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abhi kuch log haiN uspaar meray

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Jeddah mai di gai aik tarah,:abhi kuch log haiN uspaar meray" par kahi gai aik ghazal..

unhaiN katwa rahay the yaar meray
shhajar the jitnay sayadaar meray

kahaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh e pa sab
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray

badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray

koi to lay sabaq in zalzaloN say
bharay haiN shahr ke akhbar meray

banaya hai makaN donoN ne milkar
zameeN unki dar o deewar meray

bhikari ki tarah na daad mangoN
koi kaasa nahi ashaar meray
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kahaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh e pa sab
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray

badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray

mahtab qadr sahib . umda, bay had umdaa ghazal tarteeb de hay .. buhut hi khubsoorat ashaar hain sab kay sab aur takhayyal bhi khoob hay ..umda aslob e beyaan hay ..share kernay ka bay had shukria

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salaam Sarfaraz saaHib,

aapkii taraHii Ghazal paRh kar bahot lutf aayaa. subHaan Allah, waah waah, kia kahne. Allah kare zor-e-qalam aur ziyaadah. pahle she'r ko to aap ENVIRONMENTALISTS ke nazar kar deN. vo bahot Khush hoNge:


unheN kaTvaa rahe the yaar mere
shajar the jitne saaya_daar mere


urdustan mushaai're meN ek daf'a ek tasveer dii gaii thii jis par Ghazal kahnii thii. vo tasveer ek saaHil kii thii jis meN chand naqsh-e-paa nazar aa rahe the. us tasveer par yeh she'r zabardast fiT baiThta hai:

kahaaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh-e-paa sab
huve kiuN raaste dushwaar mere


aapkaa yeh she'r paRh kar ek gaane ke chand ek bol yaad aa gaye:

achchhe ki bure! ham jais the
ham jaise the, ham vaise haiN
insaan nahiiN vo mausam hai
jo waqt ke saath badalte haiN


badalte mausamoN ke saath badle
vo jo ai'Hbaab the do_chaar mere


Tsunaamii kii tabaah_kun asaaraat aur halakat-e-insaanii paRh kar aaNsoo nikal aate haiN. kaash hamaare a'maal behtar hoN taa_ki aise qai'hr-e-Ilaahii se bach sakeN. aameen.

koii to le sabaq in zalzaloN se
bhare haiN shai'hr ke aKhbaar mere


bhai waah! kia saajhe_daarii hai...subHaanAllah!

banaayaa hai makaaN donoN ne mil kar
zameeN unkii, dar_o_deewar mere


bahot KhooB janaab!ek kaamiyaab Ghazal share karne par meri taraf se DheroN daad_o_taHseen aur mubaarak_baad, gar qubool uftaad.

faqat Khaak_saar,

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Mahtab Qadr wrote:
badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray

koi to lay sabaq in zalzaloN say
bharay haiN shahr ke akhbar meray

banaya hai makaN donoN ne milkar
zameeN unki dar o deewar meray

Wah!!! Bahut khoob Sarfaraz sahab....ye ash'aar bahut umda hain..daad haazir hai :)

Shumaila

Koi pooche humse hamaari haalat ka sabab
to ashk baha kar bhi baat adhoori reh jati hai

Waqt jaise kahin thehar sa gaya hai
Na Gham jaata hai na khushi aati hai
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Mahtab Qadr wrote:Jeddah mai di gai aik tarah,:abhi kuch log haiN uspaar meray" par kahi gai aik ghazal..

unhaiN katwa rahay the yaar meray
shhajar the jitnay sayadaar meray


wah bohat a'Alaa bohat khoob!!!! zabardast!!!!!


kahaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh e pa sab
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray


mukarrer zabardast!!!!insaan ki zindagi maiN aise muqaam bhi aa jate haiN keh yeh sochnaa hi peRtaa hai


badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray


oh mere khudaa kayaa hqeeqat bayaan ki haiaa pne bhaa saheb.


