Meri Ghazal aapki nazr......................................

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Meri Ghazal aapki nazr......................................

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Dosto aur saathiyo!
Salam qubool farmaaiye

Meri ek ghazal haazir-e khidmat hai. Kuch mun-
farid mazaamin per qalam uThane ki koshish ki
hai. Ummid hai apni aara se nawaazeNge aur
meri Hauclahafzaii farmayeNge.

Naacheez,

Jawaid Badauni
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Ghazal

Tum ne miree yadoN ko saNbhala bhi nahiN hai
Pal bhar ke liye dil se nikala bhi nahiN hai


Eeman faroshi ka mire sir peh hai ilzaam
Aur haath meN sone ka niwalah bhi nahiN hai


Iss daur ke Rawan ka sitam phir bhi hai jaari
Seeta ne qadam ghar se nikala bhi nahiN hai


Yeh mana keh ab ghar meN nahiN teeragi-e shub
Per sub,H kahooN aisa ujala bhi nahiN hai


Muflis hooN kahaN ghar ki hifazat ka mujhe Khauf
Soya bhi hooN darwaze meN tala bhi nahiN hai


Ayyam-e masarrat thay to ahbaab bhi thay saath
Mushkil meN koii poochne wala bhi nahiN hai


Dekho to zaraa kaisa ajab shaKhs hai "Jawaid"
Aibee bhi nahiN KhoobiyoN wala bhi nahin hai.


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Jawaid Badauni wrote: Tum ne miree yadoN ko saNbhala bhi nahiN hai
Pal bhar ke liye dil se nikala bhi nahiN hai
wah khoobsurat aaGhaaz ek khoobsurat ghazal ka...bahut umda matla hai..der tak khoyi rahi...
Eeman faroshi ka mire sir peh hai ilzaam
Aur haath meN sone ka niwalah bhi nahiN hai
wah wah wahhhhhhhhhhhhhh lajawaab sher!haasil-e-ghazal sher!
Iss daur ke Rawan ka sitam phir bhi hai jaari
Seeta ne qadam ghar se nikala bhi nahiN hai
bahut sahi farmaaya aapne..
Yeh mana keh ab ghar meN nahiN teeragi-e shub
Per sub,H kahooN aisa ujala bhi nahiN hai
woww..another beautiful sher....

Muflis hooN kahaN ghar ki hifazat ka mujhe Khauf
Soya bhi hooN darwaze meN tala bhi nahiN hai
kya andaaz-e-bayaan..bahut umda..saare hi sher ek se baRhkar ek hain...

Ayyam-e masarrat thay to ahbaab bhi thay saath
Mushkil meN koii poochne wala bhi nahiN hai
sahi kaha aapne..aisa hi hota hai...

Dekho to miyaaN kaisa ajab shaKhs hai "Jawaid"
Aibee bhi nahiN KhoobiyoN wala bhi nahin hai.
wahhhhhhhh maqta bhi lajawaab!


Jawaid bhai...poori ki poori ghazal hi is qadar umda hai ki main chaah kar bhi koi ek sher nahi chun saki....baDa munfarid andaaz laga ghazal ka....dil ki gehraaiyon se dheron daad haazir hai...duaa kijiye ke humein bhi aisa likhna aa jaaye :D

Jawaid Badauni [/color][/quote]

Koi pooche humse hamaari haalat ka sabab
to ashk baha kar bhi baat adhoori reh jati hai

Waqt jaise kahin thehar sa gaya hai
Na Gham jaata hai na khushi aati hai
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Shummu wrote:
Jawaid Badauni wrote: Tum ne miree yadoN ko saNbhala bhi nahiN hai
Pal bhar ke liye dil se nikala bhi nahiN hai
wah khoobsurat aaGhaaz ek khoobsurat ghazal ka...bahut umda matla hai..der tak khoyi rahi...
Eeman faroshi ka mire sir peh hai ilzaam
Aur haath meN sone ka niwalah bhi nahiN hai
wah wah wahhhhhhhhhhhhhh lajawaab sher!haasil-e-ghazal sher!
Iss daur ke Rawan ka sitam phir bhi hai jaari
Seeta ne qadam ghar se nikala bhi nahiN hai
bahut sahi farmaaya aapne..
Yeh mana keh ab ghar meN nahiN teeragi-e shub
Per sub,H kahooN aisa ujala bhi nahiN hai
woww..another beautiful sher....

