guzarish 39 per meri sada see Ghazal..................
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guzarish 39 per meri sada see Ghazal..................
bahaa hai roz tahzeeb.o.adab ka yooN lahoo barsoN
keh booRhi saas se laRtee rahee ghar meN bahoo barsoN
wohee batlayega kya cheez hai aazaar.e tanhayee
keh tanhayee men jis ne ki ho khud se guftagoo barsoN
zamana hi nahiN woh shaKhs bhi hai bekahabar mujh se
chupa ke dil meN rakhkhi jis basher ki justjoo barsoN
Yaqeenan hogee yeh turbat shaheed.e qaum.o.millat ki
wafaaye qaum ki is qabr se aayee hai boo barsoN
arey toba wohee mehroom hai bearish ki rehmat se
chala jo dhup meN paidal sahee thee jis ne loo barsoN
namaz.e ishq ki azmat wohee samjhe wohee jaane
kiya ho Khoon.e dil se jis namazee ne wozoo' barsoN
zara see wah waahee ke siva kya too ne paya hai
suKhan ki mashq jo karta raha :Jawaid: tou barsoN
aapki aara ka muntazir,
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Re: guzarish 39 per meri sada see Ghazal..................
bahaa hai roz tahzeeb.o.adab ka yooN lahoo barsoN
keh booRhi saas se laRtee rahee ghar meN bahoo barsoN
wah wah bahut hi unique sher hai...!
wohee batlayega kya cheez hai aazaar.e tanhayee
keh tanhayee men jis ne ki ho khud se guftagoo barsoN
wahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!! is sher pe to dheron daad qubool karein..bahut bahut accha sher hai !!!!!
wah..!zamana hi nahiN woh shaKhs bhi hai bekahabar mujh se
chupa ke dil meN rakhkhi jis basher ki justjoo barsoN
khoob..!Yaqeenan hogee yeh turbat shaheed.e qaum.o.millat ki
wafaaye qaum ki is qabr se aayee hai boo barsoN
wah ek aur khoobsurat sher....arey toba wohee mehroom hai bearish ki rehmat se
chala jo dhup meN paidal sahee thee jis ne loo barsoN
bahut khoob..!namaz.e ishq ki azmat wohee samjhe wohee jaane
kiya ho Khoon.e dil se jis namazee ne wozoo' barsoN
han na wah waaahee paana bhi to kaamyaabi ki nishaani hai.... aap accha likhte hain to daad paate hain jiase ye ghazla likhi hai..bahut umda..! daad pesh hai!zara see wah waahee ke siva kya too ne paya hai
suKhan ki mashq jo karta raha :Jawaid: tou barsoN
Koi pooche humse hamaari haalat ka sabab
to ashk baha kar bhi baat adhoori reh jati hai
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Re: guzarish 39 per meri sada see Ghazal..................
Shummu wrote:bahaa hai roz tahzeeb.o.adab ka yooN lahoo barsoN
keh booRhi saas se laRtee rahee ghar meN bahoo barsoN
wah wah bahut hi unique sher hai...!
wohee batlayega kya cheez hai aazaar.e tanhayee
keh tanhayee men jis ne ki ho khud se guftagoo barsoN
wahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!! is sher pe to dheron daad qubool karein..bahut bahut accha sher hai !!!!!
wah..!zamana hi nahiN woh shaKhs bhi hai bekahabar mujh se
chupa ke dil meN rakhkhi jis basher ki justjoo barsoN
khoob..!Yaqeenan hogee yeh turbat shaheed.e qaum.o.millat ki
wafaaye qaum ki is qabr se aayee hai boo barsoN
wah ek aur khoobsurat sher....arey toba wohee mehroom hai bearish ki rehmat se
chala jo dhup meN paidal sahee thee jis ne loo barsoN
bahut khoob..!namaz.e ishq ki azmat wohee samjhe wohee jaane
kiya ho Khoon.e dil se jis namazee ne wozoo' barsoN
han na wah waaahee paana bhi to kaamyaabi ki nishaani hai.... aap accha likhte hain to daad paate hain jiase ye ghazla likhi hai..bahut umda..! daad pesh hai!zara see wah waahee ke siva kya too ne paya hai
suKhan ki mashq jo karta raha :Jawaid: tou barsoN
Azeezah Shummu doa
meri guzishta Ghazal per aap ne bohat muKhtasar (sirf 12 alfaz per mushtamil) tabsarah kiya tha. main ne is per e'traaz bhee kiya tha so is baar aap ne tafSeeli tabsarah kar ke us kotahee ka izalah kar diya. bohat bohat shukriya. aapki daad men khulooS shamil hai. behud mamnoon hooN aapka.