koi to lay sabaq in zalzaloN say
bharay haiN shahr ke akhbar meray


aaj tau aap kaa shaiiree ka shaheen bohat bulaand parwaaz ker rehaa hai. wah bohat a'Alaa janaab! kayaa hqeeqat nigaari ki hai Wallah


banaya hai makaN donoN ne milkar
zameeN unki dar o deewar meray



:) encrochment? hahaha mazaaq ber teraf bohat achaa shaer hai.

bhikari ki tarah na daad mangoN
koi kaasa nahi ashaar meray


"koi kaasa nhahiN ash'Aar mere "
khoob ast!!! dilee daad qbul fermaaeiN moHteram
live and let live

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Assalam-o-a'laikum,

moHtarami M.Q SaaHib,

subHana Allah janaab !! kyaa khene aapne tu meHfil hi looT lee :shock:
bahut hi u'mdah ghazal !! :D . masha Allah aap ne bahut u'mdah asha'aar nikaale aaye haiN . mujhe tu poori ghazal hi pasand aayee, daad qabool kejeye :D . shukriya

mokhliS: Zia Baloch
Dikhaadi shaan, phir ahl-e-chaman ko, Be-niyaazi ki

Khamoshi se jhatak kar, aaj phir, dast-e-sabaa maiN ne

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mohtaram

MEHTAB QADR SSAHIB

apni is khoobsurat ghazal per meri dili daad qubool kareiN. is tarah meiN
maine bhi kuchh koshish ki hai agar waqt mila to kabhi pesh karooNga.
kiya karooN meri masrrofiat meri raah meiN hayel hai.

khair andaish

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iHtisab apne naqaayis ka mujhe aataa hei
Saare Aalam ki maiN taqseer kahaN tak dekhuN
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waqar_masood wrote:kahaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh e pa sab
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray

badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray

mahtab qadr sahib . umda, bay had umdaa ghazal tarteeb de hay .. buhut hi khubsoorat ashaar hain sab kay sab aur takhayyal bhi khoob hay ..umda aslob e beyaan hay ..share kernay ka bay had shukria

waqar masood
Mohatram waqar masood sahib , izzatafzai ke lye mashkoor hoN warna banda e nacheez is layeq kahaN.
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Hashmat Usmani wrote:salaam Sarfaraz saaHib,

aapkii taraHii Ghazal paRh kar bahot lutf aayaa. subHaan Allah, waah waah, kia kahne. Allah kare zor-e-qalam aur ziyaadah. pahle she'r ko to aap ENVIRONMENTALISTS ke nazar kar deN. vo bahot Khush hoNge:


unheN kaTvaa rahe the yaar mere
shajar the jitne saaya_daar mere


urdustan mushaai're meN ek daf'a ek tasveer dii gaii thii jis par Ghazal kahnii thii. vo tasveer ek saaHil kii thii jis meN chand naqsh-e-paa nazar aa rahe the. us tasveer par yeh she'r zabardast fiT baiThta hai:

kahaaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh-e-paa sab
huve kiuN raaste dushwaar mere


aapkaa yeh she'r paRh kar ek gaane ke chand ek bol yaad aa gaye:

achchhe ki bure! ham jais the
ham jaise the, ham vaise haiN
insaan nahiiN vo mausam hai
jo waqt ke saath badalte haiN


badalte mausamoN ke saath badle
vo jo ai'Hbaab the do_chaar mere


Tsunaamii kii tabaah_kun asaaraat aur halakat-e-insaanii paRh kar aaNsoo nikal aate haiN. kaash hamaare a'maal behtar hoN taa_ki aise qai'hr-e-Ilaahii se bach sakeN. aameen.

koii to le sabaq in zalzaloN se
bhare haiN shai'hr ke aKhbaar mere


bhai waah! kia saajhe_daarii hai...subHaanAllah!

banaayaa hai makaaN donoN ne mil kar
zameeN unkii, dar_o_deewar mere


bahot KhooB janaab!ek kaamiyaab Ghazal share karne par meri taraf se DheroN daad_o_taHseen aur mubaarak_baad, gar qubool uftaad.

