Ghalib kii zameen meiN meri ghazal

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Ghalib kii zameen meiN meri ghazal

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Muhtaramaat o muhtarameen
Ahbab-e-meHfil,


Aadaab o tasleemaat,

Mirza Ghalib ke aik misreA per maiN ne TaraHi ghazal kahi hei jo yahaN paish karne kii saAadat haasil karraha hooN.

Aapki giraNqadr aaraa kaa intizaar rahega.

G H A Z A L
Azhaan ke liye yeh tasavvur muHaal hei
"Aalam tamam Halqa-e-daam-e-khayaal hei"
Yeh sinf-e-dousti bhi jahaaN meiN Halaal hei
Ik dil meiN khooN sufaid hei ik dil meiN laal hei
LauH-e-jabeeN pah uski raqam yeh sawaal hei
YooN bazm-e-kaayinaat meiN koiee micaal hei
Mumkin nahiN hei lauTnaa kashti sawaar ka
Gehri samundaraoN se bhii chashm-e-ghazaal hei
KiyooN aaftaab-e-waqt hei naazaaN urooj per
Kehdo ke Anqareeb hii shaam-e-zavaal hei
Kooche se unke guzreN hawaayeN bhi baa-adab
Wo qadr-o-manzilat hei wo jaah o jalaal hei
Pesh-e-nazar hei jab se mirii ghairat-e-anaa
Jo dil meiN hei zabaan pah aanaa muHaal hei
Aiy saahil aaj gham hei ke be-baal o per hooN maiN
YooN tou leHaaz-e-naama-e-shaam-e-visaal hei.
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Khair Andesh,
Saahil.

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moHtaram janaab-e-"SaaHil" saaHib,

Ghaalib kii zameen meN aapkii Ghazal paRhi aur yaqeen jaaniye mujhe be_Had pasand aayii. aapne gireh Khoob lagaaii hai...aapkii Ghazal meN ustaadaanah rang nazar aataa hai...Allah kare zor-e-qalam aur ziyaada.

sabhii ash'aar ek se baRh kar ek haiN...masha Allah.

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Ghalib kee iss mushkiL zameen per aap ka kalam daikh kar acha laga

Azhaan ke liye yeh tasavvur muHaal hei
"Aalam tamam Halqa-e-daam-e-khayaal hei"

"Azhaan" ka matlab agar aap bataa dein tu inaayat ho gi ke mujhe iss ka mafhoom nahien pata :(


Yeh sinf-e-dousti bhi jahaaN meiN Halaal hei
Ik dil meiN khooN sufaid hei ik dil meiN laal hei

Zabardast. bauth hee khoob

LauH-e-jabeeN peh uski raqam yeh sawaal hei
YooN bazm-e-kaayinaat meiN koiee micaal hei

Nice

Mumkin nahiN hei lauTnaa kashti sawaar ka
Gehri samundaraoN se bhii chashm-e-ghazaal hei

Wah bauth khoob

KiyooN aaftaab-e-waqt hei naazaaN urooj per
Kehdo ke Anqareeb hii shaam-e-zavaal hei

Wah wah wah bauth hee zabardast


Kooche se unke guzreN hawaayeN bhi baa-adab
Wo qadr-o-manzilat hei wo jaah o jalaal hei

Teak :)

Pesh-e-nazar hei jab se mirii ghairat-e-anaa
Jo dil meiN hei zabaan pah aanaa muHaal hei

Superb :)

Aiy saahil aaj gham hei ke be-baal o per hooN maiN
YooN tou leHaaz-e-naama-e-shaam-e-visaal hei.

MashaAllah kyaa baat hai. Majmoohi taur per aap kee yeh tarHee ghazal bauth pasand aahi so daad hazir-e-khidmat hai :)


Wassalam

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Sahil saHib

janaab aap ki ye ghazal to pehle hi paRh li thi ,magar waqt per javaab na de sakaa, dar.asl main ye samajhta rahaa ke main aap ko muraqqa-e-daad-o-sitaaish pesh kar chuka hooN :)

lijiye, ab daad qubool kareN itni umda kawish per

amjad
Mire ash'aar ae Iqbal kyuN pyaare na hoN mujhko
mire TooTe hue dil ke ye dard.angez naale haiN
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Re: Ghalib kii zameen meiN meri ghazal

Post by khozema husaini »

abdulqayyum sahil wrote:
Muhtaramaat o muhtarameen
Ahbab-e-meHfil,


Aadaab o tasleemaat,

Mirza Ghalib ke aik misreA per maiN ne TaraHi ghazal kahi hei jo yahaN paish karne kii saAadat haasil karraha hooN.

Aapki giraNqadr aaraa kaa intizaar rahega.

G H A Z A L
Azhaan ke liye yeh tasavvur muHaal hei
"Aalam tamam Halqa-e-daam-e-khayaal hei"
Yeh sinf-e-dousti bhi jahaaN meiN Halaal hei
Ik dil meiN khooN sufaid hei ik dil meiN laal hei
LauH-e-jabeeN pah uski raqam yeh sawaal hei
YooN bazm-e-kaayinaat meiN koiee micaal hei
Mumkin nahiN hei lauTnaa kashti sawaar ka
Gehri samundaraoN se bhii chashm-e-ghazaal hei
KiyooN aaftaab-e-waqt hei naazaaN urooj per
Kehdo ke Anqareeb hii shaam-e-zavaal hei
Kooche se unke guzreN hawaayeN bhi baa-adab
Wo qadr-o-manzilat hei wo jaah o jalaal hei
Pesh-e-nazar hei jab se mirii ghairat-e-anaa
Jo dil meiN hei zabaan pah aanaa muHaal hei
Aiy saahil aaj gham hei ke be-baal o per hooN maiN
YooN tou leHaaz-e-naama-e-shaam-e-visaal hei.
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Khair Andesh,
Saahil.

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husaini
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