misr,a=saheeh lafz(gard) hota hay.aap ne (garad) baandha hay

aap apne in khayalaat ko mazeed khoobsooratii se bhi bayaan kar sakte haiN.

taa-ham is ach koshish par daad qubool kijiye
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Hosla afzai ka shukria.Apki nishan dahi par ghaur key bad mutaliqa changings kar dee hain.Umeed hai aienda bhee karm farmai hoti rahey gi.
najma wrote:
akifghani wrote:Assalam o allaikum!
Ek taza tareen ghazal pesh e khidmat hai.Ap ki raey ka intezar rahey ga.
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janab akifghani sahib
aadaab
aap ki Ghazal meiN khoob khayalaat haiN.
daad qubool kijiye
wese kuch muqaamaat par aap ke talaffuz ki bina par wazn khaarij ho raha hay.

1=she,r 1 ka pehla misr,a=saheeh lafz(nah) hota hay.aap ne (naaa)baandha hay
2= she,r 2 ka pehla misr,a=saheeh lafz(qadam) hota hay.aap ne (qad,m) baandha hay
3=maqt,a ka pehla misr,a=saheeh lafz(gard) hota hay.aap ne (garad) baandha hay

aap apne in khayalaat ko mazeed khoobsooratii se bhi bayaan kar sakte haiN.

taa-ham is ach koshish par daad qubool kijiye
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Adaab Akif Sahib,

Munfarid zameen muntakhib ki hay aap ne, aur ashaar bhi Khoob nikaale heN. Daad qubool kijiye.

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Bahut khoob Akif Ghani sahib aap ki ghazal behad pasand aai. tashreef laate raihye aur apne kalam se nawazte raheiye, shukria
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Anmol wrote:Adaab Akif Sahib,

Munfarid zameen muntakhib ki hay aap ne, aur ashaar bhi Khoob nikaale heN. Daad qubool kijiye.

:-)
Bohat Bohat Shukria Anmol jee.
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akifghani wrote:Hosla afzai ka shukria.Apki nishan dahi par ghaur key bad mutaliqa changings kar dee hain.Umeed hai aienda bhee karm farmai hoti rahey gi.
najma wrote:
akifghani wrote:Assalam o allaikum!
Ek taza tareen ghazal pesh e khidmat hai.Ap ki raey ka intezar rahey ga.
Image

janab akifghani sahib
aadaab
aap ki Ghazal meiN khoob khayalaat haiN.
daad qubool kijiye
wese kuch muqaamaat par aap ke talaffuz ki bina par wazn khaarij ho raha hay.

1=she,r 1 ka pehla misr,a=saheeh lafz(nah) hota hay.aap ne (naaa)baandha hay
2= she,r 2 ka pehla misr,a=saheeh lafz(qadam) hota hay.aap ne (qad,m) baandha hay
3=maqt,a ka pehla misr,a=saheeh lafz(gard) hota hay.aap ne (garad) baandha hay

aap apne in khayalaat ko mazeed khoobsooratii se bhi bayaan kar sakte haiN.

taa-ham is ach koshish par daad qubool kijiye
:-)
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najma wrote:
akifghani wrote:Assalam o allaikum!
Ek taza tareen ghazal pesh e khidmat hai.Ap ki raey ka intezar rahey ga.
janab akifghani sahib
aadaab
aap ki Ghazal meiN khoob khayalaat haiN.
daad qubool kijiye
wese kuch muqaamaat par aap ke talaffuz ki bina par wazn khaarij ho raha hay.

1=she,r 1 ka pehla misr,a=saheeh lafz(nah) hota hay.aap ne (naaa)baandha hay
2= she,r 2 ka pehla misr,a=saheeh lafz(qadam) hota hay.aap ne (qad,m) baandha hay
3=maqt,a ka pehla misr,a=saheeh lafz(gard) hota hay.aap ne (garad) baandha hay

aap apne in khayalaat ko mazeed khoobsooratii se bhi bayaan kar sakte haiN.

taa-ham is ach koshish par daad qubool kijiye
:-)
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janab akifghani sahib
aadaab
aap ki Ghazal meiN khoob khayalaat haiN.
daad qubool kijiye
wese kuch muqaamaat par aap ke talaffuz ki bina par wazn khaarij ho raha hay.

1=she,r 1 ka pehla misr,a=saheeh lafz(nah) hota hay.aap ne (naaa)baandha hay
2= she,r 2 ka pehla misr,a=saheeh lafz(qadam) hota hay.aap ne (qad,m) baandha hay
3=maqt,a ka pehla misr,a=saheeh lafz(gard) hota hay.aap ne (garad) baandha hay

aap apne in khayalaat ko mazeed khoobsooratii se bhi bayaan kar sakte haiN.

taa-ham is ach koshish par daad qubool kijiye
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