faqat Khaak_saar,

Hashmat
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Shummu wrote:
Mahtab Qadr wrote:
badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray

koi to lay sabaq in zalzaloN say
bharay haiN shahr ke akhbar meray

banaya hai makaN donoN ne milkar
zameeN unki dar o deewar meray

Wah!!! Bahut khoob Sarfaraz sahab....ye ash'aar bahut umda hain..daad haazir hai :)

Shumaila
shummu ji aapka isqadar masroofiat ke bawajood hameiN daad dena yaqeenan aik qeemti amar mai jiskelye mai aapka mashkoor hoN.
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tahira Masood wrote:
Mahtab Qadr wrote:Jeddah mai di gai aik tarah,:abhi kuch log haiN uspaar meray" par kahi gai aik ghazal..

unhaiN katwa rahay the yaar meray
shhajar the jitnay sayadaar meray


wah bohat a'Alaa bohat khoob!!!! zabardast!!!!!


kahaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh e pa sab
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray


mukarrer zabardast!!!!insaan ki zindagi maiN aise muqaam bhi aa jate haiN keh yeh sochnaa hi peRtaa hai

badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray


oh mere khudaa kayaa hqeeqat bayaan ki haiaa pne bhaa saheb.


koi to lay sabaq in zalzaloN say
bharay haiN shahr ke akhbar meray


aaj tau aap kaa shaiiree ka shaheen bohat bulaand parwaaz ker rehaa hai. wah bohat a'Alaa janaab! kayaa hqeeqat nigaari ki hai Wallah


banaya hai makaN donoN ne milkar
zameeN unki dar o deewar meray



:) encrochment? hahaha mazaaq ber teraf bohat achaa shaer hai.

bhikari ki tarah na daad mangoN
koi kaasa nahi ashaar meray


"koi kaasa nhahiN ash'Aar mere "
khoob ast!!! dilee daad qbul fermaaeiN moHteram
Tahira Masood sahiba
ye to aapki zarraaaanawaazi hai, ke aapne itni bharpoor daad se nawaza mai is hausla afzai ke lye mashkoor hoN.


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Star Mind wrote:Assalam-o-a'laikum,

moHtarami M.Q SaaHib,

subHana Allah janaab !! kyaa khene aapne tu meHfil hi looT lee :shock:
bahut hi u'mdah ghazal !! :D . masha Allah aap ne bahut u'mdah asha'aar nikaale aaye haiN . mujhe tu poori ghazal hi pasand aayee, daad qabool kejeye :D . shukriya

mokhliS: Zia Baloch

bradar e azeez Zia sahib , JazakAllah khair, mahfileiN lootna to aap jaise ghazal ke shahzadoN ka kaam hai ham to apne afkaar e paraganda se jo kuch ban parhe pesh kardete haiN, kuch na samjhe khuda kare koi
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najm wrote:
Mahtab Qadr wrote:Jeddah mai di gai aik tarah,:abhi kuch log haiN uspaar meray" par kahi gai aik ghazal..

unhaiN katwa rahay the yaar meray
shhajar the jitnay sayadaar meray

kahaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh e pa sab
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray

badaltay maosamoN ke saath badlay
vo jo ahbaab thay dochaar meray

koi to lay sabaq in zalzaloN say
bharay haiN shahr ke akhbar meray

banaya hai makaN donoN ne milkar
zameeN unki dar o deewar meray

bhikari ki tarah na daad mangoN
koi kaasa nahi ashaar meray
dearest mahtab jee, aadaab-o-tasleemat.
aap ki Ghazal paRhi. bohat achchii lagii. har she'r dosre se baRh kar hai.
aap ki meHfil nau-waarad hooN. leHaaza logoN ko bilkul naheeN jaantaa aur aap se bhi pehli dafa'a ham-kalam hooN. hukm-e-izan mile to aik baat arz karna chahtaa thaa.
kahaN gum ho gaye haiN naqsh e pa sab
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray
aap ka ye she'r bohat achaa hai. agar pehle misra'e ko yooN badal diyaa jaaye to is ka lutf aur dobaalaa ho jaataa hai.

kahaN gum naqsh e pa sab ho gaye haiN
huve kioN raastay dushwaar meray


ummeed karta hooN merii ye jisaarat giraaN na guzrae gii.

taalib-e-du'aa
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