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miltee naheeN daad-e-sukhan, raKhtay heN par taab-e-sukhan

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shurakaa-e-meHfil ki khidmat meN meraa salaam!

apnee aik taazah Ghazal ke saath HaaZir hooN -aap kemufeed aur kaar.aamad tabSiroN kaa intizaar rahay gaa--pasandeedgee ke saath saath naa.pasandeedgee kaa izhaar bhi khul kar keejiye gaa taakeh meN kisee khush.fehmee meN mubtilaa nah ho sakooN -

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Ghazal


kam hee sahee meHfil meN heN aise bhi arbaab-e-sukhan
miltee naheeN daad-e-sukhan, raKhtay heN par taab-e-sukhan

ghar se chalay thay paar karnay aatishee daryaa-e-i'shq
kyaa thee khabar le Doobay gaa ham ko bhi gardaab-e-sukhan

meHroom hay shaa.i'r bahut ,mazloom hay shaa.i'r bahut
ik zeest kaa dar band ho to waa ho ik baab-e-sukhan

deKho zaraa is mai.kaday ke khoobroo jaam-o-suboo
paidaa karo saaqee kaheeN se Phir ma.e.naab-e-sukhan !

bay.jaa naheeN meraa taRapnaa khushk ho daryaa agar
kuCh bhi naheeN hooN meN ba.juz ik maahiy-e-aab-e-sukhan

itnee zyaadah she'r.go.ee bhee ai dil aChChee naheeN !
aisaa nah ho ham ko bahaa lay jaa.ay Sailaab-e-sukhan

us se Ghubaar-e-"Meer" kee maanind meN baiThaa hooN door
ummeed hay aa.eN gay aatay aatay aadaab-e-sukhan

manzil raKho paish-e-nazar ,yaaro raho meHw-e-safar !
hay woh kawee naakaam jo ho jaa.ay Gharqaab-e-sukhan

hay shaa.i'r-e-mashriq kaa faiZ ,ash.'aar-e-man purnoor heN
gar aaftaab Iqbaal hay to :shaah: mahtaab-e-sukhan
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Bahut khoob, waah waah

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MuHtarami
Yasir Shah SaaHib,

PurkhulooS Tasleemaat,

Aapki yeh ghazal bahut pasand aayi. BeHr-e-rajaz mucamman salem meiN itni mushkil zameen ikhtiyaar kerke achche sheAr kehnaa aapki maqdirat-e-sukhan kaa cuboot hei.

ghar se chalay thay paar karnay aatishee daryaa-e-i'shq
kyaa thee khabar le Doobay gaa ham ko bhi gardaab-e-sukhan

meHroom hay shaa.i'r bahut ,mazloom hay shaa.i'r bahut
ik zeest kaa dar band ho to waa ho ik baab-e-sukhan

deKho zaraa is mai.kaday ke khoobroo jaam-o-suboo
paidaa karo saaqee kaheeN se Phir ma.e.naab-e-sukhan !

bay.jaa naheeN meraa taRapnaa khushk ho daryaa agar
kuCh bhi naheeN hooN meN ba.juz ik maahiy-e-aab-e-sukhan

itnee zyaadah she'r.go.ee bhee ai dil aChChee naheeN !
aisaa nah ho ham ko bahaa lay jaa.ay Sailaab-e-sukhan

us se Ghubaar-e-"Meer" kee maanind meN baiThaa hooN door
ummeed hay aa.eN gay aatay aatay aadaab-e-sukhan

manzil raKho paish-e-nazar ,yaaro raho meHw-e-safar !
hay woh kawee naakaam jo ho jaa.ay Gharqaab-e-sukhan

hay shaa.i'r-e-mashriq kaa faiZ ,ash.'aar-e-man purnoor heN
gar aaftaab Iqbaal hay to :shaah: mahtaab-e-sukhan


Ghazal ke saare ashAar bahut khoob heiN, waah waah. Is maahiraanah takhleeq per meri dili daad aur mubaarakbaad qubool farmaayiye.


Aapka MukhliS,
Nazir.

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Re: Bahut khoob, waah waah

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WEBMASTER wrote:
MuHtarami
Yasir Shah SaaHib,

PurkhulooS Tasleemaat,

Aapki yeh ghazal bahut pasand aayi. BeHr-e-rajaz mucamman salem meiN itni mushkil zameen ikhtiyaar kerke achche sheAr kehnaa aapki maqdirat-e-sukhan kaa cuboot hei.

ghar se chalay thay paar karnay aatishee daryaa-e-i'shq
kyaa thee khabar le Doobay gaa ham ko bhi gardaab-e-sukhan

meHroom hay shaa.i'r bahut ,mazloom hay shaa.i'r bahut
ik zeest kaa dar band ho to waa ho ik baab-e-sukhan

deKho zaraa is mai.kaday ke khoobroo jaam-o-suboo
paidaa karo saaqee kaheeN se Phir ma.e.naab-e-sukhan !

