Ibn-e-Siddique Sahib

Aadaab

bohot hi umda aur khoobsoorat ghazal haiy, lafz aur maaine dono hi dil choo lene waale hain. giraah bhi bohot khoob baandhi haiy aapne, ghazal ka har sheyr bazaaye khud taareef haiy magar ye sheyr sabse ziyada pasand aayaa

zeib detaa hi nahiN mujh ko mukammal hona ...

aslaam_u_alikam

ae dost aa bhi jaa keh teraa intizaar hey
khaamosh hun magar meraa dil bekaraar hey

aankhien yeh raasta teraa dekhein hain baar baar
aur ab bhi bepanaah mujhey tujh sey pyaar hey

her dam key jhootey wadon sey yeh dil figaar hey
is dil ko merey tujh sey shikayat hazaar hey ...

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v459/nobody4ever/qarar.jpg

Safiya ji k liay Roman maiN :-)


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Qaraar kho k dil-e-be qaraar baaqee hai
jo zakhm khaaey heN un kaa shumaar baaqee hai

2-
ubuur ker tau chukee dasht maiN junooN kaa magar
hanuuz saamne ik raigzaar baaqee hai

3 ...

aslaam_u_alikam

guz#43 per kuch mian ney bhi likha hey. jo aap sa key samney hazir hey.
umeed ekrti hun keh aap sab apnii aara sey zaroor nawaazein gey.

chaand taarey bhi jab rooTh jaaney lagey
hum terii yaad sey gher sajaaney lagye

choR ker jab mujhe door jaane lage
dermiyaaN faasalon ko ...

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v459/nobody4ever/qarar.jpg

Tahira saheba :o
Aadaab kubool karen, taareef aur shiqayat dono hi lekar aayee hun mey aapke paas, aapki ghazal paDne ki koshish ki :? aur jitni bhi paD paayee bohot acchhee lagi. :grin:

shiqayat kyaa guzaarish samjhen, ke baDi ...

Apni aik ghazal aap sub ahbaab ki khidmat mein paish kar raha houn parh kar apni aa'ra say zaroor nawaziyay ga.

YEHI AHWAAL RAKHNAY HAIN ISI HAALAT MEIN REHNA HAI
YEH HUM NAY TAY KIYA HAI AB YOUNHI WEHSHAT MEIN REHNA HAI

KOYEE MAUSAM KOYEE RUT HO TUMHARAY QURB KI HUM KO
KABHI KHAWAHISH MEIN REHNA ...

Badla nahi hai jaada e manzil tamaam umr
mahwer se kab hata hai mera dil tamaam umr

uljhaa raha hai zahir o batin ki jang mai
mai khud na ban sakaa mere qabil tamaam umr

ehsaan mujh pe kargayaa ban kar adoo mera
tha merey dostoN mai jo shamil tamaam umr

mai aks ban ke deeda o dil mai basaa ...

Sarwar sahab

bohot umda nazm haiy , mubarakbaad kubool karen.
chot kaafi gehri maaloom hoti haiy, yun lagha ke khushi, ghum, mohabbat, tawakku, har kashmakash ko kalam band kar liya haiy aapne.

Safiya

Zia sahab
Aadaab aur tasleemaat kubool karen, ye aapki pehli ghazal paDi haiy humne, aur choonke abhi yahaan ziyada din nahi huve hain isiliye is tarahi misre waali ghazal kisi aur ki abhi nahi paDi haiy humne.

haan albatta aapki ghazal bohot pasand aayee, sheyr 4,6,9 aur 10 bohot pasand aaye ...

Asad saahab

Bohot hi khoobssorti se girah baandhi haiy aapne, ghazal ka har sheyr khoob-dar-khoob haiy

maghar ye kuch ziyada pasand aayen hain

dasht-e-furqat meiN vo choR aaye hameN
un se milne meiN ham ko zamaane lage

chehra apnaa khud aksar lagaa ajnabee
apne qisse hameN khud fasaane lage ...

Aadaab,

Waah bohot khoob, ghazal ka mizaaz bhi judaa haiy aur andaaz bhi juda,

veyse aapki ye ghazal kisi taareef ki mohtaaj nahi lekin ye kehna zaroori haiy ke kaafi arse baad itni acchhi ghazal paDi haiy ,jiske har lafz se sehmat hoon main.

Zindaghi ke behad kaDvi haqeeqton ko bohot hi ...

salaam dosto,

aaj aapkii Khidmat meN apnii ek bahot hii puraanii Ghazal pesh karne kii jasaarat kar rahaa huuN is ummeed ke saath ki aapkii tab'a-e-naazuk par baar-e-giraaN na hogii. shukria.

1.
kia kahuN? kaise kahuN? kiuN baat aadhi raih gai!
ho gai nisbat magar hone se shaadi raih gai ...

Azeezaan-e-bazm
Aadaab-o-tasleemat

ek baar phir ham iss bazm meN maujood heN apni ek taaz ba taaza tuk' bandi ke saat jo jaise jaise bina soche samjhe zabaan se adaa hotaa raha ham likhte chale gaye aur yeh daikhe baghair ke ghazal ke mayaar par pooraa utartaa bhi hai yaa naheiN. :oops:

umeed ...

Assalam alaikum

Safiya Ji

main bhi bazm main aap ko Khush amadeed kehti hooN....aap nay kaha aap ko Urdu thik say bolni ya paRhni nahiN aati ..... lekin is ke bawujood aap ko shairi say ladao hai aur likhti bhi haiN mashaAllah...tou janab!!....muhabbat tou Khud bohut say maraahil aasan kar deti ...

sbashwar wrote:Mohtarama Safiya Sahiba
Walaikom Salaam
Khush-Amdeed.

Mohatram sbashwar sahib aapki inayat aur maharbani ke lye mamnoon hoN.
safiya ali