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ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
Posted: Mon Mar 21, 2005 11:48 am
by fatimah
aslaam_u_alikam
ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
khaamosh hun magar meraa dil bekaraar hey
aankhien yeh raasta teraa dekhein hain baar baar
aur ab bhi bepanaah mujhey tujh sey pyaar hey
her dam key jhootey wadon sey yeh dil figaar hey
is dil ko merey tujh sey shikayat hazaar hey
ser kham kiyaa hai tere sabhi faisloN pe aaj
jaane kyuN ajnabi tiree ye rahguzaar hai
mosam key saath saath hi rishtey badal gaye
aane lagee vafaaoN mein kaisi daraar hai
tanhaa hi tey karen ge safar zindagii ka ab
veeraan raastoN mein ye dil sogvaar hai
aati haiN ye sadaaiN mire dil se baar baar
ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
Re: ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
Posted: Mon Mar 21, 2005 5:39 pm
by khurram_shaikh
fatimah wrote:aslaam_u_alikam
ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
khaamosh hun magar meraa dil bekaraar hey
aankhien yeh raasta teraa dekhein hain baar baar
aur ab bhi bepanaah mujhey tujh sey pyaar hey
her dam key jhootey wadon sey yeh dil figaar hey
is dil ko merey tujh sey shikayat hazaar hey
ser kham kiyaa hai tere sabhi faisloN pe aaj
jaane kyuN ajnabi tiree ye rahguzaar hai
mosam key saath saath hi rishtey badal gaye
aane lagee vafaaoN mein kaisi daraar hai
tanhaa hi tey karen ge safar zindagii ka ab
veeraan raastoN mein ye dil sogvaar hai
aati haiN ye sadaaiN mire dil se baar baar
ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
W salam,
woooooooow kyaa baat hai bahooot hi zabardast aur ghazeb ki kavish likhi tumnien chhoooti waise to poori ghazal hi zabardast hai lekin mujhe chand ashaar behud pasand aaye dili daad qabool karo khush raho
aankhien yeh raasta teraa dekhein hain baar baar
aur ab bhi bepanaah mujhey tujh sey pyaar hey
kya kehnien
ser kham kiyaa hai tere sabhi faisloN pe aaj
jaane kyuN ajnabi tiree ye rahguzaar hai
aur yeh misraa to humien dil mien chubh gayaa teer ki tareh
Re: ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
Posted: Mon Mar 21, 2005 8:15 pm
by Safiya
fatimah wrote:aslaam_u_alikam
ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
khaamosh hun magar meraa dil bekaraar hey
aankhien yeh raasta teraa dekhein hain baar baar
aur ab bhi bepanaah mujhey tujh sey pyaar hey
her dam key jhootey wadon sey yeh dil figaar hey
is dil ko merey tujh sey shikayat hazaar hey
ser kham kiyaa hai tere sabhi faisloN pe aaj
jaane kyuN ajnabi tiree ye rahguzaar hai
mosam key saath saath hi rishtey badal gaye
aane lagee vafaaoN mein kaisi daraar hai
tanhaa hi tey karen ge safar zindagii ka ab
veeraan raastoN mein ye dil sogvaar hai
aati haiN ye sadaaiN mire dil se baar baar
ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
Salaam Fatima
Ye aapki doosri ghazal paDi haiy, aur kehna paDta haiy, waah bohot khoob likhtin hain aap, ghazal me kamaal ki rawaangi haiy. saare hi ashaar bohot pasand aaye, yun lagha jeyse aap humare dil ki baat kar rahin hain. Allah kare zor-e-kalaam aur ziyada.
Safiya
Posted: Tue Mar 22, 2005 4:31 am
by Ibn-e-siddique
fatima saHiba:
salaam arz hai
aap ki ye ghazal pehle bhi paRhi aur bahot pasand aayee. aap ke kalaam mein roz.ba.roz nikhaar aata jaa rahaa hai.
is umda kawish per daad aur mubarak.baad qubool kijiye
amjad
Re: ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
Posted: Wed Mar 23, 2005 12:35 am
by Hashmat Usmani
salaam fatima,
kaisi ahiN? aapkii Gahzal nazar guzaar huii aur baa'is-e-lutf huii. bahot achchhi Ghazal kahii hai aapne. ash'aar ke mazaameen qaabil-e-sataaish haiN. zabaan kii bandish chust hai magar is par thoRii bahot mazeed behtarii kii jaa saktii hai. ab tak kii aapkii GhazloN meN mujhe yeh Ghazal sab se ziyaada achchhi lagii. keep it UP Fatima.
