NAZM=BETEE
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NAZM=BETEE
SATHIYO!
AADAAB
aaj ek nazm leka hazir hooN.ye nazm kaee mushairoN meiN farmaaish par bhi suna chukii hooN.nazm to jesii bhji hay, lekin ummeed hay keh iska mauzuu, apko zarooer pasand aeyga.ye nazm aaj ke daur ke ek larzah-khez saanihe se muta,ccar ho kar sar zad huee thii, is meiN aawurd ka dakhl naheeN, ye sarasar aamad hay.
aap bhi dekhiye aurapnii aaraa, se nawaziye.
asaatiza-e-kiraam se islaah ki bhi darkhaast hay. :P
arz kartii chalooN , keh merii koee betee to naheeN, lekin ek maaN aur betee ke ehsasaat to har dil meiN hote haiN.
ab aap hi ye nazm paRhiye aur bataiyye, kesii lagii
den hay qudrat! tirii, malik! tira eh,saan hay [-o<
chaand see betee ataa kii, jo aziz az jaan hay
bachpane meiN khel guRyoN ke bohat khele, magar
aaj jo paaee hay guRya, wo miree pehchaan hay
nau maheene khaab bun,ne meiN jo guzre haiN, na pooch :P
dard jo maiN ne sahay, tera karam, rehmaan! hay [-o<
sadqe waarii ho ke bhaee choomte haiN tere haath :rose
tujh meiN hay abuu ki, aur abbu meiN terii jaan hay :rose
ye dar-o-deewaar haiN sau jaan se tujh par fidaa
teri aamad se miraa ghar khushyoN ka unwaan hay :rose :rose
aankh se mujhko tasawwur ki ye aata hay nazar
waqt ik raftaar se kis tarha jata hay guzar
ghuTnoN ke bal chalte chalte tuu kabhi gir jaaey gii :P
girte girte ek din chal kar mire paas aaey gii
mast hi kar jaaey gii ma,soom see har har ada
totlee guftaar terii har kisii ko bhaaey gii lol
paRh ke bismillaah, che kalme sikhaaooN gii tujhe
din meiN sau sau baar un kalmoN ko tuu dohraaey gii
nursury, school, phir college ka daur_ajaaey gaa :comp
sir balandii paaungii, jab digriyaaN tuu laaey gii =D>
ek din shaadii ke phir paiGhaam, tere aaeiN gay
mashwara tujh se karooNgii, tuu bohat sharmaaey gii
ek anjaane khatar se khauf saa aane laga
fikr ka lamha mire ehsaas pe chaane laga
chaa rahii hay chaar suu kaisii balaa, hanstii huee
maGhribii tehzeeb kii kalii ghataa, uThtee huee
munh chiRaatii hay hamarii mashriqii tehzeeb ka
izzat-o-naamoos ki dhajji har-ik, uRtee huee
raat ki raanii bhi apnii zaat meiN meh,boos hay
chand sikkoN ke liye baazaar meiN biktii huee
mar gaee Ghairat se shaaKh-e-gul, jo guzra saaniha
raat uski hi kalii, be-aab saa motii huee
lekin aiy lakht-e-jigar! tuu hay mira woh e,timaad 8)
jheel meiN jaise keh ho bas, chaandinii chantii huee
aaj hay NAJMA, watan kii maaN , tuu kal keh,laaey gii
sham,a ban ke har andhere ko nigaltii jaaey gii
AADAAB
aaj ek nazm leka hazir hooN.ye nazm kaee mushairoN meiN farmaaish par bhi suna chukii hooN.nazm to jesii bhji hay, lekin ummeed hay keh iska mauzuu, apko zarooer pasand aeyga.ye nazm aaj ke daur ke ek larzah-khez saanihe se muta,ccar ho kar sar zad huee thii, is meiN aawurd ka dakhl naheeN, ye sarasar aamad hay.
aap bhi dekhiye aurapnii aaraa, se nawaziye.
asaatiza-e-kiraam se islaah ki bhi darkhaast hay. :P
arz kartii chalooN , keh merii koee betee to naheeN, lekin ek maaN aur betee ke ehsasaat to har dil meiN hote haiN.