Muflis hooN kahaN ghar ki hifazat ka mujhe Khauf
Soya bhi hooN darwaze meN tala bhi nahiN hai
kya andaaz-e-bayaan..bahut umda..saare hi sher ek se baRhkar ek hain...

Ayyam-e masarrat thay to ahbaab bhi thay saath
Mushkil meN koii poochne wala bhi nahiN hai
sahi kaha aapne..aisa hi hota hai...

Dekho to miyaaN kaisa ajab shaKhs hai "Jawaid"
Aibee bhi nahiN KhoobiyoN wala bhi nahin hai.
wahhhhhhhh maqta bhi lajawaab!


Jawaid bhai...poori ki poori ghazal hi is qadar umda hai ki main chaah kar bhi koi ek sher nahi chun saki....baDa munfarid andaaz laga ghazal ka....dil ki gehraaiyon se dheron daad haazir hai...duaa kijiye ke humein bhi aisa likhna aa jaaye :D

Jawaid Badauni [/color]
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Azeezah Shummu Sahibah (Mujhe aapka yeh naam likhne meN ziyadah aasani hoti hai.)

Ghazal ki mufaccil, bharpoor aur purkhuloos daad ke liye aa ka behud mamnoon hooN. Aap mashq jari rakhiye, Insha Allah mujh se bhi achcha kaheNgee.

Faqat,

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moHtaram Jawaid Baduni SaaHib, aadaab

janaab Ghazal to hamesha ki t^araH laa-jawaab hai! Khaas kar is maiN maujood jiddat ne bohut muta'accir kiyaa jo aap ka KhaaSSa bantaa jaarahaa hai ! naye mazaamen naye duar k Hisaab se , aur phir Safaayee ! ye sab cheezeN aap ko mumtaaz rakHtee haiN ! tamaam ash'aar apnee apnee jaga Khoob haiN ! daad qabool kejeye ! shukriya

moKhliS : Zia Baloch
Dikhaadi shaan, phir ahl-e-chaman ko, Be-niyaazi ki

Khamoshi se jhatak kar, aaj phir, dast-e-sabaa maiN ne

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Star Mind wrote:moHtaram Jawaid Baduni SaaHib, aadaab

janaab Ghazal to hamesha ki t^araH laa-jawaab hai! Khaas kar is maiN maujood jiddat ne bohut muta'accir kiyaa jo aap ka KhaaSSa bantaa jaarahaa hai ! naye mazaamen naye duar k Hisaab se , aur phir Safaayee ! ye sab cheezeN aap ko mumtaaz rakHtee haiN ! tamaam ash'aar apnee apnee jaga Khoob haiN ! daad qabool kejeye ! shukriya

moKhliS : Zia Baloch
Azeezi Zia Baloch Sahab,
Aadaab

Aapki purKhuloos daad ke liye aapka behud mamnoon hooN. Mujhe khooshi hai aap phir dikhaayee dene lage haiN, warnah pichle dinoN to aap Ghaaib hi ho gaye thay. Ummid hai ab tamam ChaupaloN meN aate jate rahenge.

Apka mukhlis
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sara_j wrote:
jawaid badauni wrote:
Dosto aur saathiyo!
Salam qubool farmaaiye

Meri ek ghazal haazir-e khidmat hai. Kuch mun-
farid mazaamin per qalam uThane ki koshish ki
hai. Ummid hai apni aara se nawaazeNge aur
meri Hauclahafzaii farmayeNge.

Naacheez,

Jawaid Badauni
-----------------------------------------------

Ghazal

Tum ne miree yadoN ko saNbhala bhi nahiN hai
Pal bhar ke liye dil se nikala bhi nahiN hai


Eeman faroshi ka mire sir peh hai ilzaam
Aur haath meN sone ka niwalah bhi nahiN hai


Iss daur ke Rawan ka sitam phir bhi hai jaari
Seeta ne qadam ghar se nikala bhi nahiN hai


Yeh mana keh ab ghar meN nahiN teeragi-e shub
Per sub,H kahooN aisa ujala bhi nahiN hai


Muflis hooN kahaN ghar ki hifazat ka mujhe Khauf
Soya bhi hooN darwaze meN tala bhi nahiN hai


Ayyam-e masarrat thay to ahbaab bhi thay saath
Mushkil meN koii poochne wala bhi nahiN hai


Dekho to miyaaN kaisa ajab shaKhs hai "Jawaid"
Aibee bhi nahiN KhoobiyoN wala bhi nahin hai.