Allah kare zor e qalam aur ziyaada.
mujhe yeh ash'aar bahot pasand aaye.
ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
khaamosh hun magar meraa dil bekaraar hey
her dam key jhootey wadon sey yeh dil figaar hey
is dil ko merey tujh sey shikayat hazaar hey
mosam key saath saath hi rishtey badal gaye
aane lagee vafaaoN mein kaisi daraar hai
tanhaa hi tey karen ge safar zindagii ka ab
veeraan raastoN mein ye dil sogvaar hai
aati haiN ye sadaaiN mire dil se baar baar
ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
Re: ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
Posted: Thu Mar 24, 2005 4:22 pm
by fatimah
khurram_shaikh wrote:fatimah wrote:aslaam_u_alikam
ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
khaamosh hun magar meraa dil bekaraar hey
aankhien yeh raasta teraa dekhein hain baar baar
aur ab bhi bepanaah mujhey tujh sey pyaar hey
her dam key jhootey wadon sey yeh dil figaar hey
is dil ko merey tujh sey shikayat hazaar hey
ser kham kiyaa hai tere sabhi faisloN pe aaj
jaane kyuN ajnabi tiree ye rahguzaar hai
mosam key saath saath hi rishtey badal gaye
aane lagee vafaaoN mein kaisi daraar hai
tanhaa hi tey karen ge safar zindagii ka ab
veeraan raastoN mein ye dil sogvaar hai
aati haiN ye sadaaiN mire dil se baar baar
ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
W salam,
woooooooow kyaa baat hai bahooot hi zabardast aur ghazeb ki kavish likhi tumnien chhoooti waise to poori ghazal hi zabardast hai lekin mujhe chand ashaar behud pasand aaye dili daad qabool karo khush raho
aankhien yeh raasta teraa dekhein hain baar baar
aur ab bhi bepanaah mujhey tujh sey pyaar hey
kya kehnien
ser kham kiyaa hai tere sabhi faisloN pe aaj
jaane kyuN ajnabi tiree ye rahguzaar hai
aur yeh misraa to humien dil mien chubh gayaa teer ki tareh
aslaam_u_alikam
big b bohat bohat shukriya 
Aapki ghazal bahut pasand aayi
Posted: Thu Mar 24, 2005 6:39 pm
by Abdullah Nazir
MuHtaramah
Fatima Saahibah
Purkhuloos Tasleemaat,
Aapki ghazal pasand aayi jis per apni tafseeli aaraa pesh karrahaa hooN jin se aapka muttafiq hounaa zaroori nahiN.
ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
khaamosh hun magar meraa dil bekaraar hey
Bahut achcha maTlaA hei
aankhien yeh raasta teraa dekhein hain baar baar
aur ab bhi bepanaah mujhey tujh sey pyaar hey
Pahle misreA meiN lafz "dekheN" "haiN" ke saath ghair munaasib maAloom hourahaa hei. Is ko yooN kiyaa jaasaktaa hei:
aankheiN bichii houi heiN tire intizaar meiN
her dam key jhootey wadon sey yeh dil figaar hey
is dil ko merey tujh sey shikayat hazaar hey
doosre misreA meiN lafz "dil" ko dobaarah isteAmaal karne se bachne ke liye yooN kahaa jaasaktaa hei:
jisko mudaam tujh se shikaayat hazaar hei
ser kham kiyaa hai tere sabhi faisloN pe aaj
jaane kyuN ajnabi tiree ye rahguzaar hai
Doosra misraA beHr se khaarij hei warnah lafz kiyooN ke do harfaoN (ye aur wao) ko girana paRrahaa hei. Isko yooN kiyaa jaasaktaa hei:
lekin Ajeeb sii tiri yeh rehguzaar hei
mosam key saath saath hi rishtey badal gaye
aane lagee vafaaoN mein kaisi daraar hai
Doosre misreA meiN lafz "daraaR" qaafiye ke Taur per isteAmal karnaa ghalaT hei. Is misreA ko yooN kiyaa jaasaktaa hei:
kiyooN be ta'Alluqi kaa dilaoN meiN ghubaar hei
tanhaa hi tey karen ge safar zindagii ka ab
veeraan raastoN mein ye dil sogvaar hai
Yeh sheAr theek hei.
aati haiN ye sadaaiN mire dil se baar baar
ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
yeh sheAr bhii achcha hei.
