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azeezan-e-bazam
aadab
pehli dafa iss tarah k mushairay main hissa lay rahi hon pehli dafa kisi misray pay girhain lagaie hain
aap logo ki honest raye ka intizar rahay ga pls kahin bhi koie kami ya khami pain tu mujhay zaror batain
all types of suggestions r warm welcomed
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“Khata hoti hay sahib aadmi say”

Bay dharrak hi dil main utar gaye thay tum
Couch milay thay hamain aisi sadgi say

Nah phariye nazrain hamaray haqooq say
Nahin milay gi jannat srif bandagi say

Kehkashain si bikhar hoien thin her tarf
Utray thay aisay saf rastay, roshni say

Badal tu ghir ghir aatay hain roz roz
Per sawan guzra jata hay bay rukhi say

Hamaray darmiyan tu yaranay thay barso k
Per aaj kiyon tum lagtay ho ajnabi say

Aao k ahead-e-wafa phir say kartay hain Ghazal
Pinap hi jain gain rishtay, chandni say


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Bay dharrak hi dil main utar gaye thay tum
Couch milay thay hamain aisi sadgi say

Nah phariye nazrain hamaray haqooq say
Nahin milay gi jannat srif bandagi say

Hamaray darmiyan tu yaranay thay barso k
Per aaj kiyon tum lagtay ho ajnabi say

Aao k ahead-e-wafa phir say kartay hain Ghazal
Pinap hi jain gain rishtay, chandni say

wah..bahut khoob.....uzma jee bahut achche khayalaat ko qalam band kiya hai aapne magar bas ghazal behr mein nahi hai...agar behr mein hoti to mazaa dobaala ho jaata.... mashq-e-sukhan jaari rakhein...! :)

Shumaila

Koi pooche humse hamaari haalat ka sabab
to ashk baha kar bhi baat adhoori reh jati hai

Waqt jaise kahin thehar sa gaya hai
Na Gham jaata hai na khushi aati hai
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Mohtarmah Uzma Sahibah,

Bahut achchee Ghazal se nawaza hai aap ne, ummid hai aaindah bhi apna kalam bhejtee raheNgee.

Apka Mukhlis,

Naacheez,
Jawaid
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Salam Uzma ...

Kaafi din baad aap kee ghazal nazar se guzry ... khayalaat achhay hain .. bus wohi SHUMMU ka kahna theek hay k ghazal kharij-az-behr hay ..

aap koshish jaary rakhain aur muta'la per zor dain. Islaah k liye ustaad sho'ra se rujoo farmayen.

ALLAH KARAY ZOR-e-QALAM AUR ZIADA

Khush rahain

Khair Andesh

Raheel Ahmed
Kab Say HooN , Kia BataaooN Jahan-e-Kharab Main
Shab-Haaye Hijr Ko Bhee RakhooN Gar Hisab Main
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Uzma Sahiba...

bohut acha laga aap ko yahaN bhi jalwa afroz dekh kar...:)..... Ghazal bohut achi lagi.... behr ki jaanib tawajju tou dila hi chukay haiN ehbaab..... ye kami tou mashq say az Khud behter hoti chali jaye gi....albatta Khayaalat ki zameen zarKhaiz hai.... is ki aabyaari karti rahiye ......tou hamaiN bohut achi kaawishaat paRhnay ko milti rahaiNgi aap say ......Ghazal per bohut si daad qubool kijye....:)

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Shummu wrote:Bay dharrak hi dil main utar gaye thay tum
Couch milay thay hamain aisi sadgi say

Nah phariye nazrain hamaray haqooq say
Nahin milay gi jannat srif bandagi say

Hamaray darmiyan tu yaranay thay barso k
Per aaj kiyon tum lagtay ho ajnabi say

Aao k ahead-e-wafa phir say kartay hain Ghazal
Pinap hi jain gain rishtay, chandni say

wah..bahut khoob.....uzma jee bahut achche khayalaat ko qalam band kiya hai aapne magar bas ghazal behr mein nahi hai...agar behr mein hoti to mazaa dobaala ho jaata.... mashq-e-sukhan jaari rakhein...! :)

Shumaila
dear shumaila ji
ghazal pasand karnay ka shukriya
seekhnay k marahil main hon... radif or qafiyaye ka couch samjh aaya hay per abhi behar ko wazan main kehnay say dur hon but hope 4 the best i have always insha Allah woh din bhi zaror aaye ga jub meri ghazlain bhi behar main hongi :)
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sara_j wrote:bohat khoob uzma..........aapne koshish ki aur
humari baat ka maan rakhliye, main tehdil se
aapki mamnoon hoon.

khayalaat bohat ache hain .

sara

sara ji
yeh tu aap ki hi zarah nawazi hay jo main idhar hon other wise mujhay tu pata bhi nahi tha :)
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jawaid badauni wrote:Mohtarmah Uzma Sahibah,

Bahut achchee Ghazal se nawaza hai aap ne, ummid hai aaindah bhi apna kalam bhejtee raheNgee.

