almas ji aap ka nam too main pehlay kai jaga daikh chuka hoon lakin aap ki takhliqat paRhnay ka ittifaq nahi howa tha. ( mayri bad naseebi ) mashallah. aik doo jaga aap nay kuch ghalitiyan ki hain un par nazar Dal lijay ga.
1) panah koo yahan alaf kay sath bandhna ghalt hay. ya lafz yoon likha jay ga "pnah" na ka "panaah" agar mayra kaha wazih na hoo sakay too ya mayra nahi roman urdu ka qasoor hoo ga lol. mazirat kay main roman urdu main apna muddaa biyan karnay say qasir hoon. nazar sahib wazih kar dain gay. is kay ilawa dewar ka wazn ghalt hay.
majmooi toor par ghazal pasand aai. dad qabool farmain
almas ji aap ka nam too main pehlay kai jaga daikh chuka hoon lakin aap ki takhliqat paRhnay ka ittifaq nahi howa tha. ( mayri bad naseebi ) . aik doo jaga aap nay kuch ghalitiyan ki hain un par nazar Dal lijay ga.
1) panah koo yahan alaf kay sath bandhna ghalt hay. ya lafz yoon likha jay ga "pnah" na ka "panaah" agar mayra kaha wazih na hoo sakay too ya mayra nahi roman urdu ka qasoor hoo ga . mazirat kay main roman urdu main apna muddaa biyan karnay say qasir hoon. nazar sahib wazih kar dain gay. is kay ilawa dewar ka wazn ghalt hay.
majmooi toor par ghazal pasand aai. dad qabool farmain
Mohtaram
Aadab
Zahe Naseeb. chaliye der aayed durust aayed. Aaapki nazar-e-karam to hooi. Ghalatiuon ki nishan dahi ke liye bohat shukriya. Waisey Panah ke yeh do version samajh nahein aaye.
bahut Khoob janaab ! ham maahir to nahiN k tanqeedi pehloN pe nazar rakkheN ! albatta aap ki Ghazal bahut pasand aayee ! daad qabool kejeye!
shukriya
moKhliS : Zia Baloch
Mohtram Zia Saahib
Addab-o-Niaz
Zaroorat to nazr ki he woh tanqeedi ho ya phir pasandeedgi .....
Ghazal per aapki nazr-e-karam aour Pasand ka dili shukriya. jawab ki deri ke liye ma'zrat chahta hoon.