ab aap hi ye nazm paRhiye aur bataiyye, kesii lagii
den hay qudrat! tirii, malik! tira eh,saan hay [-o<
chaand see betee ataa kii, jo aziz az jaan hay
bachpane meiN khel guRyoN ke bohat khele, magar
aaj jo paaee hay guRya, wo miree pehchaan hay
nau maheene khaab bun,ne meiN jo guzre haiN, na pooch :P
dard jo maiN ne sahay, tera karam, rehmaan! hay [-o<
sadqe waarii ho ke bhaee choomte haiN tere haath :rose
tujh meiN hay abuu ki, aur abbu meiN terii jaan hay :rose
ye dar-o-deewaar haiN sau jaan se tujh par fidaa
teri aamad se miraa ghar khushyoN ka unwaan hay :rose :rose
aankh se mujhko tasawwur ki ye aata hay nazar
waqt ik raftaar se kis tarha jata hay guzar
ghuTnoN ke bal chalte chalte tuu kabhi gir jaaey gii :P
girte girte ek din chal kar mire paas aaey gii
mast hi kar jaaey gii ma,soom see har har ada
totlee guftaar terii har kisii ko bhaaey gii lol
paRh ke bismillaah, che kalme sikhaaooN gii tujhe
din meiN sau sau baar un kalmoN ko tuu dohraaey gii
nursury, school, phir college ka daur_ajaaey gaa :comp
sir balandii paaungii, jab digriyaaN tuu laaey gii =D>
ek din shaadii ke phir paiGhaam, tere aaeiN gay
mashwara tujh se karooNgii, tuu bohat sharmaaey gii
ek anjaane khatar se khauf saa aane laga
fikr ka lamha mire ehsaas pe chaane laga
chaa rahii hay chaar suu kaisii balaa, hanstii huee
maGhribii tehzeeb kii kalii ghataa, uThtee huee
munh chiRaatii hay hamarii mashriqii tehzeeb ka
izzat-o-naamoos ki dhajji har-ik, uRtee huee
raat ki raanii bhi apnii zaat meiN meh,boos hay
chand sikkoN ke liye baazaar meiN biktii huee
mar gaee Ghairat se shaaKh-e-gul, jo guzra saaniha
raat uski hi kalii, be-aab saa motii huee
lekin aiy lakht-e-jigar! tuu hay mira woh e,timaad 8)
jheel meiN jaise keh ho bas, chaandinii chantii huee
aaj hay NAJMA, watan kii maaN , tuu kal keh,laaey gii
sham,a ban ke har andhere ko nigaltii jaaey gii
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Last edited by najma on Sat May 21, 2005 12:51 am, edited 3 times in total.
waah Namja ji,
buaht hi hassaas mozoo' aur nihaayat hee umdah andaaz.e.biyaaN!
aap ne vaaqa'ee dil ko choone waalee nazm takhliq kee hai.
meree taraf se dhair saaree daad qubool kijiye!
mukhlis
Naheed
aapki daad sir aaNkhoN pe naheed v sahiba!
is hausla-afzaee ke liye mamnoon hooN
khair andesh
najma
buaht hi hassaas mozoo' aur nihaayat hee umdah andaaz.e.biyaaN!
aap ne vaaqa'ee dil ko choone waalee nazm takhliq kee hai.
meree taraf se dhair saaree daad qubool kijiye!
mukhlis
Naheed
aapki daad sir aaNkhoN pe naheed v sahiba!
is hausla-afzaee ke liye mamnoon hooN
khair andesh
najma
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moHtarama Najma SaaHiba, aadaab :)
aap ki kaavish har i'tebaar se mukammal kaavish hai , aur mujhe nazar aarahi hai :)
kaavish har kiHaaz se bahut KhoobSoorat hai , daad qabool kejeye
shukriyaa
moKhliS : Zia Baloch
aap ki kaavish har i'tebaar se mukammal kaavish hai , aur mujhe nazar aarahi hai :)
kaavish har kiHaaz se bahut KhoobSoorat hai , daad qabool kejeye
shukriyaa
moKhliS : Zia Baloch
Dikhaadi shaan, phir ahl-e-chaman ko, Be-niyaazi ki
Khamoshi se jhatak kar, aaj phir, dast-e-sabaa maiN ne
Zia Baloch
Khamoshi se jhatak kar, aaj phir, dast-e-sabaa maiN ne
Zia Baloch
Re: NAZM=BETEE
najma wrote:SATHIYO!
