Meri Hazal...aapki muskurahaToN ki nazr....................
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Meri Hazal...aapki muskurahaToN ki nazr....................
Dosto! Salam
MaiN Hazal pahle bahut kahta tha ab kum kar dee hai.
Yeh Hazal maiN ne Janab At.har Jafiri ki zameenmeN kahe hai.Kisi ki zameen meN sher kahna Urdu meN bath adab ki baat mani jati hai aur dushwaar kaam bhi hai. Iss ihteyat ke Pesh.e nazar keh mera koii sher mausoof se Takra nah jaye, maiN ne qafiya badal diya hai. Hazal ujlat meN kahee hai (taqreeban 10 minutes meN).
Ummid hai apnee aara se nawazeNge.
Mukhlis,
Jawaid Badauni
HAZAL
Ishq ne dee hai Khooshee yaas ki aisee taisee
Jalne wale tiri bakwaas ki aisee taisee
Nisf ghar wali samajhta hooN harik Saali ko
Mere SaloN ki miree Saas ki aisee taisee
Ishq ka mood hai maiN kaam peh jaaooNga nah aaj
Mere office kee mire Boss kee aisee taisee
Bachcha Teacher se yeh bola mujhe bus ishq paRhaaoo
Aaj Bhoogol ki Itihaas ki aisee taisee
Unse milna mira hota hai adoo ko mahsoos
Mire dushman tire ehsaas ki aisee taisee
Haath meN jaam uThate hi yeh bola maiKhuwaar
Ab gham.o.bebasee.o.yaas ki aisee taisee
Jinpe humko tha bharosa woh nah aaye “Jawaid”
Kardee ik shaKhs ke vishwaas ki aisee taisee
MaiN Hazal pahle bahut kahta tha ab kum kar dee hai.
Yeh Hazal maiN ne Janab At.har Jafiri ki zameenmeN kahe hai.Kisi ki zameen meN sher kahna Urdu meN bath adab ki baat mani jati hai aur dushwaar kaam bhi hai. Iss ihteyat ke Pesh.e nazar keh mera koii sher mausoof se Takra nah jaye, maiN ne qafiya badal diya hai. Hazal ujlat meN kahee hai (taqreeban 10 minutes meN).
Ummid hai apnee aara se nawazeNge.
Mukhlis,
Jawaid Badauni
HAZAL
Ishq ne dee hai Khooshee yaas ki aisee taisee
Jalne wale tiri bakwaas ki aisee taisee
Nisf ghar wali samajhta hooN harik Saali ko
Mere SaloN ki miree Saas ki aisee taisee
Ishq ka mood hai maiN kaam peh jaaooNga nah aaj
Mere office kee mire Boss kee aisee taisee
Bachcha Teacher se yeh bola mujhe bus ishq paRhaaoo
Aaj Bhoogol ki Itihaas ki aisee taisee
Unse milna mira hota hai adoo ko mahsoos
Mire dushman tire ehsaas ki aisee taisee
Haath meN jaam uThate hi yeh bola maiKhuwaar
Ab gham.o.bebasee.o.yaas ki aisee taisee
Jinpe humko tha bharosa woh nah aaye “Jawaid”
Kardee ik shaKhs ke vishwaas ki aisee taisee
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Bahut khoob waah waah
MuHtarami o Azeezi
Jawaid Badayuni Saahib,
Purkhuloos Tasleemaat,
Aapki mandarja-e-zeil hazal paRhkar bahut hii luTf aayaa:
HAZAL
Ishq ne dee hai Khooshee yaas ki aisee taisee
Jalne wale tiri bakwaas ki aisee taisee
Nisf ghar wali samajhta hooN harik Saali ko
Mere SaloN ki miree Saas ki aisee taisee
Ishq ka mood hai maiN kaam peh jaaooNga nah aaj
Mere office kee mire Boss kee aisee taisee
Bachcha Teacher se yeh bola mujhe bus ishq paRhaaoo
Aaj Bhoogol ki Itihaas ki aisee taisee
Unse milna mira hota hai adoo ko mahsoos
Mire dushman tire ehsaas ki aisee taisee
Haath meN jaam uThate hi yeh bola maiKhuwaar
Ab gham.o.bebasee.o.yaas ki aisee taisee
Jinpe humko tha bahrosa woh nah aaye “Jawaid”
Kardee ik shaKhs ke vishwaas ki aisee taisee
Yeh tou maAloom thaa ke aap bahut achche ghazalgo shayer heiN aur nazmeN bhii kehte heiN. Aaj tou aap ne kamaal kar dikhaayaa. Is qadar behtareen hazal kahii hei ke meri raaye meiN paRhne waale hanse baghair nahiN reh sakte.
