ba.D gayaa thaa pyaas kaa ehasaas dariyaa dekh kar
ham palaT aaye magar paanii ko pyaasaa dekh kar
ham bhii hai.n shaayad kisii bhaTakii huii kashtii ke log
chiikhane lagate hai.n Khvaabo.n me.n jaziiraa dekha kar
jis kii jitanii haisiyat hai usake naam utanaa Khuluus
bhiik dete hai.n yahaa.N ke log kasaa dekh kar
maa.Ngate hai.n bhiik ab apane muhallo.n me.n faqiir
bhuuk bhii muhataat ho jaatii hai khatraa dekh kar
Khud_kushii likhii thii ek bevaa ke chehare par magar
phir vo zi.ndaa ho gayii bachchaa bilakataa dekh kar
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Mairaj Faizabaadi ka kalam
beKhvaab sa'ato.n kaa parastaar kaun hai
itanii udaas raat me.n bedaar kaun hai
kis ko ye fiqr ke qabiile ko kyaa huaa
sab is pe la.D rahe hai.n ki saradaar kaun hai
diivaar par sajaa to diye baaGiyo.n ke sar
ab ye bhii dekh lo ki pas-e-diivaar kaun hai
sab kashtiyaa.N jalaa ke chale saahilo.n se ham
ab tum se kyaa bataaye.N ke us paar kaun hai
ye faisalaa to shaayad vaqt bhii na kar sake
sach kaun bolataa hai adaakaar kaun hai
itanii udaas raat me.n bedaar kaun hai
kis ko ye fiqr ke qabiile ko kyaa huaa
sab is pe la.D rahe hai.n ki saradaar kaun hai
diivaar par sajaa to diye baaGiyo.n ke sar
ab ye bhii dekh lo ki pas-e-diivaar kaun hai
sab kashtiyaa.N jalaa ke chale saahilo.n se ham
ab tum se kyaa bataaye.N ke us paar kaun hai
ye faisalaa to shaayad vaqt bhii na kar sake
sach kaun bolataa hai adaakaar kaun hai
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Kuch typos heiN
Muhtarami
Mahtab Qadr Saahib
Purkhuloos Tasleemaat, :)
Aapki paish kii houii Mairaaj Faizaabaadi kii doosre ghazal meiN kuch typing ki ghalatiyaoN se 3 misreA be-beHr hougaye heiN:
SheAr / misraA
2./1
Is meiN lafz "hei" chooT gayaa hei aur misraA yooN hounaa chaahiye:
kis ko ye fikr hei ke qabiile ko kyaa huaa
3./2.
Is meiN lafz "ki" ziyaadah hougayaa hei aur misraA yooN hounaa chaahiye:
ab ye bhii dekh lo pas-e-diivaar kaun hai
5./1.
Is meiN alfaaz ki tarteeb ghalaT houne ki vajah se misraA be-beHr hougayaa hei. Shayad misraA yooN hounaa chaahiye:
ye faisalaa to vaqt bhii shaayad na kar sake
Ummeed ke meri raaye saHeeH hougi. Shukriyah.
Aapka Mukhlis,
Nazir.