AADAAB
aaj ek nazm leka hazir hooN.ye nazm kaee mushairoN meiN farmaaish par bhi suna chukii hooN.nazm to jesii bhji hay, lekin ummeed hay keh iska mauzuu, apko zarooer pasand aeyga.ye nazm aaj ke daur ke ek larzah-khez saanihe se muta,ccar ho kar sar zad huee thii, is meiN aawurd ka dakhl naheeN, ye sarasar aamad hay.
aap bhi dekhiye aurapnii aaraa, se nawaziye.
asaatiza-e-kiraam se islaah ki bhi darkhaast hay. :P
arz kartii chalooN , keh merii koee betee to naheeN, lekin ek maaN aur betee ke ehsasaat to har dil meiN hote haiN.
ab aap hi ye nazm paRhiye aur bataiyye, kesii lagii
den hay qudrat! tirii, malik! tira eh,saan hay [-o<
chaand see betee ataa kii, jo aziz az jaan hay
bachpane meiN khel guRyoN ke bohat khele, magar
aaj jo paaee hay guRya, wo miree pehchaan hay
nau maheene khaab bun,ne meiN jo guzre haiN, na pooch :P
dard jo maiN ne sahay, tera karam, rehmaan! hay [-o<
sadqe waarii ho ke bhaee choomte haiN tere haath :rose
tujh meiN hay abuu ki, aur abbu meiN terii jaan hay :rose
ye dar-o-deewaar haiN sau jaan se tujh par fidaa
teri aamad se miraa ghar khushyoN ka unwaan hay :rose :rose
aankh se mujhko tasawwur ki ye aata hay nazar
waqt ik raftaar se kis tarha jata hay guzar
ghuTnoN ke bal chalte chalte tuu kabhi gir jaaey gii :P
girte girte ek din chal kar mire paas aaey gii
mast hi kar jaaey gii ma,soom see har har ada
totlee guftaar terii har kisii ko bhaaey gii lol
paRh ke bismillaah, che kalme sikhaaooN gii tujhe
din meiN sau sau baar un kalmoN ko tuu dohraaey gii
nursury, school, phir college ka daur_ajaaey gaa :comp
sir balandii paaungii, jab digriyaaN tuu laaey gii =D>
ek din shaadii ke phir paiGhaam, tere aaeiN gay
mashwara tujh se karooNgii, tuu bohat sharmaaey gii
ek anjaane khatar se khauf saa aane laga
fikr ka lamha mire ehsaas pe chaane laga
chaa rahii hay chaar suu kaisii balaa, hanstii huee
maGhribii tehzeeb kii kalii ghataa, uThtee huee
munh chiRaatii hay hamarii mashriqii tehzeeb ka
izzat-o-naamoos ki dhajji har-ik, uRtee huee
raat ki raanii bhi apnii zaat meiN meh,boos hay
chand sikkoN ke liye baazaar meiN biktii huee
mar gaee Ghairat se shaaKh-e-gul, jo guzra saaniha
raat uski hi kalii, be-aab saa motii huee
lekin aiy lakht-e-jigar! tuu hay mira woh e,timaad 8)
jheel meiN jaise keh ho bas, chaandinii chantii huee
aaj hay NAJMA, watan kii maaN , tuu kal keh,laaey gii
sham,a ban ke har andhere ko nigaltii jaaey gii
bachpane meiN khel guRyoN ke bohat khele, magar
aaj jo paaee hay guRya, wo miree pehchaan hay
ye shair meray liye likha hai kya?????????
mazak bartaraf bohot he acha likha hai ap ne bohot pasand aya
naheedv wrote:waah Namja ji,
buaht hi hassaas mozoo' aur nihaayat hee umdah andaaz.e.biyaaN!
aap ne vaaqa'ee dil ko choone waalee nazm takhliq kee hai.
meree taraf se dhair saaree daad qubool kijiye!
mukhlis
Naheed
aapki daad sir aaNkhoN pe naheed v sahiba!
is hausla-afzaee ke liye mamnoon hooN
khair andesh
najma
naheedv wrote:waah Namja ji,
buaht hi hassaas mozoo' aur nihaayat hee umdah andaaz.e.biyaaN!
aap ne vaaqa'ee dil ko choone waalee nazm takhliq kee hai.
meree taraf se dhair saaree daad qubool kijiye!
mukhlis
Naheed
aapki daad sir aaNkhoN pe naheed v sahiba!
is hausla-afzaee ke liye mamnoon hooN
khair andesh
najma
is pazeeraaee ke liye behab shukriya naheed v sahiba!
sada khush rahiye
khair andesh
najma
Star Mind wrote:moHtarama Najma SaaHiba, aadaab :)
aap ki kaavish har i'tebaar se mukammal kaavish hai , aur mujhe nazar aarahi hai :)
kaavish har kiHaaz se bahut KhoobSoorat hai , daad qabool kejeye
shukriyaa
moKhliS : Zia Baloch
zia baloch sahib!
aadaab
is pazeeraaee ke liye ham aap ke be-had mamnoon haiN.
bohat shukriya
khush rahiyye
kair andesh
najma
Re: NAZM=BETEE
gurya wrote:najma wrote:SATHIYO!
