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"ab kahaaN raunaq-e-bahaar-e-ghazal"

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Assalam-o-alaikum

ustaad shaa'ir janaab Abdullah Nazir ke taraHi misre per meri kawish haazir hai, her chand ke is zameen meiN she'r kehna mere liye ju-e-sheer laane ke mutaraadif hua, radeef ne bahot si paabandiyaaN aayed karne ki koshish ki :D, phir bhi jo ash'aar hue, aap ke saamne haiN :

kaun hai aaj paasdaar-e-ghazal?
uTh gaye saare taajdaar-e-ghazal

kuch nahiN mujh ko ikhtiyaar-e-ghazal
phir bhi rehta hooN bay.qaraar-e-ghazal

ghalib-o-meer jis meiN rehte hoN
kaise ujRe ga vo deyaar-e-ghazal

sinf-e-naazuk bahot haiN urdu meiN
maiN to hooN bas umeed.vaar-e-ghazal :D

jab milaa she'r meiN jigar ka lahoo
baRh gayaa aur aitibaar-e-ghazal

ahl-e-fun jaa chuke dabistaaN se
"ab kahaaN raunaq-e-bahaar-e-ghazal"

aik se baRh ke ik sukhanwar hai
par nahiN koi ghamgusaar-e-ghazal

dil ki dunya udaas rehti hai
cheiR do phir se koi taar-e-ghazal

phool pazzhmurdah , zard haiN patte
kitna veeraaN hai shaakhsaar-e-ghazal

aa rahe haiN khayaal meiN mazmooN
bas ke thoRa sa intizaar-e-ghazal

tahee daamaaN nahiN Nabeel urdu
ab bhi baaqi haiN jaaN.nicaar-e-ghazal

shukria

amjad
Mire ash'aar ae Iqbal kyuN pyaare na hoN mujhko
mire TooTe hue dil ke ye dard.angez naale haiN
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Re: "ab kahaaN raunaq-e-bahaar-e-ghazal"

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Ibn-e-siddique wrote:Assalam-o-alaikum

ustaad shaa'ir janaab Abdullah Nazir ke taraHi misre per meri kawish haazir hai, her chand ke is zameen meiN she'r kehna mere liye ju-e-sheer laane ke mutaraadif hua, radeef ne bahot si paabandiyaaN aayed karne ki koshish ki :D, phir bhi jo ash'aar hue, aap ke saamne haiN :

kaun hai aaj paasdaar-e-ghazal?
uTh gaye saare taajdaar-e-ghazal

kuch nahiN mujh ko ikhtiyaar-e-ghazal
phir bhi rehta hooN bay.qaraar-e-ghazal

ghalib-o-meer jis meiN rehte hoN
kaise ujRe ga vo deyaar-e-ghazal

sinf-e-naazuk bahot haiN urdu meiN
maiN to hooN bas umeed.vaar-e-ghazal :D

jab milaa she'r meiN jigar ka lahoo
baRh gayaa aur aitibaar-e-ghazal

ahl-e-fun jaa chuke dabistaaN se
"ab kahaaN raunaq-e-bahaar-e-ghazal"

aik se baRh ke ik sukhanwar hai
par nahiN koi ghamgusaar-e-ghazal

dil ki dunya udaas rehti hai
cheiR do phir se koi taar-e-ghazal

phool pazzhmurdah , zard haiN patte
kitna veeraaN hai shaakhsaar-e-ghazal

aa rahe haiN khayaal meiN mazmooN
bas ke thoRa sa intizaar-e-ghazal

tahee daamaaN nahiN Nabeel urdu
ab bhi baaqi haiN jaaN.nicaar-e-ghazal

shukria

amjad


waaaaah amjad miyaaN waaah

masha allaah roz ba roz nikhaar hi aata cha jarahay hay, tumhare andaz-e-fikr meiN.

kya baat hay

yuuN to poori ghazal ki pasand aae , lekin ye she,r======

dil ki dunya udaas rehti hai
cheiR do phir se koi taar-e-ghazal :-)

waaah waah waah

kya taGhazzul hay is meiN. :-)

ek kamyab kalaam par hamari janib se bhar-puur daad qubool karo


aur haa

zara Thehro :roll:
















daad k saath hazaroN---------- :P :grin: :grin: :grin: :grin: :grin: :wink: :grin: :grin: :grin:
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Ibn-e-siddique wrote:Assalam-o-alaikum