Is zameen meN aap ki ghazal ka muntazir hooN.
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[align=center]Biradaram Jawaid Badauni SaaHib tasleemaat!
mushae'rah meN aap kee shirkat sabhee dostooN ke liye masarrat aor fakhr kaa baae'c hai. aap kee tashreef aawaaree ke liye mamnoon-e-eHsaan hooN.
Ghazal ganjeenah-e-lafz^-o-mua'aanee hai. aap ne medaan-e-sukhan meN sakht zameen ke baa waSf kheyaal-o-fikr ke ghooReY sarpaT dhooraeY haiN. asha'aar mua'aanee aafaraeenee hamah geeree aor jiddat-e-kheyaal kaa murakka'h haiN. aesa kalam nah hee zeyaadah qeel-o-qaal kaa moHtaaj hotaa hai aor nah hee ta'reef-o-taoSeef kaa t^aalib balkeh baqal-e-rai'ees-ul-mutaGhazzaleen HaZ^rat-e-Jigar Muradabadi,
cachaee ho to dil seenooN se khichne lagte haiN Waaee'z^
Haqeeqat khud ko manwaatee hai manwaee naheeN jaatee!
zeyaadah a'rZ^ karne kaa meHel naheeN. faqat^ daad-o-taoSeef par khat^ tamaam kartaa hooN. aor ummeed kartaa hooN keh aap yooN hee mushae'rooN meN shirkat farmaa kar apnee caqah kalam se hameeN mutafeed farmaate raheeN ge. aor aesee yaadgaar aor shehkaar GhazaleeN e'naayat farmaeeN ge.
bahaa hai roz tahzeeb.o.adab ka yooN lahoo barsoN
keh booRhi saas se laRtee rahee ghar meN bahoo barsoN
Bohot khoob! Waah Waah Waah!
wohee batlayega kya cheez hai aazaar.e tanhayee
keh tanhayee men jis ne ki ho khud se guftagoo barsoN
Kiyaa kehne Waah Waah Waah lajawaab hai Waah Waah!
zamana hi nahiN woh shaKhs bhi hai bekahabar mujh se
chupa ke dil meN rakhkhi jis basher ki justjoo barsoN
Bohot khoob Waah Waah!
Yaqeenan hogee yeh turbat shaheed.e qaum.o.millat ki
wafaaye qaum ki is qabr se aayee hai boo barsoN
Waah Waah!
arey toba wohee mehroom hai bearish ki rehmat se
chala jo dhup meN paidal sahee thee jis ne loo barsoN
Waah Waah!
namaz.e ishq ki azmat wohee samjhe wohee jaane
kiya ho Khoon.e dil se jis namazee ne wozoo' barsoN
Bohot khoob Waah Waah kiyaa barjastagee hai. Waah!
zara see wah waahee ke siva kya too ne paya hai
suKhan ki mashq jo karta raha :Jawaid: tou barsoN
Bohot khoob Waah Waah! Kiyaa kehneY jawaid bhaee!
Wassalam
Muzaffar A Muzaffar[/align]
mushae'rah meN aap kee shirkat sabhee dostooN ke liye masarrat aor fakhr kaa baae'c hai. aap kee tashreef aawaaree ke liye mamnoon-e-eHsaan hooN.
