• Jashn-e-Bahar

Posted: **Sun Jul 24, 2005 5:02 am**

Tasleemat
Hazreen-e-Mehfil

Aik aour taza ghazal Pesh-e-khidmat he

Steve Almas

Posted: **Sun Jul 24, 2005 6:12 pm**

almas ji aap ka nam too main pehlay kai jaga daikh chuka hoon lakin aap ki takhliqat paRhnay ka ittifaq nahi howa tha. ( mayri bad naseebi ) mashallah. aik doo jaga aap nay kuch ghalitiyan ki hain un par nazar Dal lijay ga.
1) panah koo yahan alaf kay sath bandhna ghalt hay. ya lafz yoon likha jay ga "pnah" na ka "panaah" agar mayra kaha wazih na hoo sakay too ya mayra nahi roman urdu ka qasoor hoo ga lol. mazirat kay main roman urdu main apna muddaa biyan karnay say qasir hoon. nazar sahib wazih kar dain gay. is kay ilawa dewar ka wazn ghalt hay.
majmooi toor par ghazal pasand aai. dad qabool farmain

Posted: **Tue Jul 26, 2005 1:47 am**

almas ji aap ka nam too main pehlay kai jaga daikh chuka hoon lakin aap ki takhliqat paRhnay ka ittifaq nahi howa tha. ( mayri bad naseebi ) . aik doo jaga aap nay kuch ghalitiyan ki hain un par nazar Dal lijay ga.
1) panah koo yahan alaf kay sath bandhna ghalt hay. ya lafz yoon likha jay ga "pnah" na ka "panaah" agar mayra kaha wazih na hoo sakay too ya mayra nahi roman urdu ka qasoor hoo ga . mazirat kay main roman urdu main apna muddaa biyan karnay say qasir hoon. nazar sahib wazih kar dain gay. is kay ilawa dewar ka wazn ghalt hay.
majmooi toor par ghazal pasand aai. dad qabool farmain

Mohtaram
Aadab
Zahe Naseeb. chaliye der aayed durust aayed. Aaapki nazar-e-karam to hooi. Ghalatiuon ki nishan dahi ke liye bohat shukriya. Waisey Panah ke yeh do version samajh nahein aaye.

Aapki khariyat ka mutmani
Steve Almas

Posted: **Thu Jul 28, 2005 8:39 am**

Almas SaaHib, aadaab

bahut Khoob janaab ! ham maahir to nahiN k tanqeedi pehloN pe nazar rakkheN ! albatta aap ki Ghazal bahut pasand aayee ! daad qabool kejeye!
shukriya

moKhliS : Zia Baloch

Posted: **Sun Jul 31, 2005 8:08 pm**

Almas SaaHib, aadaab

bahut Khoob janaab ! ham maahir to nahiN k tanqeedi pehloN pe nazar rakkheN ! albatta aap ki Ghazal bahut pasand aayee ! daad qabool kejeye!
shukriya

moKhliS : Zia Baloch

Mohtram Zia Saahib
Addab-o-Niaz

Zaroorat to nazr ki he woh tanqeedi ho ya phir pasandeedgi .....
Ghazal per aapki nazr-e-karam aour Pasand ka dili shukriya. jawab ki deri ke liye ma'zrat chahta hoon.

Steve Almas

Posted: **Sun Jul 31, 2005 8:23 pm**

Almas ji,

adaab arz hai.

waah kya ghazal kahi aapne paRhker bohat lutfandoz hui. khaas kar shair # 1, 2, 4, aur maqta tou lajawaab hai.

dhair saari daad qubool keejiye.

sara

Sara Ji
Aadab
Yeh to aapki nigah ki khoobsoorti he. Ghazal our uske ashaar ki pasand per shukriya.

Mukhlis
Steve Almas