Walekum Salam, jeete rahiyye. :wink:

Guz.50 ke teHt meri kawish haazir hai, her chand ke is zameen meiN she'r kehna mere liye ju-e-sheer laane ke mutaraadif hua, radeef ne bahot si paabandiyaaN aayed karne ki koshish ki :D, phir bhi jo ash'aar hue, aap ke saamne haiN :

Radeef ne to aap ko bohot roka, lekin aap na ruke. :lol:

kaun hai aaj paasdaar-e-ghazal?
uTh gaye saare sheh.savaar-e-ghazal

Nice sher. Aap heN na paasdaar-e-ghazal. :wink: Qafiye ache use kiye heN aap ne, wese sheh.savaar se to ghuR sawari yaad aa gayi. :twisted:

kuch nahiN mujh ko ikhtiyaar-e-ghazal
phir bhi rehta hooN bay.qaraar-e-ghazal

:wink: Ab in Ghazal sahiba se milna hi paRega jin k liye aap is qadar beqaraar rehte heN. Khuda Khair kare. :twisted:

sinf-e-naazuk bahot haiN urdu meiN
maiN to hooN bas umeed.vaar-e-ghazal :grin:

Yani bohot si sinf-e-nazuk meiN bus aik Ghazal sahiba hi aap ke jee ko bhaayi heN. :wink:

jab milaa she'r meiN jigar ka lahoo
baRh gayaa aur aitibaar-e-ghazal

Acha sher hay, wese yahaN "baRh gaya aur bhi waqaar-e-ghazal"bhi ho sakta tha. :-)

ahl-e-fun jaa chuke dabistaaN se
"ab kahaaN raunaq-e-bahaar-e-ghazal"

Aray aray kaun kehta hay jaa chuke? MaiN huN na. :grin:

dil ki dunya udaas rehti hai
cheiR do phir se koi taar-e-ghazal

Waah kya Khoob sher hay, zabardast. 8)

phool pazzhmurdah , zard haiN patte
kitna veeraaN hai shaakhsaar-e-ghazal

aa rahe haiN khayaal meiN mazmooN
bas ke thoRa sa intizaar-e-ghazal

Nice.

tahee daamaaN nahiN Nabeel urdu
ab bhi baaqi haiN jaaN.nicaar-e-ghazal

Ji ji bilkul jese k aap. :wink:

Amjad Sahib, arsa daraaz ke baad aap ki koi Ghazal paRhne ko mili, :-) aur yaqeen kijiye k bohot pasand aayi, itni mushkil zameen ko aap ne itni sahoolat se nibhaya hay k herat ho rahi hay. Sabhi ashaar Khoob heN, DheroN daad qubool kijiye. :-)

shukria

amjad

AnmoL :D
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ibne siddique sahib
buhat khoob
meri taraf se daad qabool kijye
regards
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Bahut khoob waah waah

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MuHtarami
Amjad Nabeel Saahib,


Purkhuloos Tasleemaat, :-)

Urdustan kii Guzarish 50 per khaaksaar ke diye houe miSreA per aapki TaraHi ghazal ma'shaa'allah bahut khoob hei.

Saare ke saare ashAar beHad pasand hei. Is liye maiN ne munaasib nahiN samjhaa ke tafseeli tabSirah karuN.

Meri dilii daad aur mubaarakbad qubool framaayiye.


Aapka Mukhlis,
Nazir.
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mukarramee Amjad SaaHeb:aadaab!

aap kee t^araHee Ghazal naz^ar-nawaaz huyee. aap ne zameen kaa Haq Khoob adaa kiyaa hai. haaN Ghazal kaa andaroonee-taZ^aad dekh kar yeh faiSilah naheeN kar sakaa keh is ko naz^m kahooN yaa Ghazal-e-musalsal. Khair, jo bh`ee hai achh`ee hai. daad HaaZ^ir hai. qubool farmaa,iYe.

