Ghazal:kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa

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Ghazal:kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa

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'kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa',
sitam dhaaieyega tau pachtaaieyegaa..

na dil apna yuuN aap taRpaaiyegaa,
Khataa gar ho ham se tau samajhaaiyegaa..

agar muskuraane se naa ban sake baat,
tau aShkoN se daaman bhigo laaiyegaa..

haiN dar par tumhaare sadaa dast_basta,
jo ho hukm sarkaar farmaaiyegaa..

Khilona jo samjhaa, bane ham Khilona,
KhilonoN se kya dil ko behlaaiyega..

bagaawat, adaavat, jafaa aur zulmat,
muHabbat meiN kya raNg diKhlaaiyega..

bhulaane kee koShiSh kareiN ess tarah kee,
jo bhoole haiN ham ab, na yaad aaiyegaa..

muHabbat hai dil meiN Shikaayat zabaaN par,
kareN kya ab izhaar farmaaiyegaa..

judaa ho ke naa jee sakegaa yeh 'Ghaafil',
agar jaaieyegaa tau laut aaiyegaa..

Khair-aNdesh

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Maneesh 'Ghaafil' saheb
Jigar ki zameen meiN kahi gayi aap ki Ghazal ek bohat hi kaamyaab koshish hai. rawaaN aur salees.
meri jaanib se daad Haazir hai. qubool farmaaiye.
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Bahut khoob, waah waah

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MuHtarami
Manish Bansal 'Ghaafil'(Mayank) SaHib,

Aapki ghazal bahut pasand aayi jiske liye meri dili daad aur mubaarakbaad qubool farmaayiye.

MaqTeA ke pahle miSreA ko agar yooN kardeN tou behtar houjaayegaa kiyunkeh sirf "sakegaa" se baat vaaZeH nahiN hourahi hei.

Judaa houke ;GHAFIL; nahiN rehsakegaa
yaa
judaa houke ;GHAFIL: nahiN jee sakegaa



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Daanish wrote:Maneesh 'Ghaafil' saheb
Jigar ki zameen meiN kahi gayi aap ki Ghazal ek bohat hi kaamyaab koshish hai. rawaaN aur salees.
meri jaanib se daad Haazir hai. qubool farmaaiye.
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Daanish saahab,

Pranaam,

Aap ko meri yeH koShish pasand aaii, jaan kar behad achchha laga.. YuuN hee aage bhee apni raa'ey se zaroor nawaazeN..A aap kee daad hamaare liye beSh qeematii hai..

Aap ka

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Re: Bahut khoob, waah waah

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WEBMASTER wrote:
MuHtarami
Manish Bansal 'Ghaafil'(Mayank) SaHib,

Aapki ghazal bahut pasand aayi jiske liye meri dili daad aur mubaarakbaad qubool farmaayiye.

MaqTeA ke pahle miSreA ko agar yooN kardeN tou behtar houjaayegaa kiyunkeh sirf "sakegaa" se baat vaaZeH nahiN hourahi hei.

Judaa houke ;GHAFIL; nahiN rehsakegaa
yaa
judaa houke ;GHAFIL: nahiN jee sakegaa



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Nazir.[/i]

ustaad-e-mohtaram naazir saaheb,

Aadaab,

Ghazal ki pasaNdeedagi ke liye maiN aap ka mamnoon hooN! huzoor, chuuN ke aap aek ustaad shaa'ir haiN, is liye aap ki daad-o-taihseen Khaaksaar ke liye be-had hausila-afzaa hai. aap ki navaazish ke liye aap ka bohat bohat Shukriya...

Aap ne jo maqte ko duurust kar ke maqte kee raunak baRha dii hai.,. GuzaariSh hai kee aage bhee yuuN hee rehnumaa'i karte raheN.. ek aur Ghazal aap kee rehnumaai ke muntazir paRi huii hai.. agar aap uss par apni raa'ey deN tau Ghazal mukammal ho jaayegii..

aap ka,

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Janab Aadaab
kia kahne ,wah wah bahut khoob

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Mahtab Qadr wrote:Janab Aadaab
kia kahne ,wah wah bahut khoob

Mahtab Qadr
Mahtab saahab,

aadaab

Sab se pahle aap ne meri is haqeer koShish ko pasand kiya aur waqt nikaal kar hausal afzaayi ki yeH jaan kar bohat KhuShi huii.. ess liye sar-aa-paa mamnoon huuN... aap ki daad-o-mubaarak baad mere liye be-had hausala-afzaa'ii hai.

tah-e-dil se Shukriya..

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Ehsan Raza wrote:



Ehsaan saahab,

Aadaab,

Aap Khud ek kuhna-mashq Shaayar haiN, ess liye aap ki daad-o-mubaarak baad mere liye be-had hausala-afzaa'ii hai. aap ko yeH andaaz pasand aaya jaan kar behad KhuShi huii... aap ki navaaziSh ke liye aap ka bohat bohat Shukriya. yuuN hii aate raheN..

-Mayank
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janab Mayank SaHeb aadaab!

beHr-e-mutqarib mucamman salim meN aap kee yeh Ghazal bohot pasand aaee.
meree janib se dilee mubarak baad aor dad ubool kijiYe!

ummeed hai aae,ndah bh~ee apne kalam se meHfil ko garmate raheN ge.

Wassalam
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Re: Ghazal:kahaaN tak kisi par sitam dhhaaiyegaa

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Aadaab, Mayank SaaHib!

Aap ko is bazm meiN dekh kar Khushi hui. Aap ki ghazal ka lehja bohot dilchasp laga. Sabhi ashaar paRh kar lutf aaya, daad qubool kijiye.

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