Jawaid Badauni


jawaid bhai,

tasleemat.

wah kya baat hai.........bohat khoob!

Tum ne miree yadoN ko saNbhala bhi nahiN hai
Pal bhar ke liye dil se nikala bhi nahiN hai

bohat ache! shair pasand aaya! :-)

Iss daur ke Rawan ka sitam phir bhi hai jaari
Seeta ne qadam ghar se nikala bhi nahiN hai

wah waah!

Ayyam-e masarrat thay to ahbaab bhi thay saath
Mushkil meN koii poochne wala bhi nahiN hai

very nice!

Dekho to miyaaN kaisa ajab shaKhs hai "Jawaid"
Aibee bhi nahiN KhoobiyoN wala bhi nahin hai.

:grin: bohat khoob!

bhai ye ashaar bohat ziyada pasand aaye.
aek kamyaab ghazal per daad qubool keejiye.

mukhlis

sara
Azeezah Sara Sahibah,

Ghazal ki pazeeraai ke liye aap ka mamnoon hoN. Ummid hai aaindah bhi apne tabsaroN se nawazti raheNgee.

Bahut bahut shukriya bahin.

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jawaid badauni wrote:
Eeman faroshi ka mire sir peh hai ilzaam
Aur haath meN sone ka niwalah bhi nahiN hai


Iss daur ke Rawan ka sitam phir bhi hai jaari
Seeta ne qadam ghar se nikala bhi nahiN hai


Muflis hooN kahaN ghar ki hifazat ka mujhe Khauf
Soya bhi hooN darwaze meN tala bhi nahiN hai


Dekho to miyaaN kaisa ajab shaKhs hai "Jawaid"
Aibee bhi nahiN KhoobiyoN wala bhi nahin hai.

Waah waah bohot khoob....bohot pasand aayi aap ki ghazal.

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Anmol wrote:
jawaid badauni wrote:
Eeman faroshi ka mire sir peh hai ilzaam
Aur haath meN sone ka niwalah bhi nahiN hai


Iss daur ke Rawan ka sitam phir bhi hai jaari
Seeta ne qadam ghar se nikala bhi nahiN hai


Muflis hooN kahaN ghar ki hifazat ka mujhe Khauf
Soya bhi hooN darwaze meN tala bhi nahiN hai


Dekho to miyaaN kaisa ajab shaKhs hai "Jawaid"
Aibee bhi nahiN KhoobiyoN wala bhi nahin hai.

Waah waah bohot khoob....bohot pasand aayi aap ki ghazal.

:-)
Anmol Sahibah

Aapka jawab nazar nawaz hoa. Bahut Khooshi hoii.

Bahut bahut shukriya.

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Bahut khoob waah waah

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MuHtarami o Azeezi
Jawaid Badayuni Saahib,

Purkhuloos Tasleemaat,

Aapki mandarja-e-zel ghazal paRhkar maiN bahut luTf andouz houaa. Hameshah kii tarah mukhtalif mazaameen se aaraastah hei.

Ghazal

Tum ne miree yadoN ko saNbhala bhi nahiN hai
Pal bhar ke liye dil se nikala bhi nahiN hai


Eeman faroshi ka mire sir peh hai ilzaam
Aur haath meN sone ka niwalah bhi nahiN hai


Iss daur ke Rawan ka sitam phir bhi hai jaari
Seeta ne qadam ghar se nikala bhi nahiN hai


Yeh mana keh ab ghar meN nahiN teeragi-e shub
Per sub,H kahooN aisa ujala bhi nahiN hai


Muflis hooN kahaN ghar ki hifazat ka mujhe Khauf
Soya bhi hooN darwaze meN tala bhi nahiN hai


Ayyam-e masarrat thay to ahbaab bhi thay saath
Mushkil meN koii poochne wala bhi nahiN hai


Dekho to zaraa kaisa ajab shaKhs hai "Jawaid"
Aibee bhi nahiN KhoobiyoN wala bhi nahin hai.

Meri dili daad aur mubaarakbaad qubool farmaayiye.


Aapka Mukhlis,
Nazir.
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