Sarwar A. Raz :Sarwar:
yooN aur bohat a'ib haiN :Sarwar: meN wa-lekin
kambaKht muHabbat meN to yaktaa nazar aayaa

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najma wrote:
waaaaah amjad miyaaN waaah

masha allaah roz ba roz nikhaar hi aata cha jarahay hay, tumhare andaz-e-fikr meiN.

kya baat hay

yuuN to poori ghazal ki pasand aae , lekin ye she,r======

dil ki dunya udaas rehti hai
cheiR do phir se koi taar-e-ghazal :-)

waaah waah waah

kya taGhazzul hay is meiN. :-)

ek kamyab kalaam par hamari janib se bhar-puur daad qubool karo
Najma baji:

salaam arz hai

aik taveel arse baa'd aap se baraah-e-raast baat ho rahi hai, kaisi haiN aap , umeed hai khairiyat se hoNgi, aap ne is ghazal ko pasand farmaaya, goya khaaksaar ka 2 kilo khoon baRh gayaa :D :D

bharpoor daad ke liye maiN dil se aap ka mamnoon hooN

bahot bahot shukria

sadaa khush raheN

Amjad
aur haa

zara Thehro :roll:

daad k saath hazaroN---------- :P :grin: :grin: :grin: :grin: :grin: :wink: :grin: :grin: :grin:
shukria Najma baji, ye bhi qubool kar liya ham ne ;) :mrgreen: :twisted: lol :grin:
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Re: "ab kahaaN raunaq-e-bahaar-e-ghazal"

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Ibn-e-siddique wrote:
najma wrote:
waaaaah amjad miyaaN waaah

masha allaah roz ba roz nikhaar hi aata cha jarahay hay, tumhare andaz-e-fikr meiN.

kya baat hay

yuuN to poori ghazal ki pasand aae , lekin ye she,r======

dil ki dunya udaas rehti hai
cheiR do phir se koi taar-e-ghazal :-)

waaah waah waah

kya taGhazzul hay is meiN. :-)

ek kamyab kalaam par hamari janib se bhar-puur daad qubool karo
Najma baji:

salaam arz hai

aik taveel arse baa'd aap se baraah-e-raast baat ho rahi hai, kaisi haiN aap , umeed hai khairiyat se hoNgi, aap ne is ghazal ko pasand farmaaya, goya khaaksaar ka 2 kilo khoon baRh gayaa :D :D

bharpoor daad ke liye maiN dil se aap ka mamnoon hooN

bahot bahot shukria

sadaa khush raheN

Amjad
aur haa

zara Thehro :roll:

daad k saath hazaroN---------- :P :grin: :grin: :grin: :grin: :grin: :wink: :grin: :grin: :grin:
shukria Najma baji, ye bhi qubool kar liya ham ne ;) :mrgreen: :twisted: lol :grin:

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Radeef ne to aap ko bohot roka, lekin aap na ruke. :lol:
bajaa farmaaya, sho'araa Hazraat akcer radeef-o-qavaafi per ghalba paa jaate haiN :D
Nice sher. Aap heN na paasdaar-e-ghazal. :wink: Qafiye ache use kiye heN aap ne, wese sheh.savaar se to ghuR sawari yaad aa gayi. :twisted:
navaazish , jee ham paasdaaraan-e-ghazal meiN shaamil hone ki koshish kar rahe haiN ;), vaise "sheh.savaar" ke ilaava maine substitue qaafiya "taajdaar" bhi soch rakha hai 8)
:wink: Ab in Ghazal sahiba se milna hi paRega jin k liye aap is qadar beqaraar rehte heN. Khuda Khair kare. :twisted:
:D :D :D :D

Yani bohot si sinf-e-nazuk meiN bus aik Ghazal sahiba hi aap ke jee ko bhaayi heN. :wink:
jee ;), kia kareN, nazm aur deegar asnaaf ki jaanib rukh nahiN kia abhi :twisted:
Acha sher hay, wese yahaN "baRh gaya aur bhi waqaar-e-ghazal"bhi ho sakta tha. :)
shukria :), aap ka mujavviza misra bhi pasand aaya, 'bataur-e-substitute' rakh leta hooN ;)
ahl-e-fun jaa chuke dabistaaN se
"ab kahaaN raunaq-e-bahaar-e-ghazal"