AADAAB
aaj ek nazm leka hazir hooN.ye nazm kaee mushairoN meiN farmaaish par bhi suna chukii hooN.nazm to jesii bhji hay, lekin ummeed hay keh iska mauzuu, apko zarooer pasand aeyga.ye nazm aaj ke daur ke ek larzah-khez saanihe se muta,ccar ho kar sar zad huee thii, is meiN aawurd ka dakhl naheeN, ye sarasar aamad hay.
aap bhi dekhiye aurapnii aaraa, se nawaziye.
asaatiza-e-kiraam se islaah ki bhi darkhaast hay. :P
arz kartii chalooN , keh merii koee betee to naheeN, lekin ek maaN aur betee ke ehsasaat to har dil meiN hote haiN.
ab aap hi ye nazm paRhiye aur bataiyye, kesii lagii
guRya
ye nazm ham ne sbhi achii achii aur pyarii pyarii bachiyoN k liye likhi hay.tum bhi un meiN yaqeenanshamil ho, aur wese bhi tumhara to naam hi GURYA hay.
sada khush raho
bohat shukriya
den hay qudrat! tirii, malik! tira eh,saan hay [-o<
chaand see betee ataa kii, jo aziz az jaan hay
bachpane meiN khel guRyoN ke bohat khele, magar
aaj jo paaee hay guRya, wo miree pehchaan hay
nau maheene khaab bun,ne meiN jo guzre haiN, na pooch :P
dard jo maiN ne sahay, tera karam, rehmaan! hay [-o<
sadqe waarii ho ke bhaee choomte haiN tere haath :rose
tujh meiN hay abuu ki, aur abbu meiN terii jaan hay :rose
ye dar-o-deewaar haiN sau jaan se tujh par fidaa
teri aamad se miraa ghar khushyoN ka unwaan hay :rose :rose
aankh se mujhko tasawwur ki ye aata hay nazar
waqt ik raftaar se kis tarha jata hay guzar
ghuTnoN ke bal chalte chalte tuu kabhi gir jaaey gii :P
girte girte ek din chal kar mire paas aaey gii
mast hi kar jaaey gii ma,soom see har har ada
totlee guftaar terii har kisii ko bhaaey gii lol
paRh ke bismillaah, che kalme sikhaaooN gii tujhe
din meiN sau sau baar un kalmoN ko tuu dohraaey gii
nursury, school, phir college ka daur_ajaaey gaa :comp
sir balandii paaungii, jab digriyaaN tuu laaey gii =D>
ek din shaadii ke phir paiGhaam, tere aaeiN gay
mashwara tujh se karooNgii, tuu bohat sharmaaey gii
ek anjaane khatar se khauf saa aane laga
fikr ka lamha mire ehsaas pe chaane laga
chaa rahii hay chaar suu kaisii balaa, hanstii huee
maGhribii tehzeeb kii kalii ghataa, uThtee huee
munh chiRaatii hay hamarii mashriqii tehzeeb ka
izzat-o-naamoos ki dhajji har-ik, uRtee huee
raat ki raanii bhi apnii zaat meiN meh,boos hay
chand sikkoN ke liye baazaar meiN biktii huee
mar gaee Ghairat se shaaKh-e-gul, jo guzra saaniha
raat uski hi kalii, be-aab saa motii huee
lekin aiy lakht-e-jigar! tuu hay mira woh e,timaad 8)
jheel meiN jaise keh ho bas, chaandinii chantii huee
aaj hay NAJMA, watan kii maaN , tuu kal keh,laaey gii
sham,a ban ke har andhere ko nigaltii jaaey gii
bachpane meiN khel guRyoN ke bohat khele, magar
aaj jo paaee hay guRya, wo miree pehchaan hay
ye shair meray liye likha hai kya?????????
mazak bartaraf bohot he acha likha hai ap ne bohot pasand aya
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