Star Mind wrote:Fatima SaaHiba, aadaab

maashaa Allah bohut dilkash Ghazal hai ! mujhe Khaas tor pe ye shea'r
"qissa-e-dard.........................

bohut pasand aayaa ! DheroN daad qabool kejeye ! shukriya


Zia Baloch

aslaam_u_alikam

shukriya Zia saahib

Dear fatima, adaab, aek arse baad apki tehreer se masroor houne ka mauqa mila. bohat hi umda kavish hai....ghazal tamaam pasand aayi , khaas ye ashaar kuch ziyada pasand aaye: yaad bhi unki hamsafar na hui aur duaa koi baa acar na houi qissa-e-dard jaante the sab be.khabar ! bas tujhe khabar na ...

aslaam_u_alikam yaad bhi unki hamsafar na hui aur duaa koi baa acar na houi esey uljhey terey jhameiloN main zindagi tujh ko bhi khabar na huii qissa-e-dard jaante the sab be.khabar ! bas tujhe khabar na houi umr bhar uljhanon ko suljhaaya do ghari chein sey basar nah houi khavaahishein to hazaar ...

aslaam_u_alikam her taraf saji hey terii yaad lekin khali pan yeh gher ka bherti hi nahin terey saath apnii kis terha nibhey gii terey saath pani bantii hi nahin bohat khub. MASHALLAH bohat payaarii gazal kahi hey naheed ji aap ney yeh do ashaar to behad pasand aaye. daad qubool kijiye. shukriya

aslaam_u_alikam waqt ko kis ne roka hai waqt ki besada aahat lamha lamha nikharta karb barhti barthi aziyyat hai kia khuda ki ye marzi hai ? kia khuda ki mashiyyat hai? zindagi ki sabhi saansen jakri jaati hain roz-o-shab her naye moR per mujh ko aik anjaan sa chehra aik gumnaam si hasti ghair ...

Assalaam o alekum, waaaaaah waaaah bahooot khooob bahooot hi umdeh kooshish hai chhoooooti waise to saari ghazal hi behtreen hai lekin mujhe yeh ashar behud pasand aaye humse share kernien kaa behud shukriya khush raho sada us ne vaa'da vafaa kia aakhir mujh se milne voh aa gayaa aakhir kis liye ...

Fatima saHiba salaam arz hai aik muddat ke baa'd aap ki jaanib se kuch sun'ne ka mauqa milaa :) mashallah ache ash'aar kahe haiN aap ne, aur aap ke kalaam meiN nikhaar bhi aata jaa raha hai, jo ash'aar mujhe zyaada pasand aaye, voh darj-e-zail haiN : us ne vaa'da vafaa kia aakhir mujh se milne voh ...

aslaam_u_alikam kaafii time key ba`ad apni aik gazal key saath haazir. umeed kertii hun aap san apni araa sey nawaazein gey. shukriya us ne vaa'da vafaa kia aakhir mujh se milne voh aa gayaa aakhir kis liye tum udaas baithe ho kuch bataao k kia huaa aakhir? maang baithe tumhen khudaa se ham Haal-e ...

aslaam_u_alikam aaj kaafii dinoN ba`ad is bazm main aanaa huaa. aatey hi nazar mohtaram abdullah nazir sahib ki is gazal per perhii. perh ker dil khush ho gayaa. wesey to seniors ko aur khaas tor per ustaadoN key kisii bhi kaam ko serhaaney key liya alfaaz nahin miltey her lafz chootaa lagtaa hey ...

sara_j wrote:Fatima,

salam.

aapki ghazal dekhi aur bohat apsand aayi ache ashaar likhe hain, aur Ustad ji ke mashware ke saath agar ise paRho tou aur bhi khoobsurat lag rahi hai.

ise dobara pesh kerdein.

bohat umdah ghazal per mubarakbaad qubool keejiye.

sara

aslaam_u_alikam

shukriya sara jii

MuHtaramah Fatima Saahibah Purkhuloos Tasleemaat, Aapki ghazal pasand aayi jis per apni tafseeli aaraa pesh karrahaa hooN jin se aapka muttafiq hounaa zaroori nahiN. ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey khaamosh hun magar meraa dil bekaraar hey Bahut achcha maTlaA hei aankhien yeh raasta teraa ...

salaam fatima, kaisi ahiN? aapkii Gahzal nazar guzaar huii aur baa'is-e-lutf huii. bahot achchhi Ghazal kahii hai aapne. ash'aar ke mazaameen qaabil-e-sataaish haiN. zabaan kii bandish chust hai magar is par thoRii bahot mazeed behtarii kii jaa saktii hai. ab tak kii aapkii GhazloN meN mujhe yeh ...

Ibn-e-siddique wrote:fatima saHiba:

salaam arz hai

aap ki ye ghazal pehle bhi paRhi aur bahot pasand aayee. aap ke kalaam mein roz.ba.roz nikhaar aata jaa rahaa hai.

is umda kawish per daad aur mubarak.baad qubool kijiye

amjad

aslaam_u_alikam

bohat shukriya amjad sahib