Chauthaa sheAr jo aek husn-e-maTlaA hei usko tarteeb ke liHaaz se doosre number per hounaa chaahiye.
Aakhir meiN, aapki apni is achchi kaavish per meri daad aur mubaarakbaad qubool keejiye.
Aapka Mukhlis,
Nazir.
Re: ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
Posted: Sun Mar 27, 2005 12:47 pm
by fatimah
Safiya wrote:fatimah wrote:aslaam_u_alikam
ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
khaamosh hun magar meraa dil bekaraar hey
aankhien yeh raasta teraa dekhein hain baar baar
aur ab bhi bepanaah mujhey tujh sey pyaar hey
her dam key jhootey wadon sey yeh dil figaar hey
is dil ko merey tujh sey shikayat hazaar hey
ser kham kiyaa hai tere sabhi faisloN pe aaj
jaane kyuN ajnabi tiree ye rahguzaar hai
mosam key saath saath hi rishtey badal gaye
aane lagee vafaaoN mein kaisi daraar hai
tanhaa hi tey karen ge safar zindagii ka ab
veeraan raastoN mein ye dil sogvaar hai
aati haiN ye sadaaiN mire dil se baar baar
ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
Salaam Fatima
Ye aapki doosri ghazal paDi haiy, aur kehna paDta haiy, waah bohot khoob likhtin hain aap, ghazal me kamaal ki rawaangi haiy. saare hi ashaar bohot pasand aaye, yun lagha jeyse aap humare dil ki baat kar rahin hain. Allah kare zor-e-kalaam aur ziyada.
Safiya
aslaam_u_alikam
safiya ji gazal ko pasand kerney ka behad shukriya
Posted: Fri Apr 08, 2005 10:28 am
by fatimah
Ibn-e-siddique wrote:fatima saHiba:
salaam arz hai
aap ki ye ghazal pehle bhi paRhi aur bahot pasand aayee. aap ke kalaam mein roz.ba.roz nikhaar aata jaa rahaa hai.
is umda kawish per daad aur mubarak.baad qubool kijiye
amjad
aslaam_u_alikam
bohat shukriya amjad sahib 
Posted: Sat Apr 09, 2005 2:48 am
by irfan abid
fatima sahiba, aadaab!
aap kii Ghazal pasand aayii. daad qubuul farmaaiye!
niyaazmand,
Irfan :Abid:
Re: ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
Posted: Fri Apr 15, 2005 5:13 pm
by fatimah
Hashmat Usmani wrote:salaam fatima,
kaisi ahiN? aapkii Gahzal nazar guzaar huii aur baa'is-e-lutf huii. bahot achchhi Ghazal kahii hai aapne. ash'aar ke mazaameen qaabil-e-sataaish haiN. zabaan kii bandish chust hai magar is par thoRii bahot mazeed behtarii kii jaa saktii hai. ab tak kii aapkii GhazloN meN mujhe yeh Ghazal sab se ziyaada achchhi lagii. keep it UP Fatima.
Allah kare zor e qalam aur ziyaada.
mujhe yeh ash'aar bahot pasand aaye.
ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
khaamosh hun magar meraa dil bekaraar hey
her dam key jhootey wadon sey yeh dil figaar hey
is dil ko merey tujh sey shikayat hazaar hey
mosam key saath saath hi rishtey badal gaye
aane lagee vafaaoN mein kaisi daraar hai
tanhaa hi tey karen ge safar zindagii ka ab
veeraan raastoN mein ye dil sogvaar hai
aati haiN ye sadaaiN mire dil se baar baar
ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
aslaam_u_alikam
hashmet sahib is pazeraaii ka shukriya
Re: ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
Posted: Fri Apr 15, 2005 6:17 pm
by Mahtab Qadr
fatimah wrote:aslaam_u_alikam
ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
khaamosh hun magar meraa dil bekaraar hey
aankhien yeh raasta teraa dekhein hain baar baar
aur ab bhi bepanaah mujhey tujh sey pyaar hey
her dam key jhootey wadon sey yeh dil figaar hey
is dil ko merey tujh sey shikayat hazaar hey
ser kham kiyaa hai tere sabhi faisloN pe aaj
jaane kyuN ajnabi tiree ye rahguzaar hai
mosam key saath saath hi rishtey badal gaye
aane lagee vafaaoN mein kaisi daraar hai
tanhaa hi tey karen ge safar zindagii ka ab
veeraan raastoN mein ye dil sogvaar hai
aati haiN ye sadaaiN mire dil se baar baar
ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
Fatima sahiba
aapki ghazal parhi , aapke khyalaat pasand aaye. ghazal ke baaz ashaar qabil e islaah haiN, webmaster ki raye ne aapko kafi rahnumai di hogi. umeed ke aap aaati aur apnaa kalaam pesh karti raheiNgi
shukria
Mahtab Qadr
Re: Aapki ghazal bahut pasand aayi
Posted: Sat Apr 23, 2005 5:32 pm
by fatimah
WEBMASTER wrote:
MuHtaramah
Fatima Saahibah
Purkhuloos Tasleemaat,
Aapki ghazal pasand aayi jis per apni tafseeli aaraa pesh karrahaa hooN jin se aapka muttafiq hounaa zaroori nahiN.
ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
khaamosh hun magar meraa dil bekaraar hey
Bahut achcha maTlaA hei
aankhien yeh raasta teraa dekhein hain baar baar
aur ab bhi bepanaah mujhey tujh sey pyaar hey
Pahle misreA meiN lafz "dekheN" "haiN" ke saath ghair munaasib maAloom hourahaa hei. Is ko yooN kiyaa jaasaktaa hei:
aankheiN bichii houi heiN tire intizaar meiN
her dam key jhootey wadon sey yeh dil figaar hey
is dil ko merey tujh sey shikayat hazaar hey
doosre misreA meiN lafz "dil" ko dobaarah isteAmaal karne se bachne ke liye yooN kahaa jaasaktaa hei:
jisko mudaam tujh se shikaayat hazaar hei
ser kham kiyaa hai tere sabhi faisloN pe aaj
jaane kyuN ajnabi tiree ye rahguzaar hai
Doosra misraA beHr se khaarij hei warnah lafz kiyooN ke do harfaoN (ye aur wao) ko girana paRrahaa hei. Isko yooN kiyaa jaasaktaa hei:
lekin Ajeeb sii tiri yeh rehguzaar hei
mosam key saath saath hi rishtey badal gaye
aane lagee vafaaoN mein kaisi daraar hai
Doosre misreA meiN lafz "daraaR" qaafiye ke Taur per isteAmal karnaa ghalaT hei. Is misreA ko yooN kiyaa jaasaktaa hei:
kiyooN be ta'Alluqi kaa dilaoN meiN ghubaar hei
tanhaa hi tey karen ge safar zindagii ka ab
veeraan raastoN mein ye dil sogvaar hai
Yeh sheAr theek hei.
aati haiN ye sadaaiN mire dil se baar baar
ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
yeh sheAr bhii achcha hei.
Chauthaa sheAr jo aek husn-e-maTlaA hei usko tarteeb ke liHaaz se doosre number per hounaa chaahiye.
Aakhir meiN, aapki apni is achchi kaavish per meri daad aur mubaarakbaad qubool keejiye.
Aapka Mukhlis,
Nazir.
aslaam_u_alikam
sab sey pehley to der sey javaab deney per mazrat khuvaaN hun.
aap ki in tajaveez key liya main aap ki behad mumnoon hun.
isii terha aapnii raaye sey navaztey rahiye ga.
behad shukriya.
Re: ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
Posted: Sat Apr 23, 2005 8:13 pm
by najma
fatimah wrote:aslaam_u_alikam
ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
khaamosh hun magar meraa dil bekaraar hey
aankhien yeh raasta teraa dekhein hain baar baar
aur ab bhi bepanaah mujhey tujh sey pyaar hey
her dam key jhootey wadon sey yeh dil figaar hey
is dil ko merey tujh sey shikayat hazaar hey
ser kham kiyaa hai tere sabhi faisloN pe aaj
jaane kyuN ajnabi tiree ye rahguzaar hai
mosam key saath saath hi rishtey badal gaye
aane lagee vafaaoN mein kaisi daraar hai
tanhaa hi tey karen ge safar zindagii ka ab
veeraan raastoN mein ye dil sogvaar hai
aati haiN ye sadaaiN mire dil se baar baar
ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
bohat khoob fatima
daad hazir hay
Posted: Fri May 06, 2005 11:18 am
by fatimah
sara_j wrote:Fatima,
salam.
aapki ghazal dekhi aur bohat apsand aayi ache ashaar likhe hain, aur Ustad ji ke mashware ke saath agar ise paRho tou aur bhi khoobsurat lag rahi hai.
ise dobara pesh kerdein.
bohat umdah ghazal per mubarakbaad qubool keejiye.
sara
aslaam_u_alikam
shukriya sara jii