Is behtareen takhleeq per meri dili daad aur mubaarakbaad qubool farmaayiye.
Aapka Mukhlis,
Nazir.
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Re: Meri Hazal...aapki muskurahaToN ki nazr.................
Bahut khoob Jawaid sahib , ujlat mai ye aalam hai to etmenaan se kia kuch kahte hoNge aap, MashaAllah. saari hazal qabil e daad o tahseen hai, khas taur par radeef bahut lutf deraha hai aur qafioN ke khoobsurat aur barjasta istemaal ne hazal ko aur jaandaar banadia hai.Mubarak ho.
Mahtab Qadr
Mahtab Qadr
jawaid badauni wrote:Dosto! Salam
MaiN Hazal pahle bahut kahta tha ab kum kar dee hai.
Yeh Hazal maiN ne Janab At.har Jafiri ki zameenmeN kahe hai.Kisi ki zameen meN sher kahna Urdu meN bath adab ki baat mani jati hai aur dushwaar kaam bhi hai. Iss ihteyat ke Pesh.e nazar keh mera koii sher mausoof se Takra nah jaye, maiN ne qafiya badal diya hai. Hazal ujlat meN kahee hai (taqreeban 10 minutes meN).
Ummid hai apnee aara se nawazeNge.
Mukhlis,
Jawaid Badauni
HAZAL
Ishq ne dee hai Khooshee yaas ki aisee taisee
Jalne wale tiri bakwaas ki aisee taisee
Nisf ghar wali samajhta hooN harik Saali ko
Mere SaloN ki miree Saas ki aisee taisee
Ishq ka mood hai maiN kaam peh jaaooNga nah aaj
Mere office kee mire Boss kee aisee taisee
Bachcha Teacher se yeh bola mujhe bus ishq paRhaaoo
Aaj Bhoogol ki Itihaas ki aisee taisee
Unse milna mira hota hai adoo ko mahsoos
Mire dushman tire ehsaas ki aisee taisee
Haath meN jaam uThate hi yeh bola maiKhuwaar
Ab gham.o.bebasee.o.yaas ki aisee taisee
Jinpe humko tha bharosa woh nah aaye “Jawaid”
Kardee ik shaKhs ke vishwaas ki aisee taisee
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Re: Meri Hazal...aapki muskurahaToN ki nazr.................
Azeezi Mahtab Qadr Sahab,Mahtab Qadr wrote:Bahut khoob Jawaid sahib , ujlat mai ye aalam hai to etmenaan se kia kuch kahte hoNge aap, MashaAllah. saari hazal qabil e daad o tahseen hai, khas taur par radeef bahut lutf deraha hai aur qafioN ke khoobsurat aur barjasta istemaal ne hazal ko aur jaandaar banadia hai.Mubarak ho.
Mahtab Qadr
jawaid badauni wrote:Dosto! Salam
MaiN Hazal pahle bahut kahta tha ab kum kar dee hai.
Yeh Hazal maiN ne Janab At.har Jafiri ki zameenmeN kahe hai.Kisi ki zameen meN sher kahna Urdu meN bath adab ki baat mani jati hai aur dushwaar kaam bhi hai. Iss ihteyat ke Pesh.e nazar keh mera koii sher mausoof se Takra nah jaye, maiN ne qafiya badal diya hai. Hazal ujlat meN kahee hai (taqreeban 10 minutes meN).
Ummid hai apnee aara se nawazeNge.
Mukhlis,
Jawaid Badauni
HAZAL
Ishq ne dee hai Khooshee yaas ki aisee taisee
Jalne wale tiri bakwaas ki aisee taisee
Nisf ghar wali samajhta hooN harik Saali ko
Mere SaloN ki miree Saas ki aisee taisee
Ishq ka mood hai maiN kaam peh jaaooNga nah aaj
Mere office kee mire Boss kee aisee taisee
Bachcha Teacher se yeh bola mujhe bus ishq paRhaaoo
Aaj Bhoogol ki Itihaas ki aisee taisee
Unse milna mira hota hai adoo ko mahsoos
Mire dushman tire ehsaas ki aisee taisee
Haath meN jaam uThate hi yeh bola maiKhuwaar
Ab gham.o.bebasee.o.yaas ki aisee taisee
Jinpe humko tha bharosa woh nah aaye “Jawaid”
Kardee ik shaKhs ke vishwaas ki aisee taisee
Salam-e-masnoon
Hazal ki pazeeraaii ke liye shukriya. Mizaah meN kahna maiN na ab bhaut kum kar diya hai. Yeh hazal bhi Aligarians meN kuch members ki farma.ish per hi kahee thee.