Aray aray kaun kehta hay jaa chuke? MaiN huN na. :D
:oops: oh haaN aap to yehiiN per haiN, actually maiN apni baat kar rahaa tha :lol: , magar maiN bhi yehiiN hooN, isi liye to "raunaq-e-bahaar-e-ghazal" vaapas aa rahi hai :P
dil ki dunya udaas rehti hai
cheiR do phir se koi taar-e-ghazal

Waah kya Khoob sher hay, zabardast. 8)
bahot bahot shukria, navaazish :)
phool pazzhmurdah , zard haiN patte
kitna veeraaN hai shaakhsaar-e-ghazal

aa rahe haiN khayaal meiN mazmooN
bas ke thoRa sa intizaar-e-ghazal

Nice.
"nice" ke liye bhi shukria :D
Ji ji bilkul jese k aap. :wink:
jee jee yaqeenan ;)
Amjad Sahib, arsa daraaz ke baad aap ki koi Ghazal paRhne ko mili, :) aur yaqeen kijiye k bohot pasand aayi, itni mushkil zameen ko aap ne itni sahoolat se nibhaya hay k herat ho rahi hay. Sabhi ashaar Khoob heN, DheroN daad qubool kijiye. :) [/b]
Anmol saHiba!!, aap ko ghazal pasand aayee , samajhiye hamaari meHnat vusool ho gayee. aap ki daad aur pazeeraai ke liye bhi maiN aap ka mamnoon hooN

sadaa khush raheN :)

khaaksaar-e-ghazal (ye qaafiya reh gayaa tha :D ;))

amjad
Mire ash'aar ae Iqbal kyuN pyaare na hoN mujhko
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zmufti wrote:ibne siddique sahib
buhat khoob
meri taraf se daad qabool kijye
regards
zmufti
zarqa behen:

ghazal ko pasand farmaane ke liye bahot bahot shukria

sadaa khush raho :)

amjad
Mire ash'aar ae Iqbal kyuN pyaare na hoN mujhko
mire TooTe hue dil ke ye dard.angez naale haiN
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Amjad sahib salaam
Bhai bahut umda sher nikaale haiN aapne ,bahut khoob. tarhi ghazal ho to aisi ho :)

kaun hai aaj paasdaar-e-ghazal?
uTh gaye saare taajdaar-e-ghazal
wah wah khoob matla hai magar qabil e aiteraaz bhi , vo islye ke abhi Abhi Sarwar A.Raz sahib aur Abdullah Nazir sahib jaise Tajdaar e ghazal tashreef rakhte haiN ,Allah unki umr mai barkat ata farmaye ,aise mai saare taajdaar ke bajaye ,
uth gaye kitne taajdaar e ghazal , meri naqis raye mai munasib tha.

kuch nahiN mujh ko ikhtiyaar-e-ghazal
phir bhi rehta hooN bay.qaraar-e-ghazal
wah wah

ghalib-o-meer jis meiN rehte hoN
kaise ujRe ga vo deyaar-e-ghazal
bahut khoob

sinf-e-naazuk bahot haiN urdu meiN
maiN to hooN bas umeed.vaar-e-ghazal :D
aray wah bhai aapne to hazb e haal sher kaha hai khas taur par urdusites par ye sher bilkul fit aata hai:)

jab milaa she'r meiN jigar ka lahoo
baRh gayaa aur aitibaar-e-ghazal
bahut umda , bilkul haqeeqat hai.

ahl-e-fun jaa chuke dabistaaN se
"ab kahaaN raunaq-e-bahaar-e-ghazal"
hmm ji

aik se baRh ke ik sukhanwar hai
par nahiN koi ghamgusaar-e-ghazal
acha khyal hai

dil ki dunya udaas rehti hai
cheiR do phir se koi taar-e-ghazal
khoob

phool pazzhmurdah , zard haiN patte
kitna veeraaN hai shaakhsaar-e-ghazal
theek hai

aa rahe haiN khayaal meiN mazmooN
bas ke thoRa sa intizaar-e-ghazal
acha hai

tahee daamaaN nahiN Nabeel urdu
ab bhi baaqi haiN jaaN.nicaar-e-ghazal
bilkul sahi hai,bahut acha

shukria huzoor isi tarah nawazte rahiye apni ghazloN se
Mahtab Qadr
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