Ghazal ganjeenah-e-lafz^-o-mua'aanee hai. aap ne medaan-e-sukhan meN sakht zameen ke baa waSf kheyaal-o-fikr ke ghooReY sarpaT dhooraeY haiN. asha'aar mua'aanee aafaraeenee hamah geeree aor jiddat-e-kheyaal kaa murakka'h haiN. aesa kalam nah hee zeyaadah qeel-o-qaal kaa moHtaaj hotaa hai aor nah hee ta'reef-o-taoSeef kaa t^aalib balkeh baqal-e-rai'ees-ul-mutaGhazzaleen HaZ^rat-e-Jigar Muradabadi,
cachaee ho to dil seenooN se khichne lagte haiN Waaee'z^
Haqeeqat khud ko manwaatee hai manwaee naheeN jaatee!
zeyaadah a'rZ^ karne kaa meHel naheeN. faqat^ daad-o-taoSeef par khat^ tamaam kartaa hooN. aor ummeed kartaa hooN keh aap yooN hee mushae'rooN meN shirkat farmaa kar apnee caqah kalam se hameeN mutafeed farmaate raheeN ge. aor aesee yaadgaar aor shehkaar GhazaleeN e'naayat farmaeeN ge.
bahaa hai roz tahzeeb.o.adab ka yooN lahoo barsoN
keh booRhi saas se laRtee rahee ghar meN bahoo barsoN
Bohot khoob! Waah Waah Waah!
wohee batlayega kya cheez hai aazaar.e tanhayee
keh tanhayee men jis ne ki ho khud se guftagoo barsoN
Kiyaa kehne Waah Waah Waah lajawaab hai Waah Waah!
zamana hi nahiN woh shaKhs bhi hai bekahabar mujh se
chupa ke dil meN rakhkhi jis basher ki justjoo barsoN
Bohot khoob Waah Waah!
Yaqeenan hogee yeh turbat shaheed.e qaum.o.millat ki
wafaaye qaum ki is qabr se aayee hai boo barsoN
Waah Waah!
arey toba wohee mehroom hai bearish ki rehmat se
chala jo dhup meN paidal sahee thee jis ne loo barsoN
Waah Waah!
namaz.e ishq ki azmat wohee samjhe wohee jaane
kiya ho Khoon.e dil se jis namazee ne wozoo' barsoN
Bohot khoob Waah Waah kiyaa barjastagee hai. Waah!
zara see wah waahee ke siva kya too ne paya hai
suKhan ki mashq jo karta raha :Jawaid: tou barsoN
Bohot khoob Waah Waah! Kiyaa kehneY jawaid bhaee!
Wassalam
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Muhtaram jawaid badauni sb
Assalam Alaikum
Aap kee ghazal paRhe or kayee bar parhee. tamaam asha'aar khoob kahe haiN aapne. yeh misrah jo jb. Muzaffar sb ne Hazrat DaaGh kaa keh
Haqeeqat khud ko manwaatee hai manwaee naheeN jaatee
aap kee ghazal par chust raayee main iskee tayeed karta hooN. waqt kee kamee ke sabab har har sha'er par alag alag daad no desaka majmua'ee t^or par daad qabool farmaye. of hamare liye seekhne kaa samaan muhayya karte raha keejye.
Allah khush rakhe
Ahqar
Khurshid H Naiyer
Assalam Alaikum
Aap kee ghazal paRhe or kayee bar parhee. tamaam asha'aar khoob kahe haiN aapne. yeh misrah jo jb. Muzaffar sb ne Hazrat DaaGh kaa keh
Haqeeqat khud ko manwaatee hai manwaee naheeN jaatee
aap kee ghazal par chust raayee main iskee tayeed karta hooN. waqt kee kamee ke sabab har har sha'er par alag alag daad no desaka majmua'ee t^or par daad qabool farmaye. of hamare liye seekhne kaa samaan muhayya karte raha keejye.
Allah khush rakhe
Ahqar
Khurshid H Naiyer
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Muzaffar Ahmad Muzaffar wrote:[align=center]Biradaram Jawaid Badauni SaaHib tasleemaat!
mushae'rah meN aap kee shirkat sabhee dostooN ke liye masarrat aor fakhr kaa baae'c hai. aap kee tashreef aawaaree ke liye mamnoon-e-eHsaan hooN.
Ghazal ganjeenah-e-lafz^-o-mua'aanee hai. aap ne medaan-e-sukhan meN sakht zameen ke baa waSf kheyaal-o-fikr ke ghooReY sarpaT dhooraeY haiN. asha'aar mua'aanee aafaraeenee hamah geeree aor jiddat-e-kheyaal kaa murakka'h haiN. aesa kalam nah hee zeyaadah qeel-o-qaal kaa moHtaaj hotaa hai aor nah hee ta'reef-o-taoSeef kaa t^aalib balkeh baqal-e-rai'ees-ul-mutaGhazzaleen HaZ^rat-e-Jigar Muradabadi,
cachaee ho to dil seenooN se khichne lagte haiN Waaee'z^
Haqeeqat khud ko manwaatee hai manwaee naheeN jaatee!
zeyaadah a'rZ^ karne kaa meHel naheeN. faqat^ daad-o-taoSeef par khat^ tamaam kartaa hooN. aor ummeed kartaa hooN keh aap yooN hee mushae'rooN meN shirkat farmaa kar apnee caqah kalam se hameeN mutafeed farmaate raheeN ge. aor aesee yaadgaar aor shehkaar GhazaleeN e'naayat farmaeeN ge.
bahaa hai roz tahzeeb.o.adab ka yooN lahoo barsoN
keh booRhi saas se laRtee rahee ghar meN bahoo barsoN
Bohot khoob! Waah Waah Waah!
wohee batlayega kya cheez hai aazaar.e tanhayee
keh tanhayee men jis ne ki ho khud se guftagoo barsoN
Kiyaa kehne Waah Waah Waah lajawaab hai Waah Waah!
zamana hi nahiN woh shaKhs bhi hai bekahabar mujh se
chupa ke dil meN rakhkhi jis basher ki justjoo barsoN
Bohot khoob Waah Waah!
Yaqeenan hogee yeh turbat shaheed.e qaum.o.millat ki
wafaaye qaum ki is qabr se aayee hai boo barsoN
Waah Waah!
arey toba wohee mehroom hai bearish ki rehmat se
chala jo dhup meN paidal sahee thee jis ne loo barsoN
Waah Waah!
namaz.e ishq ki azmat wohee samjhe wohee jaane
kiya ho Khoon.e dil se jis namazee ne wozoo' barsoN
Bohot khoob Waah Waah kiyaa barjastagee hai. Waah!
zara see wah waahee ke siva kya too ne paya hai
suKhan ki mashq jo karta raha :Jawaid: tou barsoN
Bohot khoob Waah Waah! Kiyaa kehneY jawaid bhaee!
Wassalam
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Khurshidul Hasan Naiyer wrote:Muhtaram jawaid badauni sb
Assalam Alaikum
Aap kee ghazal paRhe or kayee bar parhee. tamaam asha'aar khoob kahe haiN aapne. yeh misrah jo jb. Muzaffar sb ne Hazrat DaaGh kaa keh
Haqeeqat khud ko manwaatee hai manwaee naheeN jaatee
aap kee ghazal par chust raayee main iskee tayeed karta hooN. waqt kee kamee ke sabab har har sha'er par alag alag daad no desaka majmua'ee t^or par daad qabool farmaye. of hamare liye seekhne kaa samaan muhayya karte raha keejye.
Allah khush rakhe
Ahqar
Khurshid H Naiyer
moHibbee Khurshid Nayyar Saahab
Ghazal ki bharpoor pazeeraayee ke liye aap ka behud mamnoon hooN. raha aap ke seekhne ka sawal tou Bhaii maiN tou khud apne aap ko mubtadee ya Tifl-e maktab hi taSavvoor karta hooN mujh se koii kya seekhne laga. ek baar phir aap ka shukriya. aap ke kalmaat se meri himmat afzaaii huwee. ummid hai rabt qaaiim rakhkhenge.
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