Apka Mukhlis,

Naacheez,
Jawaid
jawaid sahib
ghazal parrhnay, sarhnay or comments karnay pay main aap ki bayhad mamnoon hon
insha Allah zaror ainda bhi yeh koshish jari rahay gi
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rahmed25682 wrote:Salam Uzma ...

Kaafi din baad aap kee ghazal nazar se guzry ... khayalaat achhay hain .. bus wohi SHUMMU ka kahna theek hay k ghazal kharij-az-behr hay ..

aap koshish jaary rakhain aur muta'la per zor dain. Islaah k liye ustaad sho'ra se rujoo farmayen.

ALLAH KARAY ZOR-e-QALAM AUR ZIADA

Khush rahain

Khair Andesh

Raheel Ahmed
raheel sahib
thanks 4 reading and appriciation
ji haan aap ka kehna bilkul drust hay or main in simton main koshish kar rahi hon
waisay aap ka birthday note meray forum pay wait kar raha hay arsa daraz say aap us tarf nahi aaye hain :roll:
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nigaah wrote:Uzma Sahiba...

bohut acha laga aap ko yahaN bhi jalwa afroz dekh kar...:)..... Ghazal bohut achi lagi.... behr ki jaanib tawajju tou dila hi chukay haiN ehbaab..... ye kami tou mashq say az Khud behter hoti chali jaye gi....albatta Khayaalat ki zameen zarKhaiz hai.... is ki aabyaari karti rahiye ......tou hamaiN bohut achi kaawishaat paRhnay ko milti rahaiNgi aap say ......Ghazal per bohut si daad qubool kijye....:)

Nigaah
nigha ji
thanks alot 4 ur appriciation and reading of my ghazal
aap ki nasihatain pallo say bandh li hain :)
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Uzma SaaHiba, aap ki Ghazal naz^ar-nawaaz hoi , bohut pasand aayee ! Khyaalaat bohut u'mdah haiN , albatta aap ko waz ko qaaboo maiN laane keleye shaai'ree kaa chilla kaaTnaa paReyga :-)

shukriya

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Khamoshi se jhatak kar, aaj phir, dast-e-sabaa maiN ne

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Bahut khoob waah waah

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mohtaramah

UZMAH KHAN SAAHIBAH

tasleemat

wah wah. subhan allah. bahut hi khoosurat kalam hai. meri ghair maujoodgi maiN urdu bandahn ne bahut taraqqi ki hai. ab to bahut hi umdah kalam aap log pesh kar rahay haiN. bahut khoob . keep it up.

khair andaish

irfan barabankwi
iHtisab apne naqaayis ka mujhe aataa hei
Saare Aalam ki maiN taqseer kahaN tak dekhuN
Irfan Barabankwi.
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Star Mind wrote:Uzma SaaHiba, aap ki Ghazal naz^ar-nawaaz hoi , bohut pasand aayee ! Khyaalaat bohut u'mdah haiN , albatta aap ko waz ko qaaboo maiN laane keleye shaai'ree kaa chilla kaaTnaa paReyga :-)

shukriya

moKhliS : Zia Baloch
zia ji
yeh chilla kaisay kata jaye ga agar couch nishandahi kar dain tu barri nawazish hogi peer ji :D
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Re: Bahut khoob waah waah

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irfan barabankwi wrote:mohtaramah

UZMAH KHAN SAAHIBAH

tasleemat

wah wah. subhan allah. bahut hi khoosurat kalam hai. meri ghair maujoodgi maiN urdu bandahn ne bahut taraqqi ki hai. ab to bahut hi umdah kalam aap log pesh kar rahay haiN. bahut khoob . keep it up.

khair andaish

irfan barabankwi
aadab irfan sahib

itni khobsorat dad k liay main aap ki teh-e-dil say mamnoon hon

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gazal_uzma wrote:
Star Mind wrote:Uzma SaaHiba, aap ki Ghazal naz^ar-nawaaz hoi , bohut pasand aayee ! Khyaalaat bohut u'mdah haiN , albatta aap ko waz ko qaaboo maiN laane keleye shaai'ree kaa chilla kaaTnaa paReyga :-)

shukriya

moKhliS : Zia Baloch
zia ji
yeh chilla kaisay kata jaye ga agar couch nishandahi kar dain tu barri nawazish hogi peer ji :D
thanks 4 reading and appriciation
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uzma khan

uzmaa jee , aadaab

Huzoor chilla kaaTne ka aek aasaan a'mal aap ko darj-zel mazmoon maiN melega ! ise Ghor se paRheye aur is par a'mal kejeye , phir dekheye k shaai'ree ki deevee aap par kaise mehrabaan hoti hai ! :wink:

lejeye link ye hai:

http://www.urdustan.com/mazameen/nikaat/nikaat7.html
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Khamoshi se jhatak kar, aaj phir, dast-e-sabaa maiN ne

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