Khair Andesh,
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salaam Jawaid saaHib,
man gaye bhai maan gaye...Ghazal meN to the hii janaab aur aaj hazal ka bhii maidaan maar diyaa...waah bahot Khoob...mujhe bhii radeef ne bahot lutf diyaa. sabhi ash'aar meN radeef ne gul khilaaye haiN, bi_KHusoos sasuraali rishtedaaroN aur job ke saathiyoN kii nisbat se.
jaarii rakhiye hazal goyii ka silsila..yeh sinf e suKhan na sirf muskuraahaToN kii zaamin hai balki Khaasii mushkil sinf bhi hai. Allah kare zor-e-qalam aur ziyaada.
Hashmat
man gaye bhai maan gaye...Ghazal meN to the hii janaab aur aaj hazal ka bhii maidaan maar diyaa...waah bahot Khoob...mujhe bhii radeef ne bahot lutf diyaa. sabhi ash'aar meN radeef ne gul khilaaye haiN, bi_KHusoos sasuraali rishtedaaroN aur job ke saathiyoN kii nisbat se.
jaarii rakhiye hazal goyii ka silsila..yeh sinf e suKhan na sirf muskuraahaToN kii zaamin hai balki Khaasii mushkil sinf bhi hai. Allah kare zor-e-qalam aur ziyaada.
Hashmat
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Mohtarmee Hashmat SahabHashmat Usmani wrote:salaam Jawaid saaHib,
man gaye bhai maan gaye...Ghazal meN to the hii janaab aur aaj hazal ka bhii maidaan maar diyaa...waah bahot Khoob...mujhe bhii radeef ne bahot lutf diyaa. sabhi ash'aar meN radeef ne gul khilaaye haiN, bi_KHusoos sasuraali rishtedaaroN aur job ke saathiyoN kii nisbat se.
jaarii rakhiye hazal goyii ka silsila..yeh sinf e suKhan na sirf muskuraahaToN kii zaamin hai balki Khaasii mushkil sinf bhi hai. Allah kare zor-e-qalam aur ziyaada.
Hashmat
Tasleem
Hazal ki pazeeraai ke liye marhoone minnat hooN. MaiN ne mizaah meN kahna kum kar diya hai. Aligarians meN kuch members ka israar tha isee liye yeh TooTe phoTe ashar kah liye the aur aapki muskurahaTon ki nazr kar diye thay.
Ek baar phir shukriya.
Khair Andesh
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sara_j wrote: bohat ache jawaid bhai, bohat ache!
jis tarah kabhi kabhi tylenol ki zaroorat parti ahi usi tarah mujhe aaj
bohat zaroorat thi hansne ki aur ye dose mujhe milgaya .........
bohat lutfandoz hui aapki si hazal se:
Nisf ghar wali samajhta hooN harik Saali ko
Mere SaloN ki miree Saas ki aisee taisee
Ishq ka mood hai maiN kaam peh jaaooNga nah aaj
Mere office kee mire Boss kee aisee taisee
Bachcha Teacher se yeh bola mujhe bus ishq paRhaaoo
Aaj Bhoogol ki Itihaas ki aisee taisee
Haath meN jaam uThate hi yeh bola maiKhuwaar
Ab gham.o.bebasee.o.yaas ki aisee taisee
Jinpe humko tha bharosa woh nah aaye “Jawaid”
Kardee ik shaKhs ke vishwaas ki aisee taisee
wah wah! kya hi andaaz hai aur aapne jiase likhe hain ki
ujlat mein likhi hai.........I can't beleive it! shayari ho tou
aisi aek Nazir sahib ko dekhi ke bas aek lafz kahun aur
shair haazir. aur doosre apko i admire you bhai.
aapka tehdil se shukriya aur dhairrrrrrrrrr saaaaaaaaaaaaaari daad qubool keejiye :rose .
sara
Aap haNs deeN Sara aap ke bhaai ki mehnat wosool hoii. MaiN ne hazal kahna bahut kum kar diya hai kyooNkeh aise kalam ka sirf waqti mazah hota hai, Ghazal ki baat hi kuch aur hai.
Hazal ki pazeeraaii ka shukriya.
Jawaid
Re: Meri Hazal...aapki muskurahaToN ki nazr.................
jawaid badauni wrote:
Nisf ghar wali samajhta hooN harik Saali ko
Mere SaloN ki miree Saas ki aisee taisee
Ishq ka mood hai maiN kaam peh jaaooNga nah aaj
Mere office kee mire Boss kee aisee taisee
Jinpe humko tha bharosa woh nah aaye “Jawaid”
Kardee ik shaKhs ke vishwaas ki aisee taisee
Bohot Khoob Jawed Sahib, aap ki hazal pasand aayi.
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