bay.jaa naheeN meraa taRapnaa khushk ho daryaa agar
kuCh bhi naheeN hooN meN ba.juz ik maahiy-e-aab-e-sukhan

itnee zyaadah she'r.go.ee bhee ai dil aChChee naheeN !
aisaa nah ho ham ko bahaa lay jaa.ay Sailaab-e-sukhan

us se Ghubaar-e-"Meer" kee maanind meN baiThaa hooN door
ummeed hay aa.eN gay aatay aatay aadaab-e-sukhan

manzil raKho paish-e-nazar ,yaaro raho meHw-e-safar !
hay woh kawee naakaam jo ho jaa.ay Gharqaab-e-sukhan

hay shaa.i'r-e-mashriq kaa faiZ ,ash.'aar-e-man purnoor heN
gar aaftaab Iqbaal hay to :shaah: mahtaab-e-sukhan


Ghazal ke saare ashAar bahut khoob heiN, waah waah. Is maahiraanah takhleeq per meri dili daad aur mubaarakbaad qubool farmaayiye.


Aapka MukhliS,
Nazir.

MuHtaram Janaab
Abdullah Nazir SaaHib

assalamOa'laikuM

Hasb-e-ma'mool aap ke is naama-e-muHabbat peh aap kaa dilee mamnoon hooN aur saath saath yeh bhi a'rZ karnaa chaahooN gaa keh apnee is Haqeer takhleeq ko meN maahiraanah taSawwur naheeN kartaa,, aur aap jaise shafeeq ashjaar ke saayoN kaa mutalaashee hooN -

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Re: miltee naheeN daad-e-sukhan, raKhtay heN par taab-e-sukh

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sara_j wrote:
yasir shah wrote:shurakaa-e-meHfil ki khidmat meN meraa salaam!

apnee aik taazah Ghazal ke saath HaaZir hooN -aap kemufeed aur kaar.aamad tabSiroN kaa intizaar rahay gaa--pasandeedgee ke saath saath naa.pasandeedgee kaa izhaar bhi khul kar keejiye gaa taakeh meN kisee khush.fehmee meN mubtilaa nah ho sakooN -

khush rahye
du'aago
yasir

bhai asal daad tou ustad-e-mohtaram se mil gayi ab tou aap khush fehmee hi nahi balke bohat ziyada khush hougaye hounge
bilkul !!

ab boliye miThai kahan hei is khoobsurat aur kamyaab takhleeq per :grin:

miThai kahaaN hay ??? Halwaai ke paas :-)

Ghazal


kam hee sahee meHfil meN heN aise bhi arbaab-e-sukhan
miltee naheeN daad-e-sukhan, raKhtay heN par taab-e-sukhan

:-) kya teer maare hain aap is shair se........wah wah!

bahut shukriyah


ghar se chalay thay paar karnay aatishee daryaa-e-i'shq
kyaa thee khabar le Doobay gaa ham ko bhi gardaab-e-sukhan

haaha! bohat khoob!
:-) mamnoon

meHroom hay shaa.i'r bahut ,mazloom hay shaa.i'r bahut
ik zeest kaa dar band ho to waa ho ik baab-e-sukhan

wah wah! yasir bhai bohat khoob!
:oops: bahut shukriyah


deKho zaraa is mai.kaday ke khoobroo jaam-o-suboo
paidaa karo saaqee kaheeN se Phir ma.e.naab-e-sukhan !

daad!
qubool


bay.jaa naheeN meraa taRapnaa khushk ho daryaa agar
kuCh bhi naheeN hooN meN ba.juz ik maahiy-e-aab-e-sukhan

wah!

shaakir


itnee zyaadah she'r.go.ee bhee ai dil aChChee naheeN !
aisaa nah ho ham ko bahaa lay jaa.ay Sailaab-e-sukhan

bohat khoob janaab!

bahut shukriyah


us se Ghubaar-e-"Meer" kee maanind meN baiThaa hooN door
ummeed hay aa.eN gay aatay aatay aadaab-e-sukhan

very nice! ( angrezi ke liye mazzirat :-) )

bahut shukriyah meree taraf se bhi ma'zrat :shock:


manzil raKho paish-e-nazar ,yaaro raho meHw-e-safar !
hay woh kawee naakaam jo ho jaa.ay Gharqaab-e-sukhan

hay shaa.i'r-e-mashriq kaa faiZ ,ash.'aar-e-man purnoor heN
gar aaftaab Iqbaal hay to :shaah: mahtaab-e-sukhan

wah wah kya kehne! bohat khoob maqta hei daad qubool keejiye.

aap kaa intihaai mutashkkir hooN


bohat khoob ghazal sabhi ashaar bohat pasand
aaye aur paRhte hue bohat ziyada lutfandoz hui
aur aisa laga jaise main paRh nahi balke sun rahi
hoon. daad aur mubarakbaad qubool keejiye.

sara
behen Sara !

aap ki i'zzat.afzaaee kaa be.Had mamnoon hooN ,,aur daad paa kar meN Phoolay naheeN samaa rahaa- :grin:

